I Am???
A contest entry12 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is a delightful entry because the reveal comes at the end. Snails are quite slow, but they go at just the right speed for them...lol. I feel like one at times..slow but steady. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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This is a delightful entry because the reveal comes at the end. Snails are quite slow, but they go at just the right speed for them...lol. I feel like one at times..slow but steady. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for reading, reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from elchupakabra
Life is sluggishly slow.
People routinely comment how so,
but no one truly can know.
I try to speed, this is true,
a speeding ticket just may ensue.
Alas, speeding is not what I do.
I simply pace along,
I really am rather strong,
Whether my trips are short or long.
Can you guess what I am?
A hint perhaps, I am not a lamb.
Nor a camera, shortened to cam. (this whole part makes no sense to be honest you could probably just cut it)
I'm not a postage stamp on mail,
or a bucket list, nor a pail;
I am simply me, a snail!
The piece was a bit challenging in some of the structure/wording choices. Good work and good luck on the contest. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Life is sluggishly slow.
People routinely comment how so,
but no one truly can know.
I try to speed, this is true,
a speeding ticket just may ensue.
Alas, speeding is not what I do.
I simply pace along,
I really am rather strong,
Whether my trips are short or long.
Can you guess what I am?
A hint perhaps, I am not a lamb.
Nor a camera, shortened to cam. (this whole part makes no sense to be honest you could probably just cut it)
I'm not a postage stamp on mail,
or a bucket list, nor a pail;
I am simply me, a snail!
The piece was a bit challenging in some of the structure/wording choices. Good work and good luck on the contest. Thanks for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reading, reviewing and your constructive comments.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is so fun! You keep the identity of this mysterious being to the end.
I try to speed, I really do,
A speeding ticket, I will ensue.
But alas, speeding is not true.
Great descriptive imagery, nice rhyming, I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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This is so fun! You keep the identity of this mysterious being to the end.
I try to speed, I really do,
A speeding ticket, I will ensue.
But alas, speeding is not true.
Great descriptive imagery, nice rhyming, I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about Tydfil life of a garden snail. There is no rush, he will get to the other side when he gets there, I'm the meantime he travels day by day to get where he wamyself to go.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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A very well-written poem about Tydfil life of a garden snail. There is no rush, he will get to the other side when he gets there, I'm the meantime he travels day by day to get where he wamyself to go.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you Sandra for reading, reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile here and this is what the snail did to the poor leaf? Ha ha ha, fine rhymes and a great description of those little slimy snails, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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You made me smile here and this is what the snail did to the poor leaf? Ha ha ha, fine rhymes and a great description of those little slimy snails, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you Dolly for reading, reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from poetwatch
I feel so slow, many times, I just don't know if the wind has blown me to the ground. I see many of my friends lying around, gathering dust off the cliff. That's what happens to a leaf.
I like your better, Alie. :)
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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I feel so slow, many times, I just don't know if the wind has blown me to the ground. I see many of my friends lying around, gathering dust off the cliff. That's what happens to a leaf.
I like your better, Alie. :)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you Jose for reading, reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love your poem, and I think you have a winner here. I particularly liked this section :"I try to speed, I really do,
A speeding ticket, I will ensue.
But alas, speeding is not true.
I simply pace along,
I really am rather strong,
Distances are short not long." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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I love your poem, and I think you have a winner here. I particularly liked this section :"I try to speed, I really do,
A speeding ticket, I will ensue.
But alas, speeding is not true.
I simply pace along,
I really am rather strong,
Distances are short not long." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you Iza for reading, reviewing and your amazing comments.
Comment from TommyWrites
This is great!!
I was not expecting it to be a snail at the end-which it gave me a good chuckle. I think, this poem comes across as light. But I see a deeper meaning in it. Perhaps it's just me. :) I really liked the overall poem, with the nice rhymes that kept it flowing. Really good poem you have here, thanks for sharing. :)
TommyWrites~
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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This is great!!
I was not expecting it to be a snail at the end-which it gave me a good chuckle. I think, this poem comes across as light. But I see a deeper meaning in it. Perhaps it's just me. :) I really liked the overall poem, with the nice rhymes that kept it flowing. Really good poem you have here, thanks for sharing. :)
TommyWrites~
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you Tommy for reading, reviewing and your great, constructive comments.
Comment from royowen
I guess the only thing I can think of, is a caterpillar, the chomped leaf is a clue I think, bur now that you mention it, I think it has to be...I guess, not very bright, that's me. Beautifully written dear friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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I guess the only thing I can think of, is a caterpillar, the chomped leaf is a clue I think, bur now that you mention it, I think it has to be...I guess, not very bright, that's me. Beautifully written dear friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you Roy for reading, reviewing and your great comments, blessings.
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Well done
Comment from Pantygynt
This claims to be a contest entry but no contest is stipulated so I am unsure as to what rules apply. These monorhyming tercets play out a riddle as to the nature of the subject of the poem in which last line gives the answer -- a snail.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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This claims to be a contest entry but no contest is stipulated so I am unsure as to what rules apply. These monorhyming tercets play out a riddle as to the nature of the subject of the poem in which last line gives the answer -- a snail.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you Jim for reading, reviewing and your great comments, I will have to check this out about the contest.
