Comment from cdefan

Excellent

Another great chapter with a captivating story. This is one in a long series of great chapters by this author. I highly suggests reading the chapters from Congrove.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks cdefan :)

I appreciate your time and encouraging feedback as always! Stay tuned... more Breedline adventures to come!

Stay safe!
Hugs,
Shana :)

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

I just loved, loved, loved this episode, you dreamer you. You believe as I believe, if it's fixable, God can fix it, who can understand the ways of the Lord? And that's what you bring and weave into these stories, ever hope, not only for those with winnable hearts, but even tho s that don't, this did me the world of good dear girl. Thank you. You're God's scribe. Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020

Thank you so much, Roy :)

Your feedback is so encouraging. I'm so thrilled to hear you loved the chapter. When I went back and rewrote this chapter, I wanted to make sure the reader knew about God's second chances, even with the worst of sins.

Thanks again for making my morning so bright.
Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 13-Aug-2020

You're a wonder Shana

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

What an interesting chapter a little mix of everything. The part about Lillith made me tear up. I do hope they're able to save Thessa and the twins, that the vision was just a nightmare. Your chapter is well-written, interesting, believable start to finish. I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020

Thank you, Mistydawn :)

I'm so happy to hear you shared emotions for Lilith. I hated to write her out of the story, but she just didn't fit in with the character's future. Maybe... in the future, I can bring her back as an angel. Who knows, right?
Thanks again my friend!
Hugs,
Shana :)

Comment from ngage

Excellent

This chapter is now one of my favorites, Ms. Shana. The emotions and scenes seem real. You kept me engaged all through the chapter. So sad Lilith died. Now, Tessa's life lingers. I wonder if Jem can save her. Knowing you, I bet he does.

Exciting chapter! Looking forward to reading more

Nate

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020

Thanks Nate :)
I'm so excited you liked the chapter so much. I was concerned it wouldn't be too entertaining. I guess I was wrong.
I hated to let go of my character Lilith, but she just didn't fit into my future writing. But, you never know. She might make an appearance in one of the future books.

Thanks again my friend!
Shana :)

Comment from Ben B.

Exceptional

Thanks for the character list, it was a big help. This story was very well written. My only complaint is that you never showed how Steven right after Lilith died, only the moments before. That was his mother right?

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020

Thank you, Ben :)

Yes, Steven is Lilith's son. There is so much to the story since this is the third series. A lot has happened previously. Maybe you'll be interested in checking out my books to catch up on how Lilith became what she is and Steven's story.
Hope to hear from you again! More Breedline adventures to come.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from elchupakabra

Excellent

Your near death experience here is a bit cliche in my personal opinion, specifically the part where she says 'we're always in here' and places the hand on the chest, it's just one of those things that's been done in sooo many other films/books that I think you could either cut the part entirely or just rework it a bit but other than that small note, I thought this was a great chapter. Keep up the good work, thank you for sharing, later daze.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020

Thank you so much, elchupakabra :)

I do understand the death thing with the heart and love scene, but I am a bit cheesy when it comes to fairy tale endings. But, I will take your advice and see what my editor says. He'll probably agree with you. Haha!
Thanks again and hope to hear back from you. More Breedline adventures to come.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from fm wright

Exceptional

While your death scene brought tears to my eyes, the reappearing of Lilith brought a comfort. I like the way you left the question about whether or not Sebastian would use a portal to escape. Great pictures, as well. I didn't see any errors. To me, it was a great job!

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020

Thank you so much, Faye :)

I'm so glad to hear your take on Lilith's death scene. I hated to end her character, but she just didn't fit in with my future books. But you never know, she may make an appearance in some way.
I do like bring an evil character, like Sebastian, to the good side. He is actually my alter-ego. I think there is hope for him after all.

Thanks again my friend!
Hugs,
Shana :)

reply by fm wright on 13-Aug-2020

Yes, there is hope for him, after all.Sometimes good characters must die for the story to progress. I like how you used Lilith's death, in that it was not in vain.
Hugs back at you,
Faye

reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020

Thank you, Faye :)

reply by fm wright on 14-Aug-2020

You're so welcome.
Hugs,
Faye