A Brighter Road
Hoping for a brighter life50 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and very well written poem you have penned my friend. You used very good descriptive and heart felt words. Thank you for sharing. I hope things get better for you. blessings, Teri
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This is a very nice and very well written poem you have penned my friend. You used very good descriptive and heart felt words. Thank you for sharing. I hope things get better for you. blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from jenintorre
What a beautiful and uplifting poem you have written, as usual. Thanks a lot for sharing your thoughts and in perfect rhyme. All the best. Stay safe. Jen.
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What a beautiful and uplifting poem you have written, as usual. Thanks a lot for sharing your thoughts and in perfect rhyme. All the best. Stay safe. Jen.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Jesse James Doty
The strength of this piece is its pure honesty and sincerity. Each piece you write gives me a sense of downhomeness and yet, clever in its word choices. Your ability to keep trying to face a better day and a kinder life exude with this poem. The flow, the meter, and the rhymes are all steady and heartwarming. You exhibit wisdom from your advanced age and I am glad to be privy to bathe in it. As you ask to "let peace surround me" I hope that it comes true for you, as well as for the rest of us. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.
Take care,
Jesse
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The strength of this piece is its pure honesty and sincerity. Each piece you write gives me a sense of downhomeness and yet, clever in its word choices. Your ability to keep trying to face a better day and a kinder life exude with this poem. The flow, the meter, and the rhymes are all steady and heartwarming. You exhibit wisdom from your advanced age and I am glad to be privy to bathe in it. As you ask to "let peace surround me" I hope that it comes true for you, as well as for the rest of us. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Janetsue
This is such a relatable posting for many FanStory members. I, too, am in my Golden Years and sometimes it feels like a lot of things are getting tarnished. However, the hope in my heart transcends all earthly woes and I am definitely looking forward to the promised world to come with a smile. Please stay safe and well during these trying days!
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This is such a relatable posting for many FanStory members. I, too, am in my Golden Years and sometimes it feels like a lot of things are getting tarnished. However, the hope in my heart transcends all earthly woes and I am definitely looking forward to the promised world to come with a smile. Please stay safe and well during these trying days!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Writeling
Such a treat to read a poem with this pleasing tight rhyming scheme and scan. I think its narrative will touch us all. Hello!
kind regards, Writeling
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Such a treat to read a poem with this pleasing tight rhyming scheme and scan. I think its narrative will touch us all. Hello!
kind regards, Writeling
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Markie Doczi
I think this is a nicely written poem. It's not fancy but it tells a story, and with rhythm (I am partial to rhyming poetry).
One of my favorite reasons to write is so that others might enjoy and relate to my work; and you have written something here that is very relatable for many!
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I think this is a nicely written poem. It's not fancy but it tells a story, and with rhythm (I am partial to rhyming poetry).
One of my favorite reasons to write is so that others might enjoy and relate to my work; and you have written something here that is very relatable for many!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent poem friend, Jay about just keeping on marching even though you are the last one still standing. That is the hardest place of all to be, so thank goodness you can still write such marvelous poetry that we love to read.
Many thanks for sharing and keep up the great work. :)
Gloria
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Excellent poem friend, Jay about just keeping on marching even though you are the last one still standing. That is the hardest place of all to be, so thank goodness you can still write such marvelous poetry that we love to read.
Many thanks for sharing and keep up the great work. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
Comment from godlucifer
happiness always come to mind when i hear you speak your wisdom. i think old people get depress occasionlly and being alone doesn't help that depression. your poem was a gift to read. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
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happiness always come to mind when i hear you speak your wisdom. i think old people get depress occasionlly and being alone doesn't help that depression. your poem was a gift to read. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
Comment from kahpot
What a soul searching read, it is hard and made harder in these times when age and or health is a concern, love the rhyme and flow of this poem, very well written****kahpot
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What a soul searching read, it is hard and made harder in these times when age and or health is a concern, love the rhyme and flow of this poem, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
Comment from amada
Hi friend Jaybird, please don't get tired of life...you have this wonderful gift of poetry, with great rhymes and all. I can't rhyme, but I do write anyway! I like this poem very much...
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Hi friend Jaybird, please don't get tired of life...you have this wonderful gift of poetry, with great rhymes and all. I can't rhyme, but I do write anyway! I like this poem very much...
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
