O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Pj Dennison
This highly creative poem is a rainbow of imagery because it brings together the colors of spring and summer, joyful sunlight, and everything is alive and growing and glowing too especially if you count the fireflies. This poem has a sense of being carefree. Excellent contemporary Haiku.
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This highly creative poem is a rainbow of imagery because it brings together the colors of spring and summer, joyful sunlight, and everything is alive and growing and glowing too especially if you count the fireflies. This poem has a sense of being carefree. Excellent contemporary Haiku.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
Comment from royowen
You're right! It was exactly 18 words, I have no idea what form this might be just the it's probably a shaiku, (one mor word than a haiku) I'm glad you've chased away the dark. Hail! Hail! Summer days, blessings Roy
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You're right! It was exactly 18 words, I have no idea what form this might be just the it's probably a shaiku, (one mor word than a haiku) I'm glad you've chased away the dark. Hail! Hail! Summer days, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
Comment from Mastery
Hello author. Once again you show a different angle on nature and life. I also, did not understand the last line of this, however, your author's notes explain it. Bob
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Hello author. Once again you show a different angle on nature and life. I also, did not understand the last line of this, however, your author's notes explain it. Bob
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from L. Sherman
Another poem and this one sits better with me. :) A very strong feeling of the oneness and interconnected-ness of everything. All flows in one direction and is essential to life. Nicely penned.
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Another poem and this one sits better with me. :) A very strong feeling of the oneness and interconnected-ness of everything. All flows in one direction and is essential to life. Nicely penned.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from MizKat
Alcreator Litt Dear - I liked this 5-7-5 poem too. Your author notes are really helpul too as you explain your short poem in more detail. Kat
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Alcreator Litt Dear - I liked this 5-7-5 poem too. Your author notes are really helpul too as you explain your short poem in more detail. Kat
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from cvcopac
With spring comes uncertain weather: days of intermittent climes bring all the variables to the heather, often within a single day, rain, snow, and bright sunshine, wherever you go. Crazy inconsistent spring, bright and gaudy, glum and dervish: pneumonia and suicidal Robins.
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With spring comes uncertain weather: days of intermittent climes bring all the variables to the heather, often within a single day, rain, snow, and bright sunshine, wherever you go. Crazy inconsistent spring, bright and gaudy, glum and dervish: pneumonia and suicidal Robins.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from joann r romei
This was different, it seems the last line is the one that makes the reader ponder, what does the dark do that we hate to see it go,? Interesting and personal
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This was different, it seems the last line is the one that makes the reader ponder, what does the dark do that we hate to see it go,? Interesting and personal
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from Norbanus
Even bringing sun
and sending Spring asunder
man takes full credit
Man is created
the image of creation
or is that backwards
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Even bringing sun
and sending Spring asunder
man takes full credit
Man is created
the image of creation
or is that backwards
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from Matthew M.
I thought this poem was very interesting.
I had to read it a couple iof times to get the full meaning of it. What made it difficult to me was the continuation of the sentence that went through the first line into the second lie and finished in the third. Often in 5-7-5 poetry each line is it's own thought. The construct of the last sentence has a feel of a question instead of an exclamation, you might want to consider the punctuation.
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I thought this poem was very interesting.
I had to read it a couple iof times to get the full meaning of it. What made it difficult to me was the continuation of the sentence that went through the first line into the second lie and finished in the third. Often in 5-7-5 poetry each line is it's own thought. The construct of the last sentence has a feel of a question instead of an exclamation, you might want to consider the punctuation.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from Bill Schott
"Must dark go" in English, could never be anything but an interrogative. "Is it necessary that dark go?" No rule of modals would support this third line of your poem as a correct usage of 'must' in an English sentence. That being said, your approach to this poetry in English is interesting and curious.
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"Must dark go" in English, could never be anything but an interrogative. "Is it necessary that dark go?" No rule of modals would support this third line of your poem as a correct usage of 'must' in an English sentence. That being said, your approach to this poetry in English is interesting and curious.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
