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Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, I can so relate to this post, my lady - well said!! ;) Thanx for sharing those thoughts today... :) :) Yvette
start pilling expectations --> start piling expectations
they get invest in --> they get, they invest in
married and you are --> married, and you are
leaves the best, and you --> leave the nest, and you
you, you have --> you; you have
by the road. You have nothing left to offer. You close your --> by the road. You close your [that sentence was a repeat from right before this...]
Crying you protest:" I live my life for others, I try to fulfill all the expectations, except my own. I am sharing --> Crying, you protest: "I lived my life for other. I tried to fulfill all expectations except my own." [start new paragraph here] I am sharing
I want to know --> I want you to know
appreciated, trust me." --> appreciated. Trust me.
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Oh, I can so relate to this post, my lady - well said!! ;) Thanx for sharing those thoughts today... :) :) Yvette
start pilling expectations --> start piling expectations
they get invest in --> they get, they invest in
married and you are --> married, and you are
leaves the best, and you --> leave the nest, and you
you, you have --> you; you have
by the road. You have nothing left to offer. You close your --> by the road. You close your [that sentence was a repeat from right before this...]
Crying you protest:" I live my life for others, I try to fulfill all the expectations, except my own. I am sharing --> Crying, you protest: "I lived my life for other. I tried to fulfill all expectations except my own." [start new paragraph here] I am sharing
I want to know --> I want you to know
appreciated, trust me." --> appreciated. Trust me.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2020
Comment from estory
You speak of this sense we have sometimes that obligations fill up all our time; our parents expect us to achieve what they want us to achieve, our teachers expect us to raise their profiles, our lovers expect us to make them the center of our universe. Then we finally get a chance to live for ourselves, when all these other people around us give us some space, death comes knocking and our chance is gone. It is a fatalistic viewpoint of life but valid in some respects; also it fits in with that cynical sense of humor that comes sometimes from Eastern Europe. There are some grammatical issues here in tenses of verbs: "The kids grow up leaves : leave the nest." "Treat them as prince or princess : as A prince or princess" "Every penny they get invest in: every penny they get THEY invest in". estory
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You speak of this sense we have sometimes that obligations fill up all our time; our parents expect us to achieve what they want us to achieve, our teachers expect us to raise their profiles, our lovers expect us to make them the center of our universe. Then we finally get a chance to live for ourselves, when all these other people around us give us some space, death comes knocking and our chance is gone. It is a fatalistic viewpoint of life but valid in some respects; also it fits in with that cynical sense of humor that comes sometimes from Eastern Europe. There are some grammatical issues here in tenses of verbs: "The kids grow up leaves : leave the nest." "Treat them as prince or princess : as A prince or princess" "Every penny they get invest in: every penny they get THEY invest in". estory
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(typos: pilling s/b piling; every penny they get invest s/b they invest every penny; leaves the best s/b nest; rate of returns come s/b rate ... comes) This rings my bell! Since Coronella's reign I have become rebellious; to compensate for being compelled to wear masks, I refuse to do anything else I don't want to do. Good work on this rant! Cheers. LIZ
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(typos: pilling s/b piling; every penny they get invest s/b they invest every penny; leaves the best s/b nest; rate of returns come s/b rate ... comes) This rings my bell! Since Coronella's reign I have become rebellious; to compensate for being compelled to wear masks, I refuse to do anything else I don't want to do. Good work on this rant! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
Comment from Alchera
"You are left like a broken shell by the road. You have nothing left to offer. You close your eyes and think: now I can live for myself, finally!"
All this depends on family education:want you give you will get my dear Iza! I live with my children's family happily together in the house that I have built and distributed to them but I am still the head of the family, you can be sure! A great provocative thought!
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"You are left like a broken shell by the road. You have nothing left to offer. You close your eyes and think: now I can live for myself, finally!"
All this depends on family education:want you give you will get my dear Iza! I live with my children's family happily together in the house that I have built and distributed to them but I am still the head of the family, you can be sure! A great provocative thought!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a good piece of wisdom you have imparted to us. Thank you for sharing. I always think of such behaviour as being selfish, so my tendency is to avoid it where possible. Obviously, I need to change my attitude.
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This is a good piece of wisdom you have imparted to us. Thank you for sharing. I always think of such behaviour as being selfish, so my tendency is to avoid it where possible. Obviously, I need to change my attitude.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
Comment from lancellot
We get into this life with no expectation(s)
- needs to be plural.
and the moment we stepped out from our mother's womb
- I doubt even Jesus stepped out of Mary. Perhaps, came out
I am sharing this with my dear reader because I want (you) to know this: Please, stop living your life for
- missing word.
they expect you to treat them as (a) Prince or Princess,
- missing
Crying you protest:" I live my life for
- should be
Crying you protest, "I live my life for
Maybe you should change: The parents, The grandparents and so on to, My parents, My teachers
Expectations are not the same for everyone.
Lastly, this isn't a general fiction prose. It is commentary philosophy
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We get into this life with no expectation(s)
- needs to be plural.
and the moment we stepped out from our mother's womb
- I doubt even Jesus stepped out of Mary. Perhaps, came out
I am sharing this with my dear reader because I want (you) to know this: Please, stop living your life for
- missing word.
they expect you to treat them as (a) Prince or Princess,
- missing
Crying you protest:" I live my life for
- should be
Crying you protest, "I live my life for
Maybe you should change: The parents, The grandparents and so on to, My parents, My teachers
Expectations are not the same for everyone.
Lastly, this isn't a general fiction prose. It is commentary philosophy
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
You are correct there are many expectations in life; actually responsibilities and it can get to be a drag on one's psyche when resisted. It takes a lifetime to go with the flow and that is when you become the center. Death is a freeing of the soul. This was an interesting read with a moral. giovanni
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You are correct there are many expectations in life; actually responsibilities and it can get to be a drag on one's psyche when resisted. It takes a lifetime to go with the flow and that is when you become the center. Death is a freeing of the soul. This was an interesting read with a moral. giovanni
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
