Time Paused Today
A Rondaful65 total reviews
Comment from Bichon
This was an interesting poem! I liked the representation and personification of the bird and memories that were triggered by it. A very Spring time suitable read!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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This was an interesting poem! I liked the representation and personification of the bird and memories that were triggered by it. A very Spring time suitable read!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review this one, Bichon. I appreciate your kind words. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Vanna1
Your poem is so heartfelt, full of sadness. The imagery is good. The theme works well with a bird. Good presentation. Also a good theme for the poetry form. A very nice post.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Your poem is so heartfelt, full of sadness. The imagery is good. The theme works well with a bird. Good presentation. Also a good theme for the poetry form. A very nice post.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanks very much for your review and kind comments, Vanna. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from LisaMay
I love the reflective feel of this poem. The form makes for interesting phrasing and repetition for emphasis of the mood. Very evocative - it made me feel sad. I think we do a lot of sighing as we age and memories accumulate.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I love the reflective feel of this poem. The form makes for interesting phrasing and repetition for emphasis of the mood. Very evocative - it made me feel sad. I think we do a lot of sighing as we age and memories accumulate.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Very many thanks for your review and for the six stars, LisaMay. Greatly appreciated. I try not to sigh too much. Have to conserve my breath for climbing up the hill. LOL All good wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Beautifully done, Tony! I especially loved:
"This small domestic truth
eclipsed the sun. That bird was you, last year."
At first, I thought it was just going to be about a house martin but then it seems there is a reference to time and a relationship that was lost.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Beautifully done, Tony! I especially loved:
"This small domestic truth
eclipsed the sun. That bird was you, last year."
At first, I thought it was just going to be about a house martin but then it seems there is a reference to time and a relationship that was lost.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, Helen, and for pointing out your favourite line. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from June Sargent
I really love Dolly's new format and you have penned a beautiful example of a rondaful. It's a bit sad, but very touching. And I'm sure we all have moments when time pauses, as a fleeting memory makes us sigh with a tinge of regret.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I really love Dolly's new format and you have penned a beautiful example of a rondaful. It's a bit sad, but very touching. And I'm sure we all have moments when time pauses, as a fleeting memory makes us sigh with a tinge of regret.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, June. Much appreciated. Dolly's new form suits this kind of melancholy reflection rather well. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Gloria ....
Love the photograph of the House Martin, and this is just a wonderful Rondaful. The perfect length for a verse to relay such a delightful moment in time, when time stood still with the awesome sight of a little bird going about its day.
I think the addition of the internal rhyme in the final line makes the verse flow.
A pleasure to read and review today, Tony.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Love the photograph of the House Martin, and this is just a wonderful Rondaful. The perfect length for a verse to relay such a delightful moment in time, when time stood still with the awesome sight of a little bird going about its day.
I think the addition of the internal rhyme in the final line makes the verse flow.
A pleasure to read and review today, Tony.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Gloria. Always a pleasure to hear from you. I'm not a great fan of some of these new forms, but this one of Dolly's seems to work well for this kind of melancholy, reflective poem. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Bill Pinder
Interesting poem that is written in a unique style. I like how you expressed the memory of a significant person that was triggered by the sighting of a bird.
Bill
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Interesting poem that is written in a unique style. I like how you expressed the memory of a significant person that was triggered by the sighting of a bird.
Bill
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanks very much for your review and kind comments, Bill. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Jozzie Stuchell Velesig
Beautiful. I love the movement created by the birds flight against the moment of time pausing. I also really enjoy the almost summary nature of the last lines.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Beautiful. I love the movement created by the birds flight against the moment of time pausing. I also really enjoy the almost summary nature of the last lines.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanks very much for your review and kind comments, Jozzie. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
I love the repeating line. It's funny, but it does wonders in circling the thrust of the poem, it displays a stronger message of the poem. Beautifully written Tony, how's the south of Adelaide, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I love the repeating line. It's funny, but it does wonders in circling the thrust of the poem, it displays a stronger message of the poem. Beautifully written Tony, how's the south of Adelaide, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanks very much for your review and kind comments, Roy. Much appreciated. All good down here in the deep south. I hope it is with you, too. Best wishes, Tony
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We?re OK too Tony.
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's kind of sad. I've heard that when birds come to visit and when butterflies or dragonflies land on you, it's the spirit of someone special come to visit. I like to imagine it's true.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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That's kind of sad. I've heard that when birds come to visit and when butterflies or dragonflies land on you, it's the spirit of someone special come to visit. I like to imagine it's true.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanks very much for your review and kind comments, Cindy. That's a lovely thought. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
