A Silent Cry
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Shards"Development of Alzheimer's Disease.
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Comment from Alchera
Three harrowing stanzas of double reading: surreal / imaginative of vengeful resurrection towards one's destiny all wrapped up in the broken glass of unkept promises; the other reading is the surrounding reality of the disease that advances reducing the body of the beloved husband into a human larva which withers day after day, while you try to keep him alive with all the sustained frustration, suffering and even involuntary endurance and misunderstanding surrounded by his own existential void between the beloved and family member who attends him. Great poem of which there is still much to speak about.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Three harrowing stanzas of double reading: surreal / imaginative of vengeful resurrection towards one's destiny all wrapped up in the broken glass of unkept promises; the other reading is the surrounding reality of the disease that advances reducing the body of the beloved husband into a human larva which withers day after day, while you try to keep him alive with all the sustained frustration, suffering and even involuntary endurance and misunderstanding surrounded by his own existential void between the beloved and family member who attends him. Great poem of which there is still much to speak about.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Tony, you are a dear friend. Thanks for the great review and the stars.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You were right to feel as you did, Marjon. It is terrible having to watch your loved one wither away and there is nothing you can do--except be there and try to understand. But that is very hard and those feelings come out at times--maybe when unexpected. Your words are filled with deep imagery on such a personal level. The title reminds me of the broken pieces of what he once was and the broken dreams you and he had that were never realized.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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You were right to feel as you did, Marjon. It is terrible having to watch your loved one wither away and there is nothing you can do--except be there and try to understand. But that is very hard and those feelings come out at times--maybe when unexpected. Your words are filled with deep imagery on such a personal level. The title reminds me of the broken pieces of what he once was and the broken dreams you and he had that were never realized.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Jan, thank you for a wonderful review.
Comment from mermaids
There is emotion and feelings in your words. "I want the broken glass of promises so I can stab myself" are two powerful lines that convey the frustration of dealing with Alzheimer's. Your words are strong and many can relate.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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There is emotion and feelings in your words. "I want the broken glass of promises so I can stab myself" are two powerful lines that convey the frustration of dealing with Alzheimer's. Your words are strong and many can relate.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for this powerful review.
Comment from estory
This was surreal. These images of shards of glass broken in your hand, an angel without a bodily form, the mute child, the messenger without a message all swirl through the poem like a madcap dance. There's all this underlying tension, anger, frustration seething underneath the language on the surface. I really liked how you handled the images here and created this nightmare effect. estory
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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This was surreal. These images of shards of glass broken in your hand, an angel without a bodily form, the mute child, the messenger without a message all swirl through the poem like a madcap dance. There's all this underlying tension, anger, frustration seething underneath the language on the surface. I really liked how you handled the images here and created this nightmare effect. estory
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Wow, a review to be proud of. You, at your turn, got the essence of the poem with precision. Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. Sometimes we can get frustrated to care for someone who cannot interact with us on an intelligent level. We get angry when they seem to work against us to make it difficult for us.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. Sometimes we can get frustrated to care for someone who cannot interact with us on an intelligent level. We get angry when they seem to work against us to make it difficult for us.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you Sandra. Another understanding review.
Comment from bertodi
Marjon, passion beyond passion! As I put my pent up feelings into paintings, which is soothing and quieting, yours goes into your words. I can almost feel you spitting it out in anger, yet holding it all back. Fantastic struggle - mind over emotions!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Marjon, passion beyond passion! As I put my pent up feelings into paintings, which is soothing and quieting, yours goes into your words. I can almost feel you spitting it out in anger, yet holding it all back. Fantastic struggle - mind over emotions!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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I feel elated over your reviews. Thanks a bunch! 6 stars and all.
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deserved. I am moving so cannot answer a lot, but you should all know I am reading.
Comment from royowen
I can see how tough your days were at that time, but at the same time, they challenged your humanity quite profoundly. This is were faith and self leaves the home and hits the road, very challenging, left with your own thoughts, bouncing thoughts in your head and in your heart. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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I can see how tough your days were at that time, but at the same time, they challenged your humanity quite profoundly. This is were faith and self leaves the home and hits the road, very challenging, left with your own thoughts, bouncing thoughts in your head and in your heart. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Roy. Those were devastating years, I assure you.
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I can tell, some things we can Probably do without,
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I can tell, some things we can Probably do without,
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Yes, I know. But there was so little left...
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:))
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Lovely,
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Smiles. Bless you.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem tells the story of a man has betrayal of promise, despite frustration, he lives in faith; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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This poem tells the story of a man has betrayal of promise, despite frustration, he lives in faith; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thanks for the review!
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Marjon, this poem reads like the pleas of a VERY desperate person. And I capitalize that word intentionally as I try to describe how desperate.
Angry? Yes! Frustrated? Yes! ( these words you used ) but not strong enough to describe what your Poem Said.
( read again the first two lines of the second stanza )
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Dear Marjon, this poem reads like the pleas of a VERY desperate person. And I capitalize that word intentionally as I try to describe how desperate.
Angry? Yes! Frustrated? Yes! ( these words you used ) but not strong enough to describe what your Poem Said.
( read again the first two lines of the second stanza )
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Suzanna, thanks for a great review (again!)
Comment from BethShelby
With stress and worry it is easy to pity ourselves and feeling we are being let down. I can understand the feeling but you know in your heart he was not too blame and your probably felt guilty for having those thoughts.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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With stress and worry it is easy to pity ourselves and feeling we are being let down. I can understand the feeling but you know in your heart he was not too blame and your probably felt guilty for having those thoughts.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Oh yes, I did feel guilty, but still had those feelings from time to time. Thanks for the review, Beth.
