A Perfect Fit?
100 word flash14 total reviews
Comment from Dick Waters
What a twist, and yes, I have a dirty mind.
I should have known by the picture, but I thought she was just silencing him.
I was confused about the mom, but you took my mind somewhere else.
I liked it and will read more of your posts.
Be safe and keep up your great writing.
Thanks for your support as well!
Dick
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What a twist, and yes, I have a dirty mind.
I should have known by the picture, but I thought she was just silencing him.
I was confused about the mom, but you took my mind somewhere else.
I liked it and will read more of your posts.
Be safe and keep up your great writing.
Thanks for your support as well!
Dick
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt.
This story is clear and well told. Funny.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt.
This story is clear and well told. Funny.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Patty Palmer
LOL! How cute this story is. We all know what it sounds like they're talking about and when it comes to the end and we find out it's his retainer they're talking about, it's a surprise! Although, yuck, for trying someone's retainer. Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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LOL! How cute this story is. We all know what it sounds like they're talking about and when it comes to the end and we find out it's his retainer they're talking about, it's a surprise! Although, yuck, for trying someone's retainer. Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you
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You're welcome!
Patty
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You kept us in suspense until the end here and you made me smile with this entertaining write! Those damn retainers, but braces can be challenging, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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You kept us in suspense until the end here and you made me smile with this entertaining write! Those damn retainers, but braces can be challenging, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. It was a fun write.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is a classic case of misdirection that has been well executed. I definitely didn't see that end coming. Well played! Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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This is a classic case of misdirection that has been well executed. I definitely didn't see that end coming. Well played! Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love the way you had me thinking it was something else that was going on. You did a wonderful job of putting in that little twist and leaving the reader with a little delightful laugh.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I love the way you had me thinking it was something else that was going on. You did a wonderful job of putting in that little twist and leaving the reader with a little delightful laugh.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Spitfire
Love the double meaning here: it'll hurt; see if its fits; it's too big-- it's tight, take it out. It does sound like a virgin. The punch line had me saying Yuch! Why would you want someone else' retainer in your mouth?"
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Love the double meaning here: it'll hurt; see if its fits; it's too big-- it's tight, take it out. It does sound like a virgin. The punch line had me saying Yuch! Why would you want someone else' retainer in your mouth?"
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. Ha, when you're young and in love, you even chew the same gum. Remember.
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I was never that much in love. LOL
Comment from marion
Hi there
This is funny. I hope you do well in the competition!
I have dropped one star because of the overuse of ellipses (continuous three dots) in the writing. You have nine sets in one hundred words!
Hope this helps. And again, good luck!
Marion
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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Hi there
This is funny. I hope you do well in the competition!
I have dropped one star because of the overuse of ellipses (continuous three dots) in the writing. You have nine sets in one hundred words!
Hope this helps. And again, good luck!
Marion
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Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I will keep them, as they are there for a purpose, as there is no rule, guide or set number one should or can use per words. I do understand your personal preference though.
Thank you for the review. I appreciate every insight.
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It is not a personal preference. It's overuse. Try removing some. You will still have the same effect. Marion.
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Thank you, Marion, unless there is a written rule somewhere it is a preference as in any art form.
But, thank you for your opinion.
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That's okay! I suppose we could debate this back and forward! LOL. But would like to end (through experience) that whichever side we land on, consider using the ellipsis with caution. Much like overuse of an exclamation point, the ellipsis can annoy when used recklessly.
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, this is great fun, author. And the artwork you've attached works perfectly without giving away your great bit of misdirection.
Three's Company was a good fun show and many thanks for the tribute.
Wishing you much luck in the booth. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Ha, this is great fun, author. And the artwork you've attached works perfectly without giving away your great bit of misdirection.
Three's Company was a good fun show and many thanks for the tribute.
Wishing you much luck in the booth. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup corrupted mind. I think all of us thought about the wrong thing, thanks God just braces . Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Yup corrupted mind. I think all of us thought about the wrong thing, thanks God just braces . Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much
