A Passing Shower
5-7-5 set in a garden...15 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the short 5-7-5 writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
This is a great entry for the short 5-7-5 writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Pretty as this is, there were much better entries in the contest.
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Well, you never know 'til the contest is over.
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Well... it is over and there were 5 more popular entries than mine. There are a lot of good writers on this site and it is always really interesting to see what is appealing to voters. I find i often vote for the eventual winner, but also sometimes my choice is far down the voting list. Poetry is so very personal.
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You are so right.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Passing Shower, has the right set up and inspects the effects which are a haze of pastels which veil the moisture laden greens all around ...
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
This 5-7-5, Passing Shower, has the right set up and inspects the effects which are a haze of pastels which veil the moisture laden greens all around ...
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Bill.
Comment from Mia Twysted
This piece helps give me the vision of a light rain on a warm summer day. You describe it as a if someone took the time to paint the piece of world in front of them capturing a moment in time.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
This piece helps give me the vision of a light rain on a warm summer day. You describe it as a if someone took the time to paint the piece of world in front of them capturing a moment in time.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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I was aiming for an artistic impression, so thanks for your accurate review.
Comment from RShipp
A beautiful illustration to go with your touching reminder of a time just after the rains.
Enjoyed the read.
Best of luck with the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
A beautiful illustration to go with your touching reminder of a time just after the rains.
Enjoyed the read.
Best of luck with the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is extremely an extremely delicate poem. Almost a proper Haiku rather than a simple 5-7-5. I hope it will do well in the contest. Thank you for submitting it.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
This is extremely an extremely delicate poem. Almost a proper Haiku rather than a simple 5-7-5. I hope it will do well in the contest. Thank you for submitting it.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reviewing! I like the haiku form.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A wonderful poem entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines...which improves flow. The presentation is beautiful.
The topic is relatable.... about nature.
Good luck in the contest. You are my favorite so far.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
Hello, anonymous,
A wonderful poem entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines...which improves flow. The presentation is beautiful.
The topic is relatable.... about nature.
Good luck in the contest. You are my favorite so far.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the supportive review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about that quick shower of rain that washes of the dust from the flowers and the leaves and leaving everything fresh when the sun re appears.
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about that quick shower of rain that washes of the dust from the flowers and the leaves and leaving everything fresh when the sun re appears.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You created a unique vision here of the rain as it blend into the scene and quenches our gardens with a light mist brushed with the finesse of an artist, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
You created a unique vision here of the rain as it blend into the scene and quenches our gardens with a light mist brushed with the finesse of an artist, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from mermaids
Your poem reminds me of a painting. "Garden backdrop blends its hues, lightly brushed in mist" gives the reader a clear vision of the garden and creates a picture of nature.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
Your poem reminds me of a painting. "Garden backdrop blends its hues, lightly brushed in mist" gives the reader a clear vision of the garden and creates a picture of nature.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your complimentary review.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Meets the 5-7-5 stipulations and restrictions. I found the imagery very interesting, "rinsed by rainfall's kiss" Your choice of picture also blends with the theme of the poem. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. Wishing you luck in the contest.
Meets the 5-7-5 stipulations and restrictions. I found the imagery very interesting, "rinsed by rainfall's kiss" Your choice of picture also blends with the theme of the poem. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. Wishing you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020