O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Frank Furter
As previous reviewers said it describes the magic of a thunder storm and lighting bolts I have to disagree for I love the thunder and the lightning . The BANGS ! The Crashes ! The Beauty . Still such a short writing you did well to describe as much as you did . Thank you for sharing your work
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As previous reviewers said it describes the magic of a thunder storm and lighting bolts I have to disagree for I love the thunder and the lightning . The BANGS ! The Crashes ! The Beauty . Still such a short writing you did well to describe as much as you did . Thank you for sharing your work
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from terryangelo
Your piece may take one minute to read, but it takes a lot longer to ingest. I do love thunder and lightening storms. Great little haiku.
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Your piece may take one minute to read, but it takes a lot longer to ingest. I do love thunder and lightening storms. Great little haiku.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from Ladygreeneyes
Wow! so much description of a thunderstorm
in a liitle bit of words, vivid images and very
creative. nice energy flow, great expression!
loved it!
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Wow! so much description of a thunderstorm
in a liitle bit of words, vivid images and very
creative. nice energy flow, great expression!
loved it!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from memawdear
flash clears dark here, there
thunders shock, show silver sky
choose dark, light or rest!
This is my first Haiku ! Strong visuals and certainly makes you think. Thanks for sharing.
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flash clears dark here, there
thunders shock, show silver sky
choose dark, light or rest!
This is my first Haiku ! Strong visuals and certainly makes you think. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from starkat
Strong visual and auditory in a few words. Our senses are attuned to the moment. Will there be another flash of light, or thunder?...stay tuned. Keep your eye on the sky. I enjoyed the experience you created. My mind could rest, but it chooses to be a receptor to nature's next explosive art creation. Great job. Cheers. :-)
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Strong visual and auditory in a few words. Our senses are attuned to the moment. Will there be another flash of light, or thunder?...stay tuned. Keep your eye on the sky. I enjoyed the experience you created. My mind could rest, but it chooses to be a receptor to nature's next explosive art creation. Great job. Cheers. :-)
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from BellasTales
Hi Aw
Interesting Haiku- I too enjoy this form. Very challenging.
I thought you did well with following the guidelines for the Haiku.
BT
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Hi Aw
Interesting Haiku- I too enjoy this form. Very challenging.
I thought you did well with following the guidelines for the Haiku.
BT
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from trailblazer101
I guess I liked this one because I enjoy thundrstorms, even if I'm packing an ear damaged from a near miss. It takes a good eye to portray the flash against an inky backdrop and the bolt across.
flash clears dark here, there
thunders shock, show silver sky
And suddenly it's silvery, for the length of time we ahve eye retention.
Well done. I'll think of this poem next time we get a storm --like in about 15 minutes by the look of the sky right now outside.
Glad I bought a new surge protector!
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I guess I liked this one because I enjoy thundrstorms, even if I'm packing an ear damaged from a near miss. It takes a good eye to portray the flash against an inky backdrop and the bolt across.
flash clears dark here, there
thunders shock, show silver sky
And suddenly it's silvery, for the length of time we ahve eye retention.
Well done. I'll think of this poem next time we get a storm --like in about 15 minutes by the look of the sky right now outside.
Glad I bought a new surge protector!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from fhree
Hi
This shows a very good use of the jumble form of writing, which, in this instance, definitely is appropriate.
Just like the time during a thunder storm, where, light, waiting, dark, the sky, and the way the brightness of the flash seems to linger in your vision, getting mixed in with what you look at.
Definitely apt, and style relevant to the message, and the experience.
Good one.
Fhree
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Hi
This shows a very good use of the jumble form of writing, which, in this instance, definitely is appropriate.
Just like the time during a thunder storm, where, light, waiting, dark, the sky, and the way the brightness of the flash seems to linger in your vision, getting mixed in with what you look at.
Definitely apt, and style relevant to the message, and the experience.
Good one.
Fhree
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from Tallguy
A great visualisation of thunder and lightning in words. It reminds me of a storm I saw in New Hampshire once, the most awe inspiring display of nature's power I have ever witnessed. Very well done.
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A great visualisation of thunder and lightning in words. It reminds me of a storm I saw in New Hampshire once, the most awe inspiring display of nature's power I have ever witnessed. Very well done.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
Comment from naji
I try to judge poems not just on their conformation to rules of poetry but in addition that special something that makes the words leap from the page, or in some cases drag me into the poem, and I then when in I'm in, I can reach for the stars or relax and be seduced
flash clears dark here, there
thunders shock, show silver sky
choose dark, light or rest!
These words don't move me but I am prepared to accede the poet does not have much latitude. When you recite the words out loud they sound like instructions for playiing ludo
uthor's Notes This Haiku has @ 5-7-5 Syllables count and three phases or thought segmentation:
Line 1 = Action or Fate flash clears dark here, there
Line 2 = Activation or Formation !thunders shock, show silver sky
Line 3 = Amplification or Fruition choose dark, light or rest
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I try to judge poems not just on their conformation to rules of poetry but in addition that special something that makes the words leap from the page, or in some cases drag me into the poem, and I then when in I'm in, I can reach for the stars or relax and be seduced
flash clears dark here, there
thunders shock, show silver sky
choose dark, light or rest!
These words don't move me but I am prepared to accede the poet does not have much latitude. When you recite the words out loud they sound like instructions for playiing ludo
uthor's Notes This Haiku has @ 5-7-5 Syllables count and three phases or thought segmentation:
Line 1 = Action or Fate flash clears dark here, there
Line 2 = Activation or Formation !thunders shock, show silver sky
Line 3 = Amplification or Fruition choose dark, light or rest
Comment Written 05-Jun-2006
