O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Sanku
good thought process.spring is coming above everything we wish for some wisdom. no doubt .i am sorry i am not with you about the last line 'dark must go ' ,to me is much finer. of course this is your poem.
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good thought process.spring is coming above everything we wish for some wisdom. no doubt .i am sorry i am not with you about the last line 'dark must go ' ,to me is much finer. of course this is your poem.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a nicely done poem. I am always stunned by this form that says so much, in just a three lines. Beautiful artwork!
Well done! Warm regards,
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This is a nicely done poem. I am always stunned by this form that says so much, in just a three lines. Beautiful artwork!
Well done! Warm regards,
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from yonashalom
Hi!
I kind of thought you were playing with the form of the last line for emphasis. Either that, or you were speaking in Yoda. :) This poem tells of spring leaving and the summer's new sun coming in. I find the listing creates no visuals. It is quite abstract. Spring brings on new light from winter, longer days, etc. So, I am having a hard time connecting summer to the new sun as opposed to Spring initiating this.
However, I just had a thought, you may be speaking from the other side of the world. I'll have to check your profile. :) Didn't think of that till just now. Then the change would make sense, but I still think the listing lacks imagery or appeals to the senses.
~Yona
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Hi!
I kind of thought you were playing with the form of the last line for emphasis. Either that, or you were speaking in Yoda. :) This poem tells of spring leaving and the summer's new sun coming in. I find the listing creates no visuals. It is quite abstract. Spring brings on new light from winter, longer days, etc. So, I am having a hard time connecting summer to the new sun as opposed to Spring initiating this.
However, I just had a thought, you may be speaking from the other side of the world. I'll have to check your profile. :) Didn't think of that till just now. Then the change would make sense, but I still think the listing lacks imagery or appeals to the senses.
~Yona
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from Opticianjeff
I understand your notes about the poem. It does seem like an odd usage, but I understand it. Your short little gem makes me think of Spring as we sit here with snow showers! Spring will be here soon enough. Thank you for sharing this piece.
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I understand your notes about the poem. It does seem like an odd usage, but I understand it. Your short little gem makes me think of Spring as we sit here with snow showers! Spring will be here soon enough. Thank you for sharing this piece.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from mbagby23
Very sweet. I notice sometimes how people change in the spring time. It's like they have a new attitude. Lovely to see the earth change.
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Very sweet. I notice sometimes how people change in the spring time. It's like they have a new attitude. Lovely to see the earth change.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from Adri7enne
It's different. So, in saying goodbye to spring, you are coaxing lights to grow, hopes to shine, ect. Could you ask the snow to depart while you're at it? We just had another foot of it to shovel off the steps this morning. LOL! Spring is not coming early here. Interesting poetry, A.
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It's different. So, in saying goodbye to spring, you are coaxing lights to grow, hopes to shine, ect. Could you ask the snow to depart while you're at it? We just had another foot of it to shovel off the steps this morning. LOL! Spring is not coming early here. Interesting poetry, A.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from K.W.
Very interesting and informative notes. I understand the reasoning behind the final sentence, but think it actually has more impact for the layman in reverse order. Here it sounds like a question regardless of the exclamation point. I'm a bit confused about the content as well. Very best, k
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Very interesting and informative notes. I understand the reasoning behind the final sentence, but think it actually has more impact for the layman in reverse order. Here it sounds like a question regardless of the exclamation point. I'm a bit confused about the content as well. Very best, k
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from God's Writer
A great short little poem. Very thought provoking though. You have said far more than you have written. Thank you for this wonderful poem.
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A great short little poem. Very thought provoking though. You have said far more than you have written. Thank you for this wonderful poem.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from amahra
Great use of words. Finally beginning to get your mind and style in your writing. Not that that should have been important to you. Loved the image you chose. Love how you use language. Great job my dear.
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Great use of words. Finally beginning to get your mind and style in your writing. Not that that should have been important to you. Loved the image you chose. Love how you use language. Great job my dear.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This thought-provoking poem seems to imply that man should progress in pursuit of knowledge--moving from the mild to the stronger.
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This thought-provoking poem seems to imply that man should progress in pursuit of knowledge--moving from the mild to the stronger.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
