O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Bryana
Let's say good bye to winter first!
Enjoy spring and its flowers and trees.
And, of course, we'll be happy to see
Dark go.
Thanks for the explanation you give us.
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Let's say good bye to winter first!
Enjoy spring and its flowers and trees.
And, of course, we'll be happy to see
Dark go.
Thanks for the explanation you give us.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from Angels27
Something new to ponder...modal emphatic sentence. Very uplifting poem. Shine hopes caught my fancy. We must put n conscious effort to drive away the dark.
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Something new to ponder...modal emphatic sentence. Very uplifting poem. Shine hopes caught my fancy. We must put n conscious effort to drive away the dark.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from mauial
My take of this poem is that the summer sun stimulates growth. Metaphorically that sun light is truth and it will grow if we seek its glow. But that will work only if lies darkness goes.
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My take of this poem is that the summer sun stimulates growth. Metaphorically that sun light is truth and it will grow if we seek its glow. But that will work only if lies darkness goes.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from JM daSilva
I understand you want the sunlight to shine on us and make us wise. You equate darkness with ignorance and evil, so light shines through bringing good things.
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I understand you want the sunlight to shine on us and make us wise. You equate darkness with ignorance and evil, so light shines through bringing good things.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Perfect grammar usage that requires no disclaimer. The entrant of a new sun means new strenght, new idea, fresh hope and great expectation. Yes dark must go since two kings can not rule at the same time in the same palace.
ola thomas
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Perfect grammar usage that requires no disclaimer. The entrant of a new sun means new strenght, new idea, fresh hope and great expectation. Yes dark must go since two kings can not rule at the same time in the same palace.
ola thomas
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from GracieAnn
Nice fulfillment of the syllable count. I'm not sure about the misplaced word order though. Must dark go sounds a little like the Star Wars character Yoda or trying to translate another language that puts adjectives and modifiers in a different word order. Dark must go makes more sense, or to follow somehow the word set of the previous lines, to Dark goes.
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Nice fulfillment of the syllable count. I'm not sure about the misplaced word order though. Must dark go sounds a little like the Star Wars character Yoda or trying to translate another language that puts adjectives and modifiers in a different word order. Dark must go makes more sense, or to follow somehow the word set of the previous lines, to Dark goes.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Gungalo
Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
You mean well with your write here and for the most part you do okay. But the last "Must dark go." You need to understand it comes off as a question, thought there is no question mark there.
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Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
You mean well with your write here and for the most part you do okay. But the last "Must dark go." You need to understand it comes off as a question, thought there is no question mark there.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from mshugh
This one i get - and really like - the transition into spring - you made that come alive with your second line especially
Well done
Michael
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This one i get - and really like - the transition into spring - you made that come alive with your second line especially
Well done
Michael
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from c_lucas
The Spring brings about the end of winter, but introduces the miseries of Spring. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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The Spring brings about the end of winter, but introduces the miseries of Spring. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from fairy77
This is lovely and soothing. A very enjoyable pic.Loved the tulips and makes us wise.Congrats for your success and thanks for sharing:) beth fairy77.
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This is lovely and soothing. A very enjoyable pic.Loved the tulips and makes us wise.Congrats for your success and thanks for sharing:) beth fairy77.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
