Comment from drivenbackward

Excellent

This is a nice little poem about lightning. I like the arrangement of words and the last line. That's the one that really gets you thinking. Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from Mrs Jones

Excellent

I am not quite sure what the last line means but I will give you benenfit of the doubt. The syllable count is perfect.

Cheers
Rose

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from Focused True North

Excellent

A short work with a big punch...interesting and vibrant haiku. This form is my favorite because of the depth of thought. Enjoyed experiencing yours!

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from proudgranny

Excellent

I know different poems mean different things to each of us. This poem reminds me of being in depression, seeing the silver light, and my mind choosing dark, light, or to just be in a dazed state. I enjoyed reading your Haiku, and it was very well done.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from skatermom - Robbi

Excellent

Now that I am getting a deeper understanding of what haikus are suppose mean, that is, contain a deeper meaning than the obvious, I am enjoying and respecting them more.- At least the ones you write.
It's a shame that you need the bottom author notes for readers who do not try to perceive the underlying message.
Rob~

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from luna

Excellent

Alcreator Writer - Another fine haiku -- I am very impressed by your talent. You are inspiring me to try my hand at another one of these. I labor under no delusions that my writes wilil be as striking as yours, but one can only start from the beginning.....thank you for the inspiration!

Yours,

Luna *smile*

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from R. McGeddon

Excellent

Allcreator, I am trying to get your meaning, but simplistically, you are just describing an impressive thunderstorm. Great images involked. Haiku needs no changes.

R. McGeddon

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from MikeSamford

Excellent

O T' bolt!
flash clears dark here, there -Action or Fate
Here / there - earth / Heaven? What we do here today We will find in heaven?
thunders shock, show silver sky - Activation or Formation
All see what we do, and Him too?
choose dark, light or rest! - Amplification or Fruition
We make our choice here now and live with it for ever.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from mhk

Excellent

Once again, your notes provide as much interest as your haiku. Complicated. Well thought out and structured. Visually...um...enlightening. Very nice.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006

Comment from mayflowerbg

Excellent

I feel that it will materialize into a thunderstorm, if I read it once more! A vivid picture of Nature's phenomena, yet it can be interpreted as a metaphor of destiny.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2006