Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Passion to Survive"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from Irish Rain
Yay for the cherry tree!!
I love this.
Could be describing the storm my
son just went through in Wilmington, NC.
But he lost his tree. Sad.
This is just lovely Miss June!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Yay for the cherry tree!!
I love this.
Could be describing the storm my
son just went through in Wilmington, NC.
But he lost his tree. Sad.
This is just lovely Miss June!
Blessings...
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the positive feedback! So glad you enjoyed this Haiku about the resilience of the cherry tree.
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I think cherry trees are just gorgeous, quite appropriate for Japanese poetry!
Comment from lyenochka
A lovely lesson from nature in your poem. Even with all the "landscape in turmoil" with the pandemic, protests and economic problems, we can be like the cherry trees and keep growing.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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A lovely lesson from nature in your poem. Even with all the "landscape in turmoil" with the pandemic, protests and economic problems, we can be like the cherry trees and keep growing.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Yes, we must be resilient like the cherry tree. She blossoms every spring no matter what!
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And this year, the blossoms have been even more spectacular in some places - where it was viewed online.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent addition to the multi-author book. Thanks for sharing the note to explain about the cultural meaning of the cherry blossoms. I like how you use that as an expression of the strength to survive through the storm. Bill
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Excellent addition to the multi-author book. Thanks for sharing the note to explain about the cultural meaning of the cherry blossoms. I like how you use that as an expression of the strength to survive through the storm. Bill
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thanks Bill - you can follow the cherry blossom theme with a nice couplet...
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
This is a vivid additional passage for the renga book. One can see your intent. '... landscape in turmoil' is a very strong phrase.
Mark
P.S. I, of course, favor no caps for my posts - my poetic choice. However, your last line is not consistent with your first two lines. Whether you change the first word cap or not, IMHO 'Amidst' should not be with an initial cap.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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June,
This is a vivid additional passage for the renga book. One can see your intent. '... landscape in turmoil' is a very strong phrase.
Mark
P.S. I, of course, favor no caps for my posts - my poetic choice. However, your last line is not consistent with your first two lines. Whether you change the first word cap or not, IMHO 'Amidst' should not be with an initial cap.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thanks for the suggestions. Will go back and take a look...
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku for the renga in the multi-author book. When a severe storm pass through and leaves a landscape torn apart, nature will passionately restore the damages.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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A very well-written haiku for the renga in the multi-author book. When a severe storm pass through and leaves a landscape torn apart, nature will passionately restore the damages.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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So true. Thank you for sharing your insights.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine contribution to the book here June and it always astounds me how nature will thrive no matter how much chaos there is around, a shoot will bud with great promise, this is an ambient write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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A fine contribution to the book here June and it always astounds me how nature will thrive no matter how much chaos there is around, a shoot will bud with great promise, this is an ambient write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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So nice of you to drop by to read and share our insights! Nature is resilient - despite surrounding choas.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Passion to Survive
by June Sargent
Hello my friend
Beautiful chapter for our renga book. Nice presentation and imagery. Good syllable count and connection between lines.
As you know, in renga we don't repeat words from one poem to the next but a poem must keep the theme of only the previous poem. It's a challenge..a fun one, I think. You followed the right rules but the poet before you didn't so we had a storm for a while. It's okay but I contacted the poet to let her know. You don't have to change anything.
Check this out...
Chapter thirty four
(Storm) clouds
give ominous glare
(violet ) clusters
fear not
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Chapter thirty five
So unsuspecting.
Too late for striving fingers,
which choose figs instead.
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Chapter thirty six
grapes, figs, (violets)-- purple
jellied (storms) fascinating
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Chapter thirty seven by June Sargent
Purple clouds depart
Amidst landscape in turmoil -
cherry tree stands tall
Well done, June. You are getting very good at this ;)
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Passion to Survive
by June Sargent
Hello my friend
Beautiful chapter for our renga book. Nice presentation and imagery. Good syllable count and connection between lines.
As you know, in renga we don't repeat words from one poem to the next but a poem must keep the theme of only the previous poem. It's a challenge..a fun one, I think. You followed the right rules but the poet before you didn't so we had a storm for a while. It's okay but I contacted the poet to let her know. You don't have to change anything.
Check this out...
Chapter thirty four
(Storm) clouds
give ominous glare
(violet ) clusters
fear not
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Chapter thirty five
So unsuspecting.
Too late for striving fingers,
which choose figs instead.
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Chapter thirty six
grapes, figs, (violets)-- purple
jellied (storms) fascinating
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Chapter thirty seven by June Sargent
Purple clouds depart
Amidst landscape in turmoil -
cherry tree stands tall
Well done, June. You are getting very good at this ;)
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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I tried to steer it back to Bill Pinder?s piece on storm clouds and yet connect to the purple of the violets of the previous 2 posts. I noticed she went off rail a bit. Hopefully the next post will be a great couplet!
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Thank you very much, normally you go by the one before you, but in this case it was good to get it back on track. Thank you!
Comment from Eternal Muse
A very beautiful poem, with fantastic imagery and visuals. These two lines speak volumes and take the reader on a journey to an exciting far-away place. I love your choice of an artwork, and your amazing presentation.
I never tried a Renga form but I might.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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A very beautiful poem, with fantastic imagery and visuals. These two lines speak volumes and take the reader on a journey to an exciting far-away place. I love your choice of an artwork, and your amazing presentation.
I never tried a Renga form but I might.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you! Always nice to hear your input.
Comment from Cindy Decker
I love the photo. This haiku is full of motion, departing purple clouds, turmoil. Since the cherry blossom is symbolic of everlasting life, this could be about salvation also.
Beautiful work, June.
Blessings, Cindy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I love the photo. This haiku is full of motion, departing purple clouds, turmoil. Since the cherry blossom is symbolic of everlasting life, this could be about salvation also.
Beautiful work, June.
Blessings, Cindy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you! I agree that this haiku could apply to the survival of the human spirit.
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Yours is better, June.😊
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a great addition to the renga. This haiku brings the fruit back into the ongoing tale which is being built here every day. I may need to jump back in as well.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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This is a great addition to the renga. This haiku brings the fruit back into the ongoing tale which is being built here every day. I may need to jump back in as well.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Please do jump back! Have to keep the adventure moving...
