O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Abbygal
I read this poem many times and still it was too deep for me. But something about it catches my interest. I like it. As far as the Haiku style of poetry goes, it fits well within the structure. These types of poems are not as easy to write as they seem. It is very, very hard to write something so profound with only a few words. I think you did a wonderful job.
Abbygal
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I read this poem many times and still it was too deep for me. But something about it catches my interest. I like it. As far as the Haiku style of poetry goes, it fits well within the structure. These types of poems are not as easy to write as they seem. It is very, very hard to write something so profound with only a few words. I think you did a wonderful job.
Abbygal
Comment Written 16-Apr-2006
Comment from cheyennewy
This is an unusual haiku...but then the entire form of haiku is rather unusual! You have written and presented this well. I like to see a poet say volumes with just a few terse lines...well done...cheyenne
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This is an unusual haiku...but then the entire form of haiku is rather unusual! You have written and presented this well. I like to see a poet say volumes with just a few terse lines...well done...cheyenne
Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
Comment from lydiacalypso
hi,
i think i is fun...what you are doing. but i am not sure it hits the mark. you start out strong and then overreach a bit. all the best, lydia
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hi,
i think i is fun...what you are doing. but i am not sure it hits the mark. you start out strong and then overreach a bit. all the best, lydia
Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
Comment from edinerie
Another fine example of the form. The opening line is particularly striking, and what follows is brought full circle with the final line. Overall an enjoyable read.
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Another fine example of the form. The opening line is particularly striking, and what follows is brought full circle with the final line. Overall an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
Comment from brownowl
o storm, what a rage!
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights
news spreads glow in dark
What a great way to explain a storm. The lines in your poem are great. You make me feel like life is a big storm. Great poem. Great read. Great short poem and to the point.
Brown Owl.
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o storm, what a rage!
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights
news spreads glow in dark
What a great way to explain a storm. The lines in your poem are great. You make me feel like life is a big storm. Great poem. Great read. Great short poem and to the point.
Brown Owl.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2006
Comment from Brantley88
At first, this seemed a little beyond my ability to decipher. But, after reading the Author's Notes, the meaning became very clear. This is really for one's who have deeper minds than I do. But, still a good write.
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At first, this seemed a little beyond my ability to decipher. But, after reading the Author's Notes, the meaning became very clear. This is really for one's who have deeper minds than I do. But, still a good write.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2006
Comment from shelley kaye
uhh whats this part mean --> [flow genes for lives] :-P
the middle line doesnt flow well either
it's kinda like randome word stuck together :-P
other than that, it was okay
thank you for sharing :-)
Sea~ Shell*s Thought For Today.... "Discover your companion's world. Two worlds are richer than one."
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uhh whats this part mean --> [flow genes for lives] :-P
the middle line doesnt flow well either
it's kinda like randome word stuck together :-P
other than that, it was okay
thank you for sharing :-)
Sea~ Shell*s Thought For Today.... "Discover your companion's world. Two worlds are richer than one."
Comment Written 14-Apr-2006
Comment from Zenbud
Another approachable write, my friend. Your writing is esoteric - intelligent, no doubt - the explanation assisted in my understanding. Most of us in the dark eating up what we are told, barely thinking for ourselves . . . is what I got out of it anyway . . . made me think - which is always a good thing! lol. Zen
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Another approachable write, my friend. Your writing is esoteric - intelligent, no doubt - the explanation assisted in my understanding. Most of us in the dark eating up what we are told, barely thinking for ourselves . . . is what I got out of it anyway . . . made me think - which is always a good thing! lol. Zen
Comment Written 14-Apr-2006
Comment from One Tooth Smile
Hey, I think this poem underwent some changes since last time I read it. I really enjoy it now. Good haiku with an interesting ending. Thanks for sharing,
One Tooth :)"
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Hey, I think this poem underwent some changes since last time I read it. I really enjoy it now. Good haiku with an interesting ending. Thanks for sharing,
One Tooth :)"
Comment Written 14-Apr-2006
Comment from rivki1111
Hi, its rivki...this is a good haiku. I enjoyed it very much as a work and also as a published work...color etc.
It gave me the impression you were talking about the huma condition of struggling from the moment we are born until the day you die....the flowing genes for lives.
I don't know if that makes a lot of sense, but poetry speaks to different people in different ways...thanks for sharing and happy holidays, rivki
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Hi, its rivki...this is a good haiku. I enjoyed it very much as a work and also as a published work...color etc.
It gave me the impression you were talking about the huma condition of struggling from the moment we are born until the day you die....the flowing genes for lives.
I don't know if that makes a lot of sense, but poetry speaks to different people in different ways...thanks for sharing and happy holidays, rivki
Comment Written 14-Apr-2006
