O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Caressa_08
The title,the lavender tulips & poem are in unison..Yes, Spring is a season of Light, not dark for nature, of course...Though storms will come & go...Spring definitely is a season to rejoice!
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The title,the lavender tulips & poem are in unison..Yes, Spring is a season of Light, not dark for nature, of course...Though storms will come & go...Spring definitely is a season to rejoice!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from TKField
No, no, no, no, no. You can't say "Must dark go" it makes no sense in the context of the rest of the piece and it's a question to boot.The stuff up to that last line is at least semi-coherent, but still makes little sense. Writing is a learning process, and you certainly have your work cut out for you. You seem to be quite religious, so why not pray for divine intervention?
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No, no, no, no, no. You can't say "Must dark go" it makes no sense in the context of the rest of the piece and it's a question to boot.The stuff up to that last line is at least semi-coherent, but still makes little sense. Writing is a learning process, and you certainly have your work cut out for you. You seem to be quite religious, so why not pray for divine intervention?
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from isurp
Your 5-7-5 syllable count is right on and this poem is much easier to decipher. I definitely would have given it 5 stars if you would have finished with "Dark must go!" But I'm not sure if that's your message.
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Your 5-7-5 syllable count is right on and this poem is much easier to decipher. I definitely would have given it 5 stars if you would have finished with "Dark must go!" But I'm not sure if that's your message.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Perp Ihebom
The message of this poem about spring is understandable. It's almost like a prayer or wish that the sun should come in and make life better. However, the language makes it hazy. The last line is not well stated. cheers
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The message of this poem about spring is understandable. It's almost like a prayer or wish that the sun should come in and make life better. However, the language makes it hazy. The last line is not well stated. cheers
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from garrymc5
Here you link the Spring to the sun, and therefore to the light that the sun provides. It is that energy in which you place hope for wisdom. Indeed 'the light; for you, is wisdom. Be aware that Human development from the Dark Ages, to the medical, to the Enlightenment is progress made from discovery, Science and rationality. Religion has usually been a force of conserving the power of petty kings and autocratic rulers, people who created poverty and privilege. Too often people forget that today, there is LESS poverty than in the past, and more comfort and a longer life than in the past.
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Here you link the Spring to the sun, and therefore to the light that the sun provides. It is that energy in which you place hope for wisdom. Indeed 'the light; for you, is wisdom. Be aware that Human development from the Dark Ages, to the medical, to the Enlightenment is progress made from discovery, Science and rationality. Religion has usually been a force of conserving the power of petty kings and autocratic rulers, people who created poverty and privilege. Too often people forget that today, there is LESS poverty than in the past, and more comfort and a longer life than in the past.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Chaise Norfleet
Great nature piece, unfortunately in the south, it seems that you can never decipher the difference between summer and spring because it's always extra hot, so the new sun really is just a hotter sun that increases the temperature by twenty degrees.
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Great nature piece, unfortunately in the south, it seems that you can never decipher the difference between summer and spring because it's always extra hot, so the new sun really is just a hotter sun that increases the temperature by twenty degrees.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Not 'really' sure what 'Must dark go', means? I 'think' you are saying Evil must go? I think you are comparing 'Spring' to our 'old ways', and welcoming new life and serving God saying good-bye to the old. Radiating with new hope.
Nice 5-7-5, beautifully presented. Just a bit confusing. Thanks for sharing. Betty
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Not 'really' sure what 'Must dark go', means? I 'think' you are saying Evil must go? I think you are comparing 'Spring' to our 'old ways', and welcoming new life and serving God saying good-bye to the old. Radiating with new hope.
Nice 5-7-5, beautifully presented. Just a bit confusing. Thanks for sharing. Betty
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Bobbi22
Spring brings new life and when spring leaves, that life grows. Metaphorically, spring symbolizes hope for a better tomorrow. Your 5-7-5 is in good form.
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Spring brings new life and when spring leaves, that life grows. Metaphorically, spring symbolizes hope for a better tomorrow. Your 5-7-5 is in good form.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Doc Holiday
This one I found more inspiring and to the point. Longer daylight hours, warmer sun, generally makes most of us happier.
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This one I found more inspiring and to the point. Longer daylight hours, warmer sun, generally makes most of us happier.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from visionary1234
got the syllable count right, and I liked the 2nd line with two-word emphatic points, - but "must dark go" sounds convoluted and unnatural, a bit contrived?
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got the syllable count right, and I liked the 2nd line with two-word emphatic points, - but "must dark go" sounds convoluted and unnatural, a bit contrived?
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
