O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Snitz
I must say, I can not or have not yet written a pleasing Haiku that I am willing to share. I find it a bit difficult to express all that I would like to with in the confines of the Haiku rules.
You my friend did a fine job here! The imagery was great. I envisioned the booming storm, felt the thunder roar. Visualized the clouds across the sky become silvery white from the reflection of its density.
In the end, you are left to chose a fate.. I chose one of rest in the glory of the experience. As I have done on many occasion during a lightening storm.. Memories came to the forefront. Thanks! Snitz :0)
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I must say, I can not or have not yet written a pleasing Haiku that I am willing to share. I find it a bit difficult to express all that I would like to with in the confines of the Haiku rules.
You my friend did a fine job here! The imagery was great. I envisioned the booming storm, felt the thunder roar. Visualized the clouds across the sky become silvery white from the reflection of its density.
In the end, you are left to chose a fate.. I chose one of rest in the glory of the experience. As I have done on many occasion during a lightening storm.. Memories came to the forefront. Thanks! Snitz :0)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2006
Comment from Aleksandramarie
perfect, perfect to form..
projects an image, a mood...
stays in nature...
loved it...and of course I have to write, twice the
amount of words, in the review, than is in the
piece, smiles and thanks mspotter
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perfect, perfect to form..
projects an image, a mood...
stays in nature...
loved it...and of course I have to write, twice the
amount of words, in the review, than is in the
piece, smiles and thanks mspotter
Comment Written 29-Apr-2006
Comment from Twigs13
Bless you! I very much enjoyed your Haiku. It was electrifying and it tickled my tympanic membrane with the booming of the thunder. Now I choose rest. Thank you for sharing that one with all of us.
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Bless you! I very much enjoyed your Haiku. It was electrifying and it tickled my tympanic membrane with the booming of the thunder. Now I choose rest. Thank you for sharing that one with all of us.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2006
Comment from AmoksSoulmate
Great haiku. I truly liked the dichotomy between the darkness of the storm and the light of the lightning bolt and the end where it is ultimately our choice which path we follow. Thanks for sharing
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Great haiku. I truly liked the dichotomy between the darkness of the storm and the light of the lightning bolt and the end where it is ultimately our choice which path we follow. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 27-Apr-2006
Comment from kkholder
I like the inter-mix of human participation.... emotions... with the reality of nature. I saw the sky, heard the sky, felt surprise... nene needed to make a decision. Again... a decision. Interesting how so quick an event can force us into a nightime of thought.
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I like the inter-mix of human participation.... emotions... with the reality of nature. I saw the sky, heard the sky, felt surprise... nene needed to make a decision. Again... a decision. Interesting how so quick an event can force us into a nightime of thought.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2006
Comment from Freakairconditon ?
I don't sleep through the meteorologist either. He/she isn't as dramatic the weather's been this spring. I had trouble Haikuing my only one, but I got it.
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I don't sleep through the meteorologist either. He/she isn't as dramatic the weather's been this spring. I had trouble Haikuing my only one, but I got it.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2006
Comment from Pseudoname
I suppose it was a dark and stormy night, right? Your imagery is loud and clear, despite the brevity. You have guts, I'll say that. I can't write a shopping list that concisely!
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I suppose it was a dark and stormy night, right? Your imagery is loud and clear, despite the brevity. You have guts, I'll say that. I can't write a shopping list that concisely!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2006
Comment from KING SLATON
Haiku is far more difficult than it appears to be. Imagery through proper word choices is crutial to the success in this form. I feel this piece could use a bit more imagery.
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Haiku is far more difficult than it appears to be. Imagery through proper word choices is crutial to the success in this form. I feel this piece could use a bit more imagery.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
Comment from cheyennewy
A great haiku...I am fond of this terse form of poetry as well as synru, rictameter, acrostic etc. I write some and find them a definite challenge. To say much with little is a gift...you have done that here...cheyenne
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A great haiku...I am fond of this terse form of poetry as well as synru, rictameter, acrostic etc. I write some and find them a definite challenge. To say much with little is a gift...you have done that here...cheyenne
Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
Comment from lydiacalypso
hi,
i like the concept. where i think you were trying to go...but i am not sure if you made it. 'there' seems out of place in sound. and silver sky? hum. cheers. lydia
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hi,
i like the concept. where i think you were trying to go...but i am not sure if you made it. 'there' seems out of place in sound. and silver sky? hum. cheers. lydia
Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
