A Silent Cry
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Dazzled"Development of Alzheimer's Disease.
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about getting a fraction of hope when it seems a partner may break through the darkness in his mind when there are things happening around him that look familiar to him.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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A very well-written poem about getting a fraction of hope when it seems a partner may break through the darkness in his mind when there are things happening around him that look familiar to him.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Sandra, yes, that was what I hoped for with the Christmas tree and all the festive glitters and lights. It really looked like it for a moment, as if he came back to me for a few hours, but then it was all over again.
Thanks for the review.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Oh, the memories you have! When almost down and out, we all look for glimmers of hope to sustain us day by day. Looking for the little things help.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Oh, the memories you have! When almost down and out, we all look for glimmers of hope to sustain us day by day. Looking for the little things help.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Rebecca, thanks so much for the review.
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You're welcome.
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Big smiles.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Eyes like dark quartz, fractured. Startled. And then, adornments, dazzling, like a Christmas tree. Oh, those moments of connections - grasped at with desperation, I'd suppose. Wrings my heart - Well penned, once again.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Eyes like dark quartz, fractured. Startled. And then, adornments, dazzling, like a Christmas tree. Oh, those moments of connections - grasped at with desperation, I'd suppose. Wrings my heart - Well penned, once again.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Margaret, I love your reviews. Thank you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Oh, so sad, but well expressed, Marjon. Your words flow smoothly with great imagery. I like the reference about the sparkling ornaments on the Christmas tree when compared to his eyes--a glimmer of recognition.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Oh, so sad, but well expressed, Marjon. Your words flow smoothly with great imagery. I like the reference about the sparkling ornaments on the Christmas tree when compared to his eyes--a glimmer of recognition.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Jan, for the review.
Comment from royowen
It's so unusual when someone has been forced to make this journey with another human being, and the seemingly false hope that undergirds it. The only way one will know is when you mutually dwell in the same place...eternally. Another sensitive, touching free verse Marjon, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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It's so unusual when someone has been forced to make this journey with another human being, and the seemingly false hope that undergirds it. The only way one will know is when you mutually dwell in the same place...eternally. Another sensitive, touching free verse Marjon, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank, Roy for a fine review.
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Bless you
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:))
Comment from estory
I loved this poem. I thought you had a great sense of rhythm capturing the hesitating grasp of the moment, and a wonderful image in that glittering quartz crystal in your husband's eyes. Something of the clear lucidity of the past, but still frozen, still hardened, still not quite alive. Its the perfect image. 'Under his world's weight, he sits gleaming, rigidly started at life.' That's as good as it gets in poetry. Wonderful alliteration, super depth to the images, and it really captures the mood of the moment. Elements of depression, hope, and fear all rolled into one. estory
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I loved this poem. I thought you had a great sense of rhythm capturing the hesitating grasp of the moment, and a wonderful image in that glittering quartz crystal in your husband's eyes. Something of the clear lucidity of the past, but still frozen, still hardened, still not quite alive. Its the perfect image. 'Under his world's weight, he sits gleaming, rigidly started at life.' That's as good as it gets in poetry. Wonderful alliteration, super depth to the images, and it really captures the mood of the moment. Elements of depression, hope, and fear all rolled into one. estory
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I'll try to give you another nomination for the reviewers. I hope I can. Thank you once again for this really excellent review and comment of Dazzled, as well as for the appreciated six stars!
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I am really enjoying your poetry and this book in particular. I can tell you put a lot of feeling and effort into this and it shows. estory
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Thanks again.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Marjon I am glad you had this short reprieve in the downward spiral that had you falling to your knees in fatigue or prayer.
I was particularly intrigued by your use of the word "adornments" rather than "ornaments" shining out of the christmas tree. Were you saying there was still a glimmer of love, of adoration shining out of his eyes?
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Dear Marjon I am glad you had this short reprieve in the downward spiral that had you falling to your knees in fatigue or prayer.
I was particularly intrigued by your use of the word "adornments" rather than "ornaments" shining out of the christmas tree. Were you saying there was still a glimmer of love, of adoration shining out of his eyes?
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Suzanna, thank you for the review. I really don't know. I suppose I wanted to see the love and adoration, the Christmas atmosphere so much, that I willed myself to see that in the somewhat brighter eyes that day.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was incredibly sad, Marjon. Your words are soft and heartfelt, I always feel your sadness in them. I'm so happy for you that he had some clarity at Christmas. You're doing an amazing job in the way you are writing these sad memories down. Sending you a hug, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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That was incredibly sad, Marjon. Your words are soft and heartfelt, I always feel your sadness in them. I'm so happy for you that he had some clarity at Christmas. You're doing an amazing job in the way you are writing these sad memories down. Sending you a hug, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Sandra, thank you so much for the review! It does me so much good to get many warm and loving reviews for the poems of A Silent Cry. I have found a circle of friends here that makes my life a happier one.
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That is so good! And I'm glad, because what you are writing many of us can relate to even if it is in slightly different ways. xxxx
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Broad smiles, dear friend.
Comment from richie b
Marjon,
Your poem tells of the uncertain days that take
you back and forth.
Your words create images of hope and happiness.
I applaud you for your perseverance.
Blessings,
Richie
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Marjon,
Your poem tells of the uncertain days that take
you back and forth.
Your words create images of hope and happiness.
I applaud you for your perseverance.
Blessings,
Richie
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Richie, thank you for the review.
Comment from Bill Pinder
I like this free verse about Alzheimer's that is very well written with well chosen words that convey specific images and feelings about his condition. Thanks for sharing your creativity while going through this extremely difficult time. Bill
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I like this free verse about Alzheimer's that is very well written with well chosen words that convey specific images and feelings about his condition. Thanks for sharing your creativity while going through this extremely difficult time. Bill
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Bill, thanks for the review!
