Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Contemplation"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from Rosemary wanjiru
Beautifully written. I love the imagery too. It blends so well with the poem. It's eye-catching too. The message is soothing. It gives one a sense of peace.good job. I enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Beautifully written. I love the imagery too. It blends so well with the poem. It's eye-catching too. The message is soothing. It gives one a sense of peace.good job. I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Thanks for another visit, Rosemary! This was a challenge for me--I'm very literal-minded--so pleased you liked it!
Comment from royowen
This is a great alliterative pice, and a great addition to this renga project set up by Gypsy blue rose, it just sets up one's thoughts. You do great reviews, taking your own view of things, you've done a great job, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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This is a great alliterative pice, and a great addition to this renga project set up by Gypsy blue rose, it just sets up one's thoughts. You do great reviews, taking your own view of things, you've done a great job, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Thanks for another visit, Roy! This was a challenge for me--I'm very literal-minded--so pleased you liked it!
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Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not one word squandered here Elizabeth and when there are so few to include, you made a good choice here and created some magic, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2020
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Not one word squandered here Elizabeth and when there are so few to include, you made a good choice here and created some magic, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2020
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Thank you Dolly! You are quick. I am literal-minded-- imagery is a challenge--glad you found it worthy!
Comment from trimple
Good morning to you, Elizabeth.
Forgive my ignorance, but I am reading your expressive poem
Soft! In sunset's silence sound
whispers of consolation
Soft! In sunset's silent sound
whispers of consolation
To me, the word 'silence' should read 'silent'
or instead write;
Soft! In sunset's silence
sound whispers of consolation
Maybe I have it all wrong and if so, please forgive my lack of education.
A nice meditative piece.
kindest regards
trimple
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Good morning to you, Elizabeth.
Forgive my ignorance, but I am reading your expressive poem
Soft! In sunset's silence sound
whispers of consolation
Soft! In sunset's silent sound
whispers of consolation
To me, the word 'silence' should read 'silent'
or instead write;
Soft! In sunset's silence
sound whispers of consolation
Maybe I have it all wrong and if so, please forgive my lack of education.
A nice meditative piece.
kindest regards
trimple
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Spot on! Indeed, the line break between silence and sound is how I intended it to read; I wish I could have written it that way, but the Renga form requires 7 syllables per each of two lines. (I find such constraints frustrating!) Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
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Ah! yes, of course... the ole syllable count.
Sorry about that.
kindest regards
trimple
Comment from dragonpoet
This short poem shows that there is sometimes a religious feel to nature. You feel nearer to God. I like the abstract art of sunrise in the mountains.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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This short poem shows that there is sometimes a religious feel to nature. You feel nearer to God. I like the abstract art of sunrise in the mountains.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you. Stop by anytime! Cheers. LIZ
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No problem, Liz.
Joan
Comment from Carlos' girl
I like this. The first line soft! is so.arresting, it seems to command the reader to observe the silence and the sound. The use of consolation is a good choice
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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I like this. The first line soft! is so.arresting, it seems to command the reader to observe the silence and the sound. The use of consolation is a good choice
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you! Metaphor and nature imagery is a stretch for me--pleased you found it worthy. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
In search of peace at mountain peak, you hear the sound in sunset's silence the whispers of consolation at the end of the day's work; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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In search of peace at mountain peak, you hear the sound in sunset's silence the whispers of consolation at the end of the day's work; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Gloria ....
LIZ, I must say, I do enjoy your Shakespearean touch added to this Soft! You have done a fabulous job with your couple, but seriously I must need new glasses because I don't see deep or night anywhere. Are they the silent sounds perchance?
Excellent addition to the Renga book and a fun read too. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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LIZ, I must say, I do enjoy your Shakespearean touch added to this Soft! You have done a fabulous job with your couple, but seriously I must need new glasses because I don't see deep or night anywhere. Are they the silent sounds perchance?
Excellent addition to the Renga book and a fun read too. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Thanks for stopping by, Gloria. The reference to DEEP and NIGHT pertained to suggestions--per footnote-- that I replace THE in my original line "In the silence you may hear"; as you can see, I rewrote the line. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and very well written spiritual poem you have penned for the multi author book. You used very nice descriptive words and very lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. love, teri
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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This is a very nice and very well written spiritual poem you have penned for the multi author book. You used very nice descriptive words and very lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. love, teri
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you Teri--what a delightful surprise--hope this visit means you're on the mend. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Beverly A McBride
Wow, this form is rather complicated, eh? I like your post, and the use of "Soft." Yes. It reminds me of Shakesperian use. I like the economic use of words. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Wow, this form is rather complicated, eh? I like your post, and the use of "Soft." Yes. It reminds me of Shakesperian use. I like the economic use of words. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thanks for stopping by Beverly. I appreciate your encouragement--spiritual and nature genres are not my strong suits--I am metaphorically-challenged so this was a stretch. Cheers. LIZ
