Can You Pass the Ketchup, Please
My Life As A Gluttojn40 total reviews
Comment from J. Dennis
Oh boy! Another member of the GOG or Good old Gluttonists club.
Your poem was so cool and non-fattening to boot. Love the items used that rhymed with the second line of the cuplet.
And I think that was my twin brother in the picture. (but I can eat three things at one time instead of two.)
Good luck in any contest this poem enters because the readers will be falling on the floor with laughter.
Have a good day.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Oh boy! Another member of the GOG or Good old Gluttonists club.
Your poem was so cool and non-fattening to boot. Love the items used that rhymed with the second line of the cuplet.
And I think that was my twin brother in the picture. (but I can eat three things at one time instead of two.)
Good luck in any contest this poem enters because the readers will be falling on the floor with laughter.
Have a good day.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the six star review. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Mia Twysted
To many people today eat and eat and eat. I myself eat when I get bored and it is not a good thing to do. This piece shows this sin very well. It brings it out into the open where hopefully it can help someone.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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To many people today eat and eat and eat. I myself eat when I get bored and it is not a good thing to do. This piece shows this sin very well. It brings it out into the open where hopefully it can help someone.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows a person who definitely has a problem that needs a 12-step program. If he could lose weight he would. That show he doesn't care about his looks or health. I think the last two stanzas are the retort of most overweight people to thin people who comment on their size.
Good luck, keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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This shows a person who definitely has a problem that needs a 12-step program. If he could lose weight he would. That show he doesn't care about his looks or health. I think the last two stanzas are the retort of most overweight people to thin people who comment on their size.
Good luck, keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much dragonpoet. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Don't mention it.
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Comment from Jasmine Girl
I really like this poem. It is so funny. I like the way it rhymes. You have mentioned all the fat food from chips to cheese, from cakes to pizza pies, and the beer in the end.
Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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I really like this poem. It is so funny. I like the way it rhymes. You have mentioned all the fat food from chips to cheese, from cakes to pizza pies, and the beer in the end.
Well done.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Certainly not politically correct :) but that is why it is fun, perhaps. It is a nod to the truth, and all of these vices are mine as well... even the snide remark at the end :)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Certainly not politically correct :) but that is why it is fun, perhaps. It is a nod to the truth, and all of these vices are mine as well... even the snide remark at the end :)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the Deadly Sins Poetry contest. It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the Deadly Sins Poetry contest. It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from joycetreasures
This is a cute poem about being gluttonous. Yes, gluttony is one of the deadly sins. And, not a good one!! Eating too much is definitely NOT GOOD. You did an amazing write-up on your poem. My down fall is also potato chips, Utz. But, I have better control than I did a few years ago. This a nicely written poem about eating way to much. Thanks. Happy future writing:-)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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This is a cute poem about being gluttonous. Yes, gluttony is one of the deadly sins. And, not a good one!! Eating too much is definitely NOT GOOD. You did an amazing write-up on your poem. My down fall is also potato chips, Utz. But, I have better control than I did a few years ago. This a nicely written poem about eating way to much. Thanks. Happy future writing:-)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Can You Pass the Ketchup Please?, denotes the banter that may well be the weapons of the over-eater who must suffer the slings and arrows of detractors.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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This poem, Can You Pass the Ketchup Please?, denotes the banter that may well be the weapons of the over-eater who must suffer the slings and arrows of detractors.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
My Life As A Gluttojn
Can You Pass the Ketchup, Please
Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the Deadly Sins writing prompt contest. I like the Rhyming. Great presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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My Life As A Gluttojn
Can You Pass the Ketchup, Please
Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the Deadly Sins writing prompt contest. I like the Rhyming. Great presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Boogienights
wonderful entry for the deadly sins contest. Really funny verse and hilarious picture to boot, this should do well in the contest. Best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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wonderful entry for the deadly sins contest. Really funny verse and hilarious picture to boot, this should do well in the contest. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
