A Silent Cry
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Endless Dawn"Development of Alzheimer's Disease.
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Comment from Margaret Bednar
Day to day - this poem shows us that is how to survive or one would go crazy. The stanza that begins with "An apology ... " is powerful and I can't imagine not having anyone there to help as you mention in your author's notes your friends didn't come anymore.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Day to day - this poem shows us that is how to survive or one would go crazy. The stanza that begins with "An apology ... " is powerful and I can't imagine not having anyone there to help as you mention in your author's notes your friends didn't come anymore.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Margaret. The last year, when he also was diagnosed with terminal cancer, A doctor's team came every fortnight to see how he was, and, very important, to see if I could still cope. They were very friendly and understanding. What was more, Carlo seemed to like them, although he didn't speak to them.
Comment from richie b
Marjon,
Your poem contains much emotional depth.
Your senses are facing reality with the changes in
your relationship.
Your love and commitment to Carlo is bearing
the fruits and perseverance of your commitment.
Peace,
Richie
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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Marjon,
Your poem contains much emotional depth.
Your senses are facing reality with the changes in
your relationship.
Your love and commitment to Carlo is bearing
the fruits and perseverance of your commitment.
Peace,
Richie
Comment Written 11-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Richie. A beautiful review.
Comment from estory
The honesty in the language and the tone of self depreciation really highlights the theme here of the crumbling sensuality and a transformation of love from carnal to spiritual; a life lived in sacrifice for someone else and the revelation of the power and pain in that transcendence. This image of the endless dawn is wonderful; there's a sense of sublimity and eternity there, a subtle moment of transcendence. Crumbles pride into powder too small to be of value. That is a great moment of self depreciation. We feel the self disappearing here. There's a lot going on in this poem. estory
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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The honesty in the language and the tone of self depreciation really highlights the theme here of the crumbling sensuality and a transformation of love from carnal to spiritual; a life lived in sacrifice for someone else and the revelation of the power and pain in that transcendence. This image of the endless dawn is wonderful; there's a sense of sublimity and eternity there, a subtle moment of transcendence. Crumbles pride into powder too small to be of value. That is a great moment of self depreciation. We feel the self disappearing here. There's a lot going on in this poem. estory
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Estory, thank you. I always look out for your reviews, they are wonderful. I feel understood and strengthened.
Comment from amada
"someday it will be enough simply to live...." These words are like stabbing wounds to the heart. I breathe them in...something has ended without being formally finalized...
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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"someday it will be enough simply to live...." These words are like stabbing wounds to the heart. I breathe them in...something has ended without being formally finalized...
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Amada, thank you for your feeling review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can feel your struggle here and it is often a huge relief as well as a great sorrow, and there is guilt and there is grief and it is hard to navigate the emotions. It is a journey I would not like to repeat, but we find a way of enjoying the life we are left with in time, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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I can feel your struggle here and it is often a huge relief as well as a great sorrow, and there is guilt and there is grief and it is hard to navigate the emotions. It is a journey I would not like to repeat, but we find a way of enjoying the life we are left with in time, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Dolly, such a dear review!
Comment from ameen786
"An apology becomes a compliment, knees that kneeled too much, thanked too much --crumbles pride into powder." Marjon my friend, I feel the pain in these unique/original lines that reflect your trauma in dealing with the challenge; keep the faith my friend and please continue writing and sharing, thank you and God bless you.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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"An apology becomes a compliment, knees that kneeled too much, thanked too much --crumbles pride into powder." Marjon my friend, I feel the pain in these unique/original lines that reflect your trauma in dealing with the challenge; keep the faith my friend and please continue writing and sharing, thank you and God bless you.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thank you, for a beautiful and feeling review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A Very well-written poem about the next phase of acceptance of your fate and do whatever you can to cope day after day to care for a sick husband and no one to provide support and assistance around.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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A Very well-written poem about the next phase of acceptance of your fate and do whatever you can to cope day after day to care for a sick husband and no one to provide support and assistance around.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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My writing helped a lot. I thank God for that gift.
Thanks again for the review, Sandra!
Comment from Stephen Force
A very evocative poem, The epitome of the nuptial vows. The definition of devotion. I have had several friends whose partners have suffered with dementia or Alzheimer's. Your poem is a real insight into the loneliness and isolation of a sole caregiver. Thank you
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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A very evocative poem, The epitome of the nuptial vows. The definition of devotion. I have had several friends whose partners have suffered with dementia or Alzheimer's. Your poem is a real insight into the loneliness and isolation of a sole caregiver. Thank you
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Stephen, thank you for a very kind review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Marjon, what an apt name you have chosen for this post. Indeed your life had become just that, an "endless dawn."
How could you ever explain your situation, even in pages of prose? With poetry you could say it in two words.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Dear Marjon, what an apt name you have chosen for this post. Indeed your life had become just that, an "endless dawn."
How could you ever explain your situation, even in pages of prose? With poetry you could say it in two words.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Suzanna, thank you so much for your review.
Comment from Cindy Decker
Marjon,
There are so many striking parts of your poem. Pulse of an aria..."some day it will be enough simply to live...". I hope it never comes to that because life is best when we all but forth our best.
Have a wonderful week, Marjon.
Best wishes. Excellent poem!
Cindy
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Marjon,
There are so many striking parts of your poem. Pulse of an aria..."some day it will be enough simply to live...". I hope it never comes to that because life is best when we all but forth our best.
Have a wonderful week, Marjon.
Best wishes. Excellent poem!
Cindy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Cindy, thank you for the review.
