A Week in the Country
(1,008 words) R & R interlude from the Vietnam conflict.13 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt story about the last time you saw Charlie when you still have all your limbs and other your way to the war zone. Maybe Charlie will not mind the missing legs, most people who lost their legs are just happy you be still alive and can still live an active life.
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A very well-written heartfelt story about the last time you saw Charlie when you still have all your limbs and other your way to the war zone. Maybe Charlie will not mind the missing legs, most people who lost their legs are just happy you be still alive and can still live an active life.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from ameen786
Hi Lisa, a fascinating story my friend; quite descriptive, creating live imagery; melancholic, as most love stories during the wars are; the closing in, "The land mine saw to my future,"--is very poignant; but as a outstanding writer that you are, it's like icing on the cake!
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Hi Lisa, a fascinating story my friend; quite descriptive, creating live imagery; melancholic, as most love stories during the wars are; the closing in, "The land mine saw to my future,"--is very poignant; but as a outstanding writer that you are, it's like icing on the cake!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a wonderfully written story. Terribly sad and reads like a non-fiction story. It is one that must be true for many service men and women. To be denied the chance of love and having children, to live a life knowing their dreams could never come true... So sad. Well done, Lisa May, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
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What a wonderfully written story. Terribly sad and reads like a non-fiction story. It is one that must be true for many service men and women. To be denied the chance of love and having children, to live a life knowing their dreams could never come true... So sad. Well done, Lisa May, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
Comment from R. Hiland
Well written and a good story. I would have enjoyed seeing more of "Charlie's" character. I have a better picture of her father, and I think she is more important to the story, but well done. Good luck in the contest.
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Well written and a good story. I would have enjoyed seeing more of "Charlie's" character. I have a better picture of her father, and I think she is more important to the story, but well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
Comment from Roberta Lawrinsky
The story has Charlie, a girl, presumably a Charlotte or Charlita. She's a positive force. That father, even though he apologized, what was he thinking, serving up more blood & guts? Like it's nothing.
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The story has Charlie, a girl, presumably a Charlotte or Charlita. She's a positive force. That father, even though he apologized, what was he thinking, serving up more blood & guts? Like it's nothing.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
Comment from Mia Twysted
Such a sad story. I felt as I was sitting next to this man as he resite4d to me his story. I would have told him to call, to write, for the connections he made don't come around all to often.
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Such a sad story. I felt as I was sitting next to this man as he resite4d to me his story. I would have told him to call, to write, for the connections he made don't come around all to often.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting story with a kind of foreshadowing of the gruesomeness of war with the hunting scene with Charlie's father. It sounds magnanimous of the narrator to want the best for the relationship but it should be a decision for both if "love was really in the air."
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Interesting story with a kind of foreshadowing of the gruesomeness of war with the hunting scene with Charlie's father. It sounds magnanimous of the narrator to want the best for the relationship but it should be a decision for both if "love was really in the air."
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Excellent entry for the Charlie writing prompt contest. Your Charlie story is captivating and so sad...a tragedy. I was hooked from beginning to end. I wonder what happened to Charlie. Well done my friend.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Excellent entry for the Charlie writing prompt contest. Your Charlie story is captivating and so sad...a tragedy. I was hooked from beginning to end. I wonder what happened to Charlie. Well done my friend.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. I think there needs to be a sequel... I'll see if I can get Charlie and Brian together again.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the Charlie writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
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This is a great entry for the Charlie writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
Comment from royowen
I wonder how many potential relationships have gone this, my brother served in Vietnam in the late sixties. Beautifully writtenm you certainly know your Sydney suburbs and regions, but Parramatta might be a bit close to the city. But great post, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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I wonder how many potential relationships have gone this, my brother served in Vietnam in the late sixties. Beautifully writtenm you certainly know your Sydney suburbs and regions, but Parramatta might be a bit close to the city. But great post, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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I liked the word Parramatta, but you are right about it being a bit close to the CBD. I am not that familiar with Sydney. I thought back in 1971 when the story is set it might have been less built up. I've now changed it to Camden - that's about 60km from CBD and it's more rural.
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That sounds better, well done
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Cheers.
