Comment from Soledadpaz

Exceptional

Thanks for the explanation of the last sentence in this poem. Instinctively I wanted to read: Dark must go! But it does have more impact the way it is written.

I love the: "grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds" construction. Quite effective.

Sol

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

I am not familiar with the "modal" construction, but it comes across as clumsy to me. My feeling is that the very first poem introducing the book should make a special effort to use clear language. [Editing tip - Here's how you can get rid of that funny formatting that came out in your notes: Go back to the edit screen, delete the strange symbols, replace them with the quotation marks you want, then be sure to click on "save" at the bottom of the edit screen. This always works for me.] good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

yup, as I said, you seem to be getting the hang of this now. to be honest weather poems bore me, but since you kept this one to bare minimum, I will be generous and rate it five. I will review them all, cos they pay well. Indie

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Outside of the portion reading, Must dark go! I found this poem of yours readable, can understand it and enjoy it, unlike the others. I took from this the manner of how God created the seasons and change.
Well written... John

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

Beautiful picture and love nature your poem shows lots of faith well presented piece thank you for sharing my friend gazzagodbod

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from Cedar

Good

Your presentation of this 5-7-5 is excellent. The picture that you have selected really matches your subject. However, in my opinion, all the punctuation takes away from your poem.

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from Neelam Sangwai

Good

The concept is expressed in various shades since a long time that the sun comes with light and hope and darkness steps back. Expecting some novelty in mode of expression. - Neelam

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from Allison78

Excellent

I agree, I'm ready for the dark to go! There is only so much winter and darkness that I can take. Spring to me represents so much more than just warm weather. Beautiful poem!

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from candi lester

Excellent

I liked this piece of writing................
thpought it was well done.............
and well written............
thanks for sharing with us......
SWEETNESS FOREVER

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

A beautifully composed poem of hope for the future. I like the explanation in the author notes. A very beautiful presentation~Debbie

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2013