Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Mountaintop Prayer"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
28 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your use of alliteration will draw the readers in. The p's create a puffing sound. Is that for the puffy clouds? Or is it the puff of breath as people pray from the top of a mountain? Clever.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2021
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Your use of alliteration will draw the readers in. The p's create a puffing sound. Is that for the puffy clouds? Or is it the puff of breath as people pray from the top of a mountain? Clever.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for hunting through my portfolio to find this one, Liz! I like your interpretation of the alliteration! Hugs and Blessed New Year!
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***smile***
Comment from Cecilia Lynne1
Your choice of art to support your 7/7 couplet poem is excellent. Your choice o words beginning the P are powerful words. The 7 stanza sentence to support the words works well. My only comment would be with the word prayer fitting in with the 7/7 couplet requirement. "Per-fect"! Count 2
"Prayer"! Count 1 (spoken is normally one syllable) sssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssperddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Your choice of art to support your 7/7 couplet poem is excellent. Your choice o words beginning the P are powerful words. The 7 stanza sentence to support the words works well. My only comment would be with the word prayer fitting in with the 7/7 couplet requirement. "Per-fect"! Count 2
"Prayer"! Count 1 (spoken is normally one syllable) sssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssperddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and generous rating, too! I agree with you that "prayer" should be just one syllable. But I often check this website and it said two:https://www.howmanysyllables.com/words/prayer
Blessings!
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lyenochka: Thanks for your explanation. All the best with your writing.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Perfect prayer as words makes it into a special prayer for God's listening heart. The image of the cloud and the mountains completes so well your poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Perfect prayer as words makes it into a special prayer for God's listening heart. The image of the cloud and the mountains completes so well your poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Iza! Blessings!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a powerful message in so few syllables. I enjoyed the reading. You have presented it beautifully as well.
Patricia
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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This is a powerful message in so few syllables. I enjoyed the reading. You have presented it beautifully as well.
Patricia
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reviewing, Patrica! Hugs!
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Really lovely. Must segue with Roy's. Will check in a minute. Love the mountain/prayer theme. Very Scriptural. Mountains always draw the eye upwards.
Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Really lovely. Must segue with Roy's. Will check in a minute. Love the mountain/prayer theme. Very Scriptural. Mountains always draw the eye upwards.
Well done!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Lucy! It was fun that Roy answered with his! Hugs!
Comment from Janetsue
Prayer is a strong counter punch against any kind of wrongdoing witnessed or experienced. God listens to His children and lovingly supports the hope we have in Him. His promises are always true and underline the trust we have in His eternal goodness. xo
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Prayer is a strong counter punch against any kind of wrongdoing witnessed or experienced. God listens to His children and lovingly supports the hope we have in Him. His promises are always true and underline the trust we have in His eternal goodness. xo
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Amen! Your lovely review could be a poem, too. Thank you, Janet! Hugs!
Comment from Pantygynt
It would be a help to reviewers I think if contributors of two line couplets like this could place the previous three lines in their notes. I'm afraid I didn't have time to delve into the original to marry it up and others may have got in first anyway.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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It would be a help to reviewers I think if contributors of two line couplets like this could place the previous three lines in their notes. I'm afraid I didn't have time to delve into the original to marry it up and others may have got in first anyway.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Ah, now that's an excellent suggestion - I'll run that by Gypsy. At first, she included all the previous poems and that got rather long. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great pairing of words to picture, Helen. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture is beautiful. I like the alliteration of 'p'. Your message is strong and meaningful. Yes, God is always there to listen.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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This is a great pairing of words to picture, Helen. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture is beautiful. I like the alliteration of 'p'. Your message is strong and meaningful. Yes, God is always there to listen.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Jan! Appreciate your kind words! Hugs!
Comment from Louise Michelle
Gotta love that alliteration, and your words ring true. It is indeed a perfect prayer perspective. That image you chose is breathtaking and your words compliment it nicely. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Gotta love that alliteration, and your words ring true. It is indeed a perfect prayer perspective. That image you chose is breathtaking and your words compliment it nicely. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reviewing my teeny two line poem, Lou! I was inspired by Gypsy's poem. Roy was inspired to follow with his poem. So maybe you'll join us, too? Hugs!
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed your post in the Renga, Helen. Your artwork set it up for me, though, and I loved reading about the Lord and prayer after seeing it. Well done on this and the new addition to the Renga.
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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I enjoyed your post in the Renga, Helen. Your artwork set it up for me, though, and I loved reading about the Lord and prayer after seeing it. Well done on this and the new addition to the Renga.
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Melissa! I don't know much about the renga but was moved by Gypsy's poem. Hugs!
