Start Again
Be your own best friend7 total reviews
Comment from WriterHeather
This is a beautiful sonnet. Sad and hopeful at the same time. It flows very well and I love your presentation. I hope you do well in this contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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This is a beautiful sonnet. Sad and hopeful at the same time. It flows very well and I love your presentation. I hope you do well in this contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thank you for this awesome review. :)
Comment from utilized time
Very nice
I love your choice of words. You definitely summarized a beginning to an end of a relationship with such a positive future outlook awaiting. Still my dreams never left and it reminds me of the hope one needs to have to proceed positive
A+ 6 stars
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Very nice
I love your choice of words. You definitely summarized a beginning to an end of a relationship with such a positive future outlook awaiting. Still my dreams never left and it reminds me of the hope one needs to have to proceed positive
A+ 6 stars
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review and those 6 shining stars! You made my weekend! :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet about our dreams that are sometimes shattered because nothing seems to work out. In such circumstances it is always best to accept it as not the thing God wants for us.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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A very well-written sonnet about our dreams that are sometimes shattered because nothing seems to work out. In such circumstances it is always best to accept it as not the thing God wants for us.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Perhaps, but if we try again and succeed, then maybe that's what God wanted. It's hard to know. I know He has our best interests in mind. Thank you for reading. :)
Comment from equestrik
I enjoyed this poem and especially the positive vibe at the end. When things go badly in life, though it is hard work, we can certainly learn to thrive. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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I enjoyed this poem and especially the positive vibe at the end. When things go badly in life, though it is hard work, we can certainly learn to thrive. Nicely done.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reviewing my poem. I noticed that you gave me 4 stars on this piece, and was wondering if you had any suggestions on how to improve it. I also welcome those as it helps me learn.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
I truly love your poem with its inspiring message. The flow is lovely as well and your picture creates an instant interest to read. A well articulated story with a hopeful ending.
Ralf
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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I truly love your poem with its inspiring message. The flow is lovely as well and your picture creates an instant interest to read. A well articulated story with a hopeful ending.
Ralf
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you for this great review. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, Start Again, has the proper formatting and reminds the reader that the spark of life and living is always there to be reignited.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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This sonnet, Start Again, has the proper formatting and reminds the reader that the spark of life and living is always there to be reignited.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this nice review.:)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiments in your sonnet here. You have a problem with lines 9 and 11.
The following lines have feminine endings so they will be 11 syllables long. I am not sure this will be allowed for the contest.
This line is our of meter, the stress on NEVer
"Yet, still my dreams never died completely,"
I suggest:
Yet still my dreams did not leave me completely"
Also this line is out of meter:
"Once again, I'm living life so sweetly"
I suggest:
"And once again, I'm living life so sweetly"
Good luck,
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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I enjoyed the sentiments in your sonnet here. You have a problem with lines 9 and 11.
The following lines have feminine endings so they will be 11 syllables long. I am not sure this will be allowed for the contest.
This line is our of meter, the stress on NEVer
"Yet, still my dreams never died completely,"
I suggest:
Yet still my dreams did not leave me completely"
Also this line is out of meter:
"Once again, I'm living life so sweetly"
I suggest:
"And once again, I'm living life so sweetly"
Good luck,
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you, I made some changes. You have once again saved my poem. I really do appreciate your input, I've been learning a lot this way. Thanks again! :)
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You still have feminine endings with an uneven meter in your sonnet which will disqualify you, it would be best just to change line 9 and 11. Best of luck, love Dolly x
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I'm not sure what you mean by feminine endings..could you explain?
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I'm not sure what you mean by feminine endings..could you explain?
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Feminine ending, in meter, a line of verse that ends with an unstressed syllable.
