O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from mtrybak
I found this very interesting considering it is such a short picee. I'm unused to seeing thoughts started on onw line and continued on another. But it didn't seem to interrupt the flow or make the message less clear so I say job well done!
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I found this very interesting considering it is such a short picee. I'm unused to seeing thoughts started on onw line and continued on another. But it didn't seem to interrupt the flow or make the message less clear so I say job well done!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from linsbm
This is an interesting 5-7-5 poem. Your message is very clear. Change in season brings another face in the light of its course. After Spring comes light in the face of Summer with sunlight of new hopes. Your subject is focus right on Nature's and God's infinite creations. Well done. Thanks for sharing.
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This is an interesting 5-7-5 poem. Your message is very clear. Change in season brings another face in the light of its course. After Spring comes light in the face of Summer with sunlight of new hopes. Your subject is focus right on Nature's and God's infinite creations. Well done. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I always enjoy poems about seasons and this one speaks of hopes and illuminations of summer.Just like the brighter days we look for our attitudes to change s the o to expect more of ourselves. Giddy
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I always enjoy poems about seasons and this one speaks of hopes and illuminations of summer.Just like the brighter days we look for our attitudes to change s the o to expect more of ourselves. Giddy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from dragonpoet
I don't think you need the background before the poem when almost the same thing is in the notes.
The haiku is well written and shows a love of nature and belief that God not only controls nature but also uses the seasons to help change our moods from darkness of winter to light and hope of spring.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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I don't think you need the background before the poem when almost the same thing is in the notes.
The haiku is well written and shows a love of nature and belief that God not only controls nature but also uses the seasons to help change our moods from darkness of winter to light and hope of spring.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from katz meow
Another truly interesting, one of kind write. I really like your style of getting your point across. Again an excellent little piece...katz
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Another truly interesting, one of kind write. I really like your style of getting your point across. Again an excellent little piece...katz
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from Val Crisson
Okay, I really want to like this five seven five poem. But the author's notes plus the "background notes," make this pondrous to me. In my mind the poet explains his poem more than he let's the reader interpret it.
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Okay, I really want to like this five seven five poem. But the author's notes plus the "background notes," make this pondrous to me. In my mind the poet explains his poem more than he let's the reader interpret it.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from sunnilicious
Your author notes are interesting. I needed them to understand the poem. Well thought out. Original concepts. Good work. Keep it up.
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Your author notes are interesting. I needed them to understand the poem. Well thought out. Original concepts. Good work. Keep it up.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from LaDonnaCole
Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
I like this one. Very hopeful and I enjoyed the use of the modal emphatic!
Thanks for sharing.
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Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!
I like this one. Very hopeful and I enjoyed the use of the modal emphatic!
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from Michael Wayne
From what I have seen of your work so far, writing with syllable counts serves you well. I found the transition from second to third line in this piece to be a bit forced and disruptive to the rhythm.
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From what I have seen of your work so far, writing with syllable counts serves you well. I found the transition from second to third line in this piece to be a bit forced and disruptive to the rhythm.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from angelmagnet
Thanks for the information that you posted in your author notes. I like the poem as well. Your ecstasy is contagious and I share it with gratitude. Thank you
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Thanks for the information that you posted in your author notes. I like the poem as well. Your ecstasy is contagious and I share it with gratitude. Thank you
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
