Time Paused Today
A Rondaful65 total reviews
Comment from DeboraDyess
What a difficult poetic format! But you nailed it and came out with a beautiful, melancholy poem. Truly lovely.
I found no errors and there is nothing to consider 'fixing'.
Thank you so much for sharing.
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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What a difficult poetic format! But you nailed it and came out with a beautiful, melancholy poem. Truly lovely.
I found no errors and there is nothing to consider 'fixing'.
Thank you so much for sharing.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, Deb. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I thought this was a really immersive piece of writing. Your poem reminds us how even the most simple things can remind us of a past event. A well constructed piece, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I thought this was a really immersive piece of writing. Your poem reminds us how even the most simple things can remind us of a past event. A well constructed piece, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, Jacob. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from JLR
Tony, in true form your really delivered a wonderful poem using Dolly's creative Rondaful. Perfect in execution and a delightful reflection of nature's happenings. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Tony, in true form your really delivered a wonderful poem using Dolly's creative Rondaful. Perfect in execution and a delightful reflection of nature's happenings. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, JLR. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
A nice little poem speaking of the transient nature of chances, and how you have to make the most of them, or like a bird, they will fly away leaving you behind. Nice sense of the ethereal, I think, nice fluttering rhythm to it. estory
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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A nice little poem speaking of the transient nature of chances, and how you have to make the most of them, or like a bird, they will fly away leaving you behind. Nice sense of the ethereal, I think, nice fluttering rhythm to it. estory
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, estory. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, Tony, already out of 6s. This is beautiful. The sadness that a moment can bring about, just by a bird flying by. The memory that brought forth came from deep inside, and makes me wonder if this is something that is real for you. Jim is an excellent teacher when it comes to poetry, you did this one so creatively well. A virtual six, my friend. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Oh, Tony, already out of 6s. This is beautiful. The sadness that a moment can bring about, just by a bird flying by. The memory that brought forth came from deep inside, and makes me wonder if this is something that is real for you. Jim is an excellent teacher when it comes to poetry, you did this one so creatively well. A virtual six, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, Sandra, and the virtual six. Much appreciated. You'll be glad to hear that this isn't drawn from any specific personal experience. Just a flight of fancy! LOL All good wishes, Tony
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
This is an amazing poem that meets the criteria of the style, but more than that uses such elegant poetic language as: "This small domestic truth
eclipsed the sun." A beautiful turn of a phrase that only a true poet can conceive.
It was an honor to bestow six stars on this perfectly written piece.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
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This is an amazing poem that meets the criteria of the style, but more than that uses such elegant poetic language as: "This small domestic truth
eclipsed the sun." A beautiful turn of a phrase that only a true poet can conceive.
It was an honor to bestow six stars on this perfectly written piece.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, Louise, and for the precious sixth star. Much appreciated, as are your comments about the choice of language and phrasing. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from harmony13
The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are clear,
descriptive and creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem.
The artwork compliments these words. Hope you are doing well.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are clear,
descriptive and creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem.
The artwork compliments these words. Hope you are doing well.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, Harmony. Much appreciated. All good here, and I hope you're doing well, too. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Cindy Decker
A beautifully-poignant poem. I was not completely sure of its meaning, until I looked closer at the bird hovering, trailed under the roof of his house. ...this small domestic truth eclipsed the sun..then it was obvious...
Also by repeating I turned away, reminded me of a person in denial at being at fault of the crumbled marriage.
Best wishes,
Good luck in the contests,
Cindy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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A beautifully-poignant poem. I was not completely sure of its meaning, until I looked closer at the bird hovering, trailed under the roof of his house. ...this small domestic truth eclipsed the sun..then it was obvious...
Also by repeating I turned away, reminded me of a person in denial at being at fault of the crumbled marriage.
Best wishes,
Good luck in the contests,
Cindy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review this one, Cindy. I appreciate your kind words. There have been quite a few interpretations of the poem, and yours is up with the best of them! All good wishes, Tony
Comment from The Death
Your poem has excellent imagery, along with a fine balance of emotions. Consistent meter and superb rhymes. Fine use of enjambment. The refrain lines work well and add up more meaning. It's a touching poem.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Your poem has excellent imagery, along with a fine balance of emotions. Consistent meter and superb rhymes. Fine use of enjambment. The refrain lines work well and add up more meaning. It's a touching poem.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review, The Death. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Jasmine Girl
A good poem to remember a loved one. You paused to remember this person who was no longer living. The bird represents memory of this person. Every time you see a bird, you paused to remember.
Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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A good poem to remember a loved one. You paused to remember this person who was no longer living. The bird represents memory of this person. Every time you see a bird, you paused to remember.
Well done.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your supportive review and interpretation of my poem, Lisa. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
