O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from dmt1967
I hope summer is coming soon its still cold here though I love this poem and the picture goes with the poem yellow is also a summer color thank you for sharing
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I hope summer is coming soon its still cold here though I love this poem and the picture goes with the poem yellow is also a summer color thank you for sharing
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Selina Stambi
Again, I'm trying very hard to make sense of the poem.
I like the beginning - 'bye spring ... sounds childlike and perky.
I can't figure out what 'must dark go' means.
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Again, I'm trying very hard to make sense of the poem.
I like the beginning - 'bye spring ... sounds childlike and perky.
I can't figure out what 'must dark go' means.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Ed_Anderson
I gave you Four stars because I was a bit confused by this poem. The first line seems as if you are saying goodbye to spring and yet the rest of it reads as though you are welcoming it.
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I gave you Four stars because I was a bit confused by this poem. The first line seems as if you are saying goodbye to spring and yet the rest of it reads as though you are welcoming it.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Glasstruth
I can't quite understand this. Spring traditionally is a sign of hope, while I can see you comparing the darkness to the other side of this, it still needs something. Maybe a stronger metaphor. Don't know. Thanks for sharing. Les
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I can't quite understand this. Spring traditionally is a sign of hope, while I can see you comparing the darkness to the other side of this, it still needs something. Maybe a stronger metaphor. Don't know. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from steevie
Must dark go! I noticed that your last line was in the form of an exclamation mark, rather than a question mark. Do we need the darkness to balance out the light?
steve
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Must dark go! I noticed that your last line was in the form of an exclamation mark, rather than a question mark. Do we need the darkness to balance out the light?
steve
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from write hand blue
I see a very nice picture of tulips this is Spring time I would guess. The background is a lovely shade of green and the font is a nice matching shade of brown. A rather well presented poem. In dire need of an editor...
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I see a very nice picture of tulips this is Spring time I would guess. The background is a lovely shade of green and the font is a nice matching shade of brown. A rather well presented poem. In dire need of an editor...
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from GWHARGIS
Liked the energy to this. The light imagery was fresh and helped create a energetic feel. The flow and the rhythm were great. Nicely done.
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Liked the energy to this. The light imagery was fresh and helped create a energetic feel. The flow and the rhythm were great. Nicely done.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from prayingpoet
Well, I understand that spring comes and goes, fall comes and goes, there is new hope...when God comes into a life and changes their heart and mind, the darkness goes.
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Well, I understand that spring comes and goes, fall comes and goes, there is new hope...when God comes into a life and changes their heart and mind, the darkness goes.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from mumsyone
Although it is 5-7-5 syllables, your poem makes very little sense, no matter what or whose style it is. Spring usually brings the sun, so why would you tell it goodbye and then ask for the sun? And 'must dark go' sounds like it needs a question mark rather than an exclamation point. I like punctuation in poetry, but there's a little too much in these three little lines. Sorry!
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Although it is 5-7-5 syllables, your poem makes very little sense, no matter what or whose style it is. Spring usually brings the sun, so why would you tell it goodbye and then ask for the sun? And 'must dark go' sounds like it needs a question mark rather than an exclamation point. I like punctuation in poetry, but there's a little too much in these three little lines. Sorry!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is beautifully illustrated and the poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count.
good assonance of long I sounds in lights shine
and of long O sounds in hopes glow
good alliteration in minds/make/must
Brooke
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Your poem is beautifully illustrated and the poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count.
good assonance of long I sounds in lights shine
and of long O sounds in hopes glow
good alliteration in minds/make/must
Brooke
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
