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For faith sees not with the eyes...53 total reviews
Comment from richie b
Yvette,
Your poem whispers to the reader the majesty
that awaits us in eternity. Your words create heavenly
images that grasp our imagination.
Best wishes in contest.
Blessings,
Richie
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Yvette,
Your poem whispers to the reader the majesty
that awaits us in eternity. Your words create heavenly
images that grasp our imagination.
Best wishes in contest.
Blessings,
Richie
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, sir -- glad you found some depth in this one! :) Take care out there and have a sunshiny week of wonder! ;) Yvette
Comment from mauial
Wow very nicely written. Thanks for the note, it helped me understand, I think ð???, what you were trying to say. It's like the lights went on, a sudden understanding. That's what I see in this write.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Wow very nicely written. Thanks for the note, it helped me understand, I think ð???, what you were trying to say. It's like the lights went on, a sudden understanding. That's what I see in this write.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Wow, mauial, your awesome review and those bright shining stars have made my morning! Been some nutty times around here preparing this house for market (downsizing!) and I've not had the time to write that I'm used to! ;) Thanx so much for this and may you have a wonderful remainder of the week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Yvette.
You ran out the metaphors for this one. You are the only other writer here that has used the expressive word. "din." That is a great word. You strategically placed that into an already full poem.
Good tanka style and good luck in the contest.
DA Z ð???
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Hi Yvette.
You ran out the metaphors for this one. You are the only other writer here that has used the expressive word. "din." That is a great word. You strategically placed that into an already full poem.
Good tanka style and good luck in the contest.
DA Z ð???
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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LOL! Have always loved the 'visual' connotations that the word carries along with the dissonance of sound... :) Thanx for your review, Z! ;) Yvette
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You're welcome
Comment from Stephen Force
Thank you Y.M. you certainly have a way with words. School is out and you still manage to teach." Troth, Verity" !!!! Thank you for adding to my vocabulary. This is a really "deep" posting. Now you will excuse me while I go put on my boots:). Good luck, Steve
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you Y.M. you certainly have a way with words. School is out and you still manage to teach." Troth, Verity" !!!! Thank you for adding to my vocabulary. This is a really "deep" posting. Now you will excuse me while I go put on my boots:). Good luck, Steve
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Glad you enjoyed my bit of non-compliant 'Tanka', Steve -- think it reflects 'where I was' when I took some time out of the 'packing' and 'cleaning' to enter the contest... Although, I gotta say, I'm wondering if your review was actually a backhanded way of calling BS on the poem [given 'deep' and 'boots' and such]... is that the case? Take care out there. Yvette
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Not at all Y.M. it was my way of interjecting humor into my use of a dated term "deep" eternity's "troth" I think is a very profound statement, and the boot's comment was humor for its profundity dat's all. Luv Steve
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Kinda figured, but there's someone else one here (two actually) that have, shall we say, not been playing nice, and I guess I just over-acted. Please forgive my 'bluntness', but honesty and openness is who I am... :) ;) We good? :) ;)
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Nothing to forgive, When you say here are you referring to fanstory or elsewhere? In any event I like you try to be open and honest, with a side of tact:) You and I are good. As long as you and I can be honest with each other we will always be good. I will not like everything you post. but I will not criticize or critique in meanness or malice. I don't see you doing that either. Now post something I can read:)
Comment from Lobber
Hi there my feisty friend,
I know nothing about Tanka poems, but I too entered the contest.
I gather the 3rd line is supposed to some big theatrical event or cosmic revelation that has a profound effect on one personally. This is probably a bunch of b.s. but it sounds good after I wrote it.
In my Tanka I offer audio & video (very theatrical) when my tree crashes down. I don't get hit by it or anything truly bloody like that. I choose to just scream and a few birds take off. Hardly worthy of a Faulkner character.
You know how honest I am - ; ) so I have a stupid suggestion )fir( the master of words. Would changing your )our( to )my( make it more Tanka-ish? The contest is over - soooooo! What d'ya say?
- I wish you peace, joy & a drunken evening
. . . Lobber (cryptic for you . . . rej)
Forget All This Since You Will Win
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Hi there my feisty friend,
I know nothing about Tanka poems, but I too entered the contest.
I gather the 3rd line is supposed to some big theatrical event or cosmic revelation that has a profound effect on one personally. This is probably a bunch of b.s. but it sounds good after I wrote it.
In my Tanka I offer audio & video (very theatrical) when my tree crashes down. I don't get hit by it or anything truly bloody like that. I choose to just scream and a few birds take off. Hardly worthy of a Faulkner character.
You know how honest I am - ; ) so I have a stupid suggestion )fir( the master of words. Would changing your )our( to )my( make it more Tanka-ish? The contest is over - soooooo! What d'ya say?
