The last dance
Relationship ending2 total reviews
Comment from Halfree
Good work but needs some tuning. Perhaps the first verse becomes
the last verse. Just a thought. But then, you are the poet and know what you want to say'
Have not read FS posting for several months, other things been bumping around. Also looked at my stuff ... there's a smell there. I will be doing a lot or rewrite.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Good work but needs some tuning. Perhaps the first verse becomes
the last verse. Just a thought. But then, you are the poet and know what you want to say'
Have not read FS posting for several months, other things been bumping around. Also looked at my stuff ... there's a smell there. I will be doing a lot or rewrite.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your honest review. I appreciate every comment you made and value what suggestions you have offered. Thank you again
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
You've panted a picture so many have and are experiencing. Unfortunately, some are good at hiding who they are until they've conquered their prey. The mask may come off quick or it may take years. Your piece is one of encouragement to deal with strength and get out of the mess. The last stanza is strong and forward looking. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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You've panted a picture so many have and are experiencing. Unfortunately, some are good at hiding who they are until they've conquered their prey. The mask may come off quick or it may take years. Your piece is one of encouragement to deal with strength and get out of the mess. The last stanza is strong and forward looking. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your excellent review and your thoughts on this piece. I appreciate your sincerity! Thank you again
