O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from capturedflame
The winds have been raging, but calm is straight ahead. The light show will be fun and phenominal! I like your poem alot, though I hope nobody glows! Peace be with you.
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The winds have been raging, but calm is straight ahead. The light show will be fun and phenominal! I like your poem alot, though I hope nobody glows! Peace be with you.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2006
Comment from Johnylew41
Interesting piece of work
enjoyed it and made me think a lot
flowed nicely
looking forward to reading more of your works
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Interesting piece of work
enjoyed it and made me think a lot
flowed nicely
looking forward to reading more of your works
Comment Written 26-Jun-2006
Comment from ElaineMorgan
This is thought-provoking, with a great deal being said in such a small amount of space.
I read it four or five times, and each time, I pulled more out of it.
Very engaging and interesing.
I wouldn't change a thing.
Elaine
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This is thought-provoking, with a great deal being said in such a small amount of space.
I read it four or five times, and each time, I pulled more out of it.
Very engaging and interesing.
I wouldn't change a thing.
Elaine
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from WhisperingTruth
"O winds speed rage mode!
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights
news spreads, glow in dark!"
I am so impressed by the way you are able to convey such a powerful message in such a condensed form as this. It was a treat to get to read this. I am learning so much.
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"O winds speed rage mode!
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights
news spreads, glow in dark!"
I am so impressed by the way you are able to convey such a powerful message in such a condensed form as this. It was a treat to get to read this. I am learning so much.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from mslink1
The speed at which the ' wind moves, can be a raging wind.'
I feel when reading this "The poet is saying...Time never stops. Genes after generations...flow forth..on,on.on....
News spreads...news is enlightenment for the mind and enlightment for the soul, thus it "glows in the dark."
Awakes one from 'not knowing to knowledge.'
It actually took me a few readings to receive what I have written in this review. I do not know, of course, if my interpretation is even close to the message you are giving but, nevertheless, it is what, it said to me. Love the depth of the message, at least, in my world of reality, lol. Mary
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The speed at which the ' wind moves, can be a raging wind.'
I feel when reading this "The poet is saying...Time never stops. Genes after generations...flow forth..on,on.on....
News spreads...news is enlightenment for the mind and enlightment for the soul, thus it "glows in the dark."
Awakes one from 'not knowing to knowledge.'
It actually took me a few readings to receive what I have written in this review. I do not know, of course, if my interpretation is even close to the message you are giving but, nevertheless, it is what, it said to me. Love the depth of the message, at least, in my world of reality, lol. Mary
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Hetty
Hi Alcreator,
Yep, this one is a good, strong shorty. The lines all speak the message clearly and the rhythm and flow are smooth and consistent.
Try "glows" as the subject is plural.
Always thought provoking, your work.
Hetty
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Hi Alcreator,
Yep, this one is a good, strong shorty. The lines all speak the message clearly and the rhythm and flow are smooth and consistent.
Try "glows" as the subject is plural.
Always thought provoking, your work.
Hetty
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from larwana
Interesting use of such a few words. Little rhythm, but good imagery. Has the touch of nature that is usually included in a Haiku, but with a more contemporary theme. Nice Job.
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Interesting use of such a few words. Little rhythm, but good imagery. Has the touch of nature that is usually included in a Haiku, but with a more contemporary theme. Nice Job.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from mariejames
Nice Haiku. Makes for a quick, interesting read. Of course, I read it three times to get the full meaning, but that's a Haiku for ya. Good job!
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Nice Haiku. Makes for a quick, interesting read. Of course, I read it three times to get the full meaning, but that's a Haiku for ya. Good job!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Georgina Lenty
You are probably the most consistant writer in the way you're able to say the most with the fewest words, yet choosing the words to keep the beauty that is poetry intact. I wish I could write like that! Nothing to change here - well done!
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You are probably the most consistant writer in the way you're able to say the most with the fewest words, yet choosing the words to keep the beauty that is poetry intact. I wish I could write like that! Nothing to change here - well done!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Mrs Jones
The structure is correct, but again I am having a problem understanding the verse. It is only the first line that I can understand.
Cheers
Rose __________________
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The structure is correct, but again I am having a problem understanding the verse. It is only the first line that I can understand.
Cheers
Rose __________________
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
