O My God and Mother Nature!
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "O Winds!"Appreciation of God and Mother Nature
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Comment from judybonin
beautiful writing here. I wouldnt change a thing. very nice.
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beautiful writing here. I wouldnt change a thing. very nice.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from cinnabarsls
Very concise, as I suppose haiku should be! Every word seemed carefully chosen; I like that. Thought provoking piece with so few words. Nicely done.
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Very concise, as I suppose haiku should be! Every word seemed carefully chosen; I like that. Thought provoking piece with so few words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Diny
Well I found this one with a banner advertisment FYI so you know they work! Not too please with this one for I am having a hard time following it You seem all over the place with this one....
Yes this is correct in structure (Count wise)
yet the message is so vague? And the only refrence to nature is the wind... so I am sorry this falls short in my book- Keep it uo though- write on DINY
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Well I found this one with a banner advertisment FYI so you know they work! Not too please with this one for I am having a hard time following it You seem all over the place with this one....
Yes this is correct in structure (Count wise)
yet the message is so vague? And the only refrence to nature is the wind... so I am sorry this falls short in my book- Keep it uo though- write on DINY
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from TrueBeliever
Hello AW, this is a poem of the times. Inventively worded and technically sound. The message here is volumes: Thoughts placed on the wind, find winged voices. TB
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Hello AW, this is a poem of the times. Inventively worded and technically sound. The message here is volumes: Thoughts placed on the wind, find winged voices. TB
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Josipher32
I think you definitely captured exactly what a haiku poem should be. Thank you for this lovely, simple and to the point, read. That's how I wish all poetry could be! Ha!
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I think you definitely captured exactly what a haiku poem should be. Thank you for this lovely, simple and to the point, read. That's how I wish all poetry could be! Ha!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Mountainstar2
GOOD WRITING...
Short and to the Point...
Keep Writing...
The only thing that I didn't like was the Poem was to short...
Maybe next time the Writing will be more so that the Reviewer
can feel like it gave it a Fair review...
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GOOD WRITING...
Short and to the Point...
Keep Writing...
The only thing that I didn't like was the Poem was to short...
Maybe next time the Writing will be more so that the Reviewer
can feel like it gave it a Fair review...
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from sandramarie
I keep telling you I'm not a fan of Haiku,
and yet you keep making me like yours! ;-)
This is, as always for you, wonderfully written
with well-chosen words (I love 'sky blush nights').
You say so much with with so few words.
Thanks for sharing.
Sandy
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I keep telling you I'm not a fan of Haiku,
and yet you keep making me like yours! ;-)
This is, as always for you, wonderfully written
with well-chosen words (I love 'sky blush nights').
You say so much with with so few words.
Thanks for sharing.
Sandy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from juliecaldwell
Very nice work here. You have said much with few words. I have always like haiku because of this. Very expressive, and you have kept tight to the rules. I like the imagery you have used, wind, speed, news. Thanks for sharing.
Julie
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Very nice work here. You have said much with few words. I have always like haiku because of this. Very expressive, and you have kept tight to the rules. I like the imagery you have used, wind, speed, news. Thanks for sharing.
Julie
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from Dream Walker
Japanese haiku often portray a snapshot of life, the lines forming a sentence or two to express that moment. In your haiku, there is so much going on in the short lines. Almost a Hubble Telescope snapshot of life. As poetry often invites multiple impressions, I got an impression of Genesis and Revelation - the wind of God moving across the dark waters, then there is light, then there is life, then there is hope. As a fan of the cosmic, I enjoyed this once I let my mind settle down and just ambrace it. Very well done!
Dream Walker
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Japanese haiku often portray a snapshot of life, the lines forming a sentence or two to express that moment. In your haiku, there is so much going on in the short lines. Almost a Hubble Telescope snapshot of life. As poetry often invites multiple impressions, I got an impression of Genesis and Revelation - the wind of God moving across the dark waters, then there is light, then there is life, then there is hope. As a fan of the cosmic, I enjoyed this once I let my mind settle down and just ambrace it. Very well done!
Dream Walker
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
Comment from Missy01
I am not real clear here. It has the syllables and the lines and the phases. But I can't quite pull the message together. Sorry Missy01
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I am not real clear here. It has the syllables and the lines and the phases. But I can't quite pull the message together. Sorry Missy01
Comment Written 24-Jun-2006
