Comment from Rmocruz

Excellent

Correct to 5-7-5 seventeen syllable count.
A profound positive message is presented.
A beautiful picture of tulips, a symbol of the
Spring season, enhances this message.

Well written.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

Comment from RodG

Average

I am not sure why you are bidding Spring goodbye if it is bringing us "new sun" and growing light and giving us shining hopes. It appears English is your second language. For example, are you ordering dark to go or are you asking why it must go? Your exclamation mark confuses us. Try writing what you want to say as complete sentences first. Then compress them into shorter verses. RodG

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

This piece meets the criteria of the 5-7-5. The syllable count is correct as the writer delivers a profound message. The message puts the readers mind to work. Good job.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

Comment from Antithesis

Good

A nice piece of poetry praising the summer.
There was something about the phrases "Let new sun grow lights" and "Must dark go!" that didn't quite ring completely well in my ears. Nothing disasterous in any way, but enough for me to not fall for it completely. Though there can be no doubt that you have a wonderful language far superior to my own. Hopefully you'll see this review as completely subjective, and not let it bring you down!

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

Comment from FLutterodt

Excellent

Bye, spring! Let new sun
grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make
us wise. Must dark go!

Nature is one of the best inspirations for poetry and for me the weather just calls me to write always. I love your lovely little poem. It is not just the though of sunshine alone that excites me but the colours and the flower you have uses speak volumes. Well done

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT

Excellent

This something I can understand my friend Yu did a great job not only with your words but with the photo as well kudos to you
TK

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from October21

Excellent

Must dark go
- shouldn't it be: Dark must go!

Otherwise a brilliant poem, really light and lovely, describing summer in a beautiful and wonderful way!

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

Comment from hollydee

Excellent

I think this is so peaceful looking. The artwork highlights your words, the picture is full of delightful colors, with gentle light erasing the darkness and infusing the world with color and charm. It is just like your words... " Bye, spring! Let new sun grow lights, shine hopes, glow minds, make us wise. Must dark go! "

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS A LOT FOR THIS HONEST AND ARTISTIC REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.

Comment from Beatlegirl61

Excellent

A very nice haiku and I enjoyed this one as much as the previous poem I have read!! Really creative wordage and I think you've done well with the restrictive form you have chosen! Nice job! I love haiku and seynru!!
Take care and be well...Carol ::)

'beatle' quote today: "Keeping an eye on the world going by my window..."

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS A LOT FOR THIS PROFESSIONAL REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.

FIRST A GOOD HEART, SECOND A POET AND THIRD A PROFESSIONAL REVIEWER ALL MAKE A LITERARY REVIEW.

Comment from mariejames

Excellent

Nice Haiku. I having a growing appreciation for this type of poetry, so rich in metaphors. Eventually, I'll try a few. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2006