- I wish you peace, joy & a drunken evening
. . . Lobber (cryptic for you . . . rej)
Forget All This Since You Will Win
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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I am certainly no poet by training or anything... I have Pantygynt's instructions and guidelines printed and in my top drawer and when I took the time out from all this 'packing' and 'cleaning' to write this one, I just wasn't feel 'all nature-eey' - lol! On top of that, I've got some 'frustrating' things going on right now (probably one of the reasons I 'wasn't feelin it' - lol!) so I took the guidelines and loosely applied them... I'm sure the 'poet committee' will not look kindly on it! ;) :) :) But, again, I wear my defiance with grace... wink, wink.
Oh, and the 'our' was intentional so I think I'll leave it - kinda fits with my mood. :) ;)
Thanx so much for being you and making me smile - I really needed that!! Take care of you out there! :) Yvette
P.S. Think you should probably re-think that last statement (even though it made me smile)!!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello dear Yvette,
What a moving poetic offering! I have no idea why you believe this is a "modern twist on a traditional Tanka" as it surely appears to me to be exactly what a Tanka is supposed to be, but I love your creativity and message! Wishing I had a sixth star! Loving "'tis" and "troth," too! :)
Coffee is brewing... just sayin'... :)
diane
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Hello dear Yvette,
What a moving poetic offering! I have no idea why you believe this is a "modern twist on a traditional Tanka" as it surely appears to me to be exactly what a Tanka is supposed to be, but I love your creativity and message! Wishing I had a sixth star! Loving "'tis" and "troth," too! :)
Coffee is brewing... just sayin'... :)
diane
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Pour me a cup, I'm on my way! Life is too insane down here (LOL!) -- have to send you flyer I put together this weekend. :) Oh, and I just gave two more 'skills assessments' this morning and just wanna cry: these kids DID NOT get what they needed due to the whole "going virtual" crap that took up the last quarter plus of the end of last year and now they're doing the same thing to start the year? Momma-mia, what the he--... they're 'scores' are pathetic, Diane!! ;) :) :P :P Anyway, not my problem, I guess... just a sad state of affairs!
Thanx for stopping in on this one -- I'm trying to get back on track this week so, wish me luck! It's only the husband's stuff 'holding things up' so I'm gonna just 'do what I do' ... lol! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Thank you, Yvette. :) I already knew what troth meant. With you, I always pick up my dictionary, teacher. :) That's why I like reading you. You sway me with your words, for your sayings are profound and I learn. Or should I say, " lending momentary sight / into eternity's troth." This is a good offering for the Tanka Poetry Contests.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Yvette. :) I already knew what troth meant. With you, I always pick up my dictionary, teacher. :) That's why I like reading you. You sway me with your words, for your sayings are profound and I learn. Or should I say, " lending momentary sight / into eternity's troth." This is a good offering for the Tanka Poetry Contests.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, Jose -- you know it's always great to hear from you! :) I do apologize that I'm so far behind, but life seems to refuse to find a 'smooth sailing' mode over here - lol! ;) Take care out there and have a sunshiny week of wonder over there in the Lone Star State! ;) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
Oh, Yvette, your modern twist of a tanka is so good. Actually, I don't know enough about tankas to know why this beautiful one is not traditional. I see that you have two separate complete thoughts joined by a great pivotal line. You tell a complete story and use wonderful imagery.
I have no six stars left for this deserving poem. I predict a winner here though.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Oh, Yvette, your modern twist of a tanka is so good. Actually, I don't know enough about tankas to know why this beautiful one is not traditional. I see that you have two separate complete thoughts joined by a great pivotal line. You tell a complete story and use wonderful imagery.
I have no six stars left for this deserving poem. I predict a winner here though.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Watch out with those predictions, my lady -- I don't want your 'percentage' to go down... lol! ;) :) Thank you so very much for such an awesome review, BBF - stars aren't as important as those wonderful words!! ;) So glad you enjoyed this one... and I'm gonna be caught up this week after smooth the road with this NEW year... ugh. !! ;) :) Take care down there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I love your poems, Yvette. When I read your writing it really makes me think. I actually read this piece twice after reading 'for faith sees not with the eyes.' Another exceptional piece of writing. I really enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I love your poems, Yvette. When I read your writing it really makes me think. I actually read this piece twice after reading 'for faith sees not with the eyes.' Another exceptional piece of writing. I really enjoyed it!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Well, J-D, you have certainly put a smile on my face on a crazy Monday - THANK you very much for those lovely stars! ;) So glad this one touched you -- that means as much as the stars! ;) ;) Sorry so far behind, but life seems to refuse to find a 'smooth sailing' mode over here - lol! ;) Yvette
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, Yvette.
-A well written tanka that
meets all of the requirements.
-I like the imagery in the second line,
and the pivot line is very good.
-Good concluding lines, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Yvette.
-A well written tanka that
meets all of the requirements.
-I like the imagery in the second line,
and the pivot line is very good.
-Good concluding lines, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, my lady -- always great to hear from you! :) Take care out there and have a sunshiny week of wonder! ;) Yvette
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You are quite welcome, Yvette. You have a good week, too.
