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Can You Pass the Ketchup, Please

My Life As A Gluttojn

40 total reviews 
Comment from Fred Berg
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Whimsical with a sense of sarcasm and indifference. A couple lines didn't quite hook up for me, but the subject of the poem wouldn't care that it wasn't perfect would he? Fun choice!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    So what was the basis of the four star evaluation?
Comment from harmony13
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Excellent poem! The rhyming is great! The author's words made me
smile. They are engaging, fun, descriptive and creative. The words
of this poem flow and connect well. The artwork goes well with these
words. Have a great day!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Jacob David Collins
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I thought this was a fun piece and your last couple of lines made me smile at the end. I thought your poem was well written and your writing flowed well. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from lyenochka
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I'm laughing at your "disclaimer." Well, you did meet the requirement of one of the seven deadly sins but I would think a verbal retort about being "ugly" sounds like it should add to the sin. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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I really love numerous fruits, vegetables, baked chicken, etc. The problem is I also like every food you have named in this well-written, descriptive, amusing poem! Good job

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Eternal Muse
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I am smiling because I used to know a guy who looked just like that. A young man, he weighed close to 600 lbs. At this stage diets won't work, a person needs surgery.

A very fun poem, loved your rhymes and humor and that super picture. I wish you a lot of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
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I'm assuming Ketchup goes on everything. Best of luck with your "Deadly Sins" writing prompt entry. It was a pretty smooth read not to mention a bit funny. I said a "Bit". If I said hilarious, I wouldn't want to see all "That" bouncing up and down. Best regards.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from LisaMay
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This is a funny poem with creative rhyming couplets. I started feeling a bit queezy with all the food you were listing. Good to hear you you can lose weight - ugliness is permanent unfortunately.(Nicely derivative of Winston Churchill's retort to some woman when he was accused of being drunk.)

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from royowen
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That's a great joke, "I maybe Overweight, but I can diet, but you'll aways be ugly, heh heh, an excellent and humourlessly funny entry in this poetry contest, you have a great chance. Well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much Roy. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
reply by royowen on 24-Aug-2020
    Well done Earl,
Comment from RShipp
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I enjoyed your couplet rhymes.

You picked a great picture to illustrate this poor man's problem.

Best of luck with the Deadly Sins writing contest.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.