O My God and Mother Nature!
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "O Winds!"Appreciation of God and Mother Nature
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Comment from TheRunner
I don't know what these type writings are called but it does call for lots of thinking as to the writers thoughts and it looks like it's speaking of weather patterns and nature, i like riddles.
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I don't know what these type writings are called but it does call for lots of thinking as to the writers thoughts and it looks like it's speaking of weather patterns and nature, i like riddles.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from KING SLATON
I cannot extract a great deal of feeling from this piece but it does stay within the required structured format needed to properly create this kind of work.
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I cannot extract a great deal of feeling from this piece but it does stay within the required structured format needed to properly create this kind of work.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from mayflowerbg
O winds speed rage mode!
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights
news spreads, glow in dark!
Hi, Alcreator Writer!
It's a very complicated haiku and I may see my things in it, too. I hear the "winds" of change (in fact, they have been blowing right in my head for the last fifteen years, while I was seeking madly the "glow in the dark") I wish the "sky blush"-ed more "lights" upon our leaders, but I presume they are all old-gened and blood stuck, needing medicines for better irrigation of their brains.
Where can I find more about haiku? (A free site I mean, I can't afford buying literature)
Thanks for sharing!
Mayflower
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O winds speed rage mode!
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights
news spreads, glow in dark!
Hi, Alcreator Writer!
It's a very complicated haiku and I may see my things in it, too. I hear the "winds" of change (in fact, they have been blowing right in my head for the last fifteen years, while I was seeking madly the "glow in the dark") I wish the "sky blush"-ed more "lights" upon our leaders, but I presume they are all old-gened and blood stuck, needing medicines for better irrigation of their brains.
Where can I find more about haiku? (A free site I mean, I can't afford buying literature)
Thanks for sharing!
Mayflower
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from starkat
'News spreads' and 'genes flow' and 'winds speed'. Genes contain all the information necessary to perpetuate life and carry(flow) the news so that future lives will exist because of them. 'Sky blush lights' and 'glow in the dark!' add illumination to these ideas. Interesting piece. Got me thinking. Enjoyed the Haiku. Cheers. ;-)
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'News spreads' and 'genes flow' and 'winds speed'. Genes contain all the information necessary to perpetuate life and carry(flow) the news so that future lives will exist because of them. 'Sky blush lights' and 'glow in the dark!' add illumination to these ideas. Interesting piece. Got me thinking. Enjoyed the Haiku. Cheers. ;-)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from Ballarina
Beautiful and fresh, Creatively done. I enjoyed the experience although short it had lasting impact. Sometimes as in this case less says more and enough to leave a
feeling that last for longer than a lengthy piece
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Beautiful and fresh, Creatively done. I enjoyed the experience although short it had lasting impact. Sometimes as in this case less says more and enough to leave a
feeling that last for longer than a lengthy piece
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from Holle
I went back and forth on this one but you get a 5 for free form (no rules eh) but might I suggest this one thing, just redo the placement of the lines...see how nice it looks as if it dwindles down like nature only to built back up yet again! :-)
O' winds speed rage mode
Flow genes for lives
Sky blush lights
News spreads
Glow in dark
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I went back and forth on this one but you get a 5 for free form (no rules eh) but might I suggest this one thing, just redo the placement of the lines...see how nice it looks as if it dwindles down like nature only to built back up yet again! :-)
O' winds speed rage mode
Flow genes for lives
Sky blush lights
News spreads
Glow in dark
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from Auteur
I have not written a good haiku myself (yet!), but I certainly love to read them. Yours was exceptional. I especially enjoyed the exclamation points-- they really add an extra "umph" to your words. Great work!
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I have not written a good haiku myself (yet!), but I certainly love to read them. Yours was exceptional. I especially enjoyed the exclamation points-- they really add an extra "umph" to your words. Great work!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from Chadster81
Nice Haiku. A lot of information is given in that poem more than some stories. I am going to check out your work and would be honored as a newbie if you'd review mine as the #2 ranked reviewer.
Poem was intelligent and insightful.
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Nice Haiku. A lot of information is given in that poem more than some stories. I am going to check out your work and would be honored as a newbie if you'd review mine as the #2 ranked reviewer.
Poem was intelligent and insightful.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from rhymer1
A difficult vehicle to operate. As a passenger I can see many roads at once.
Excelent poetry paints a thousand pictures and means what the reader perceives as well as what the creator intended. I fear my interpretation(s) are not as subtile as your intent but I accept my limitations and enjoy the bit I can comprehend.
Cheers, Allister AKA rhymer1
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A difficult vehicle to operate. As a passenger I can see many roads at once.
Excelent poetry paints a thousand pictures and means what the reader perceives as well as what the creator intended. I fear my interpretation(s) are not as subtile as your intent but I accept my limitations and enjoy the bit I can comprehend.
Cheers, Allister AKA rhymer1
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from lovebear641
O winds speed rage mode!
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights
news spreads, glow in dark!
sorry al i'm not much or reviewing except to give an opinion ..but from my take ..its would seem that that news spread fast like a wildfire ..and especially bad news ..and the fire would light up the sky ...sure this isn't what you meant but its my take ..thx for sharing ...your always writing such good poems and i so enjoy reading them ...thx lovear
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O winds speed rage mode!
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights
news spreads, glow in dark!
sorry al i'm not much or reviewing except to give an opinion ..but from my take ..its would seem that that news spread fast like a wildfire ..and especially bad news ..and the fire would light up the sky ...sure this isn't what you meant but its my take ..thx for sharing ...your always writing such good poems and i so enjoy reading them ...thx lovear
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
