O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Janet Foor
Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
I love spring and hope does shine in the sun.
Blessings
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Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
I love spring and hope does shine in the sun.
Blessings
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
I'm getting a little more used to the way
you express things --
Margaret
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Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
I'm getting a little more used to the way
you express things --
Margaret
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Kit Parker
Again, your work leaves me with a smile on my face. As I read this poem, the last visage of a cold Chicago winter is struggling to hold on against a pre-Easter springtime sun. The temperatures are still in the 20's (Fahrenheit) but the bright sunshine bears a promise of warmer days ahead. Summer, however, still seems so far away. Reading your poem reminded me of its inevitable arrival. Yea!
Your note on the last line was very useful in helping me to fully appreciate your word choice, particularly the structure of that last phrase. I am not familiar with modality in English Grammar and your explanation sent me straight to my old English Grammar Handbook. Sure enough, you are right of course and placing the word "Must" at the beginning of that short sentence does enhance the action of the verb "go."
Unfortunately, I fear that because the use of modality is not readily understood by many people, this poem's grammatical structure may pose a stumbling block for anyone who doesn't have access to your notation.
For me, however, this is a happy reminder of brighter days ahead - both weather-wise and emotionally, so I close with a big THANK YOU. - PEACE -
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Again, your work leaves me with a smile on my face. As I read this poem, the last visage of a cold Chicago winter is struggling to hold on against a pre-Easter springtime sun. The temperatures are still in the 20's (Fahrenheit) but the bright sunshine bears a promise of warmer days ahead. Summer, however, still seems so far away. Reading your poem reminded me of its inevitable arrival. Yea!
Your note on the last line was very useful in helping me to fully appreciate your word choice, particularly the structure of that last phrase. I am not familiar with modality in English Grammar and your explanation sent me straight to my old English Grammar Handbook. Sure enough, you are right of course and placing the word "Must" at the beginning of that short sentence does enhance the action of the verb "go."
Unfortunately, I fear that because the use of modality is not readily understood by many people, this poem's grammatical structure may pose a stumbling block for anyone who doesn't have access to your notation.
For me, however, this is a happy reminder of brighter days ahead - both weather-wise and emotionally, so I close with a big THANK YOU. - PEACE -
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from rjuselius
Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
this is an excellent piece of poetry! summertime is the only time people really radiate.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
this is an excellent piece of poetry! summertime is the only time people really radiate.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Curt Mongold
If the sentence is in question form it is acceptable, but as an exclamation, it hasn't been used that way since King James I. Language, especially a second language, is difficult to graasp in its nuancces and intent, which is why the Bible is in the mess it is. Language is fluid, and as it changes, so do we.
To put so much emphasis in your notes about it is to see someone who THINKS they know more than they actually do. And when you think you know it all, you can learn nothing.
How can you pour water into a cup already full?
Curtr
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If the sentence is in question form it is acceptable, but as an exclamation, it hasn't been used that way since King James I. Language, especially a second language, is difficult to graasp in its nuancces and intent, which is why the Bible is in the mess it is. Language is fluid, and as it changes, so do we.
To put so much emphasis in your notes about it is to see someone who THINKS they know more than they actually do. And when you think you know it all, you can learn nothing.
How can you pour water into a cup already full?
Curtr
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Alcreator - this doesn't really impact the reader. Though your syllables are right there is no cohesion with the lines.
Your author notes "last line" - I just don't understand the way you use the English language? What are you trying to say? This needs cleaned up to make a concise statement to explain your thoughts.
"is correct as per English Grammar use of modal emphatic, to give emphasis on the modal it must be put in the beginning to make it a modal emphatic sentence, accordingly the line has been used instead of •¿½??Dark must go!•¿½?? this is for information of readers who may not know the usage. Likewise Must you go or Must you speak or Must you write instead of You must go or You must speak or You must write might be used for giving emphasis on the sentence using modal in the beginning.
All this tells me above is your ability to create work is much like a maze. What am I supposed to take from this ?
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
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Alcreator - this doesn't really impact the reader. Though your syllables are right there is no cohesion with the lines.
Your author notes "last line" - I just don't understand the way you use the English language? What are you trying to say? This needs cleaned up to make a concise statement to explain your thoughts.
"is correct as per English Grammar use of modal emphatic, to give emphasis on the modal it must be put in the beginning to make it a modal emphatic sentence, accordingly the line has been used instead of •¿½??Dark must go!•¿½?? this is for information of readers who may not know the usage. Likewise Must you go or Must you speak or Must you write instead of You must go or You must speak or You must write might be used for giving emphasis on the sentence using modal in the beginning.
All this tells me above is your ability to create work is much like a maze. What am I supposed to take from this ?
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Nebukadneser
Another brilliant writ, my very wise friend.It's amazing how much you can say in so few words as spring comes in driving dark away.
Well done
You rock
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
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Another brilliant writ, my very wise friend.It's amazing how much you can say in so few words as spring comes in driving dark away.
Well done
You rock
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Alcreator Litt Dear
There you go again made me sit back and ponder on you 5 7 5 poem
Now are you saying, when the spring sun dies, no longer there will new birth from the frozen soil
( caused by the season of Winter) and our only hope is to-- find the light from God's grace?
Gert
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Hello Alcreator Litt Dear
There you go again made me sit back and ponder on you 5 7 5 poem
Now are you saying, when the spring sun dies, no longer there will new birth from the frozen soil
( caused by the season of Winter) and our only hope is to-- find the light from God's grace?
Gert
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from bhogg
I'm trying to get your work, but just can't. This one almost seems contradictory to me. I know you're basically using a 5-7-5 format, but not labelling as anything in particular, but it just doesn't work for me. Bill
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I'm trying to get your work, but just can't. This one almost seems contradictory to me. I know you're basically using a 5-7-5 format, but not labelling as anything in particular, but it just doesn't work for me. Bill
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Galactia
Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
Great little 5'7'5 poem reflecting the spiritual developmentt of man.
great job
Regards
Tia
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Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
Great little 5'7'5 poem reflecting the spiritual developmentt of man.
great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
