A Silent Cry
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Killing Flies"Development of Alzheimer's Disease.
17 total reviews
Comment from Christy Mahon
For me this piece is the most compelling of the twelve I've found within "A Silent Cry". The poignant words being, "he never killed a fly before..."
Though subtle, It strikes at the heart of the disease's degenerative transformation while simultaneously insinuating the effects that ripple out beyond Carlo to everyone and everything surrounding him. The whole catastrophe reduced to one telling kernel.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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For me this piece is the most compelling of the twelve I've found within "A Silent Cry". The poignant words being, "he never killed a fly before..."
Though subtle, It strikes at the heart of the disease's degenerative transformation while simultaneously insinuating the effects that ripple out beyond Carlo to everyone and everything surrounding him. The whole catastrophe reduced to one telling kernel.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Wonderful review, Christy, thank you very much.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, descriptive and clear. I pondered
on the theme of this poem. Thank you for the author notes - they
helped to understand the theme of this poem. The poem flows and
connects well.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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The author's words are interesting, descriptive and clear. I pondered
on the theme of this poem. Thank you for the author notes - they
helped to understand the theme of this poem. The poem flows and
connects well.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Harmony, thanks for the review. All of the poems in the series of A Silent Cry have the same theme: my three year lasting difficult struggle to look after my (now deceased) husband, suffering from Alzheimer's Disease.
Comment from elchupakabra
The chair shifted (shifts) in a pool of light
he creases a smile without a purpose
grabs and poises the plastic weapon ---
(the first line does not work, it is in past tense compared to the rest of the beginning)
Other than this small note I enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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The chair shifted (shifts) in a pool of light
he creases a smile without a purpose
grabs and poises the plastic weapon ---
(the first line does not work, it is in past tense compared to the rest of the beginning)
Other than this small note I enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you for this review! Once again you saw the slip. I rectified.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Marjon, there are so many things seen by those who have lived 24/7 for years and years with a spouse to notice the changes, when alzheimer's strikes. This post shows this characteristic of the disease so graphically. Flies lined up in a row indeed!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Dear Marjon, there are so many things seen by those who have lived 24/7 for years and years with a spouse to notice the changes, when alzheimer's strikes. This post shows this characteristic of the disease so graphically. Flies lined up in a row indeed!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Suzanna. I feel for your (past, thank God) loss and struggles too.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem about the changing moods if someone with Alzheimer's. It seems they are sometimes drawn into the past and live the time over in their mind and tell everyone who likes to listen.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt poem about the changing moods if someone with Alzheimer's. It seems they are sometimes drawn into the past and live the time over in their mind and tell everyone who likes to listen.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the review, Sandra.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very powerful reflection on living with a mentally ill person and the constant changing moods of the insane well done captures it nicely done like the humor of the poem as well
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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very powerful reflection on living with a mentally ill person and the constant changing moods of the insane well done captures it nicely done like the humor of the poem as well
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the review, Jake!
Comment from royowen
It would have been sorrow untold dear Marjon, the thought of you being normally in a place of a sharing communication that only you had with a partner in life. I know Elaine and I have enjoyed the special communication on that level, it would be sadness personified. Beautifully written My friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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It would have been sorrow untold dear Marjon, the thought of you being normally in a place of a sharing communication that only you had with a partner in life. I know Elaine and I have enjoyed the special communication on that level, it would be sadness personified. Beautifully written My friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Tanj you very much for the review, Roy.
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Bless you
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:))
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Killing Flies
by Marjon van Bruggen
Hello, Marjon,
Excellent poem about the changes people with Alzheimer go through. I watched a movie last night about the issue....is called relic. It was weird and thought provoking....kind of scary.
Well done, Marjon.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Killing Flies
by Marjon van Bruggen
Hello, Marjon,
Excellent poem about the changes people with Alzheimer go through. I watched a movie last night about the issue....is called relic. It was weird and thought provoking....kind of scary.
Well done, Marjon.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Gypsy, for your review.
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
In few words but filled with questions and concern, you've painted a picture many have experienced. What happens to the mind remains a mystery difficult to understand or remedy. Why flies? What do they see? The mystery of the mind deepens. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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In few words but filled with questions and concern, you've painted a picture many have experienced. What happens to the mind remains a mystery difficult to understand or remedy. Why flies? What do they see? The mystery of the mind deepens. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you, for this kind review.
Comment from amada
very good lines, I like the line "in a pool of line..." I like the l's ensemble... and then, the smile without a purpose, jarring! I suggest that maybe it could be a note about his age at this time...
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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very good lines, I like the line "in a pool of line..." I like the l's ensemble... and then, the smile without a purpose, jarring! I suggest that maybe it could be a note about his age at this time...
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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I'll give an indication of his age in the next author's notes. Thanks so much for the review!
