On the Hunt
A Duodecatain poem28 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Wow, you make this complicated form look so easy! And I love the gentle meter and the message of how God provides even in the darkest times even for the little birds.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Wow, you make this complicated form look so easy! And I love the gentle meter and the message of how God provides even in the darkest times even for the little birds.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Thank you. That means a lot. It was fun to do. I might do another one some day. Now, it's your turn. *Snap*
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
Like many of the poetic styles introduced to me here, I don't know enough about them to evaluate. I do know about crows. I am a big fan of them. They are very smart.
Robert
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Hello Yvonne.
Like many of the poetic styles introduced to me here, I don't know enough about them to evaluate. I do know about crows. I am a big fan of them. They are very smart.
Robert
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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I love crows. They are indeed very smart and caring birds. Thank you for a great review.
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You're welcome
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Very nicely, interestingly shared and expressed the poem, flow of thoughts is well said, well done, thank you for sharing this, live experience is shared; thank you for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Very nicely, interestingly shared and expressed the poem, flow of thoughts is well said, well done, thank you for sharing this, live experience is shared; thank you for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Thank you for such a great review!
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
A duodecatain, sounds complicated. But reading it, it flows nicely. The theme is nice too. The winterscene, also in the picture, is well-defined and the two birds, desperately looking for food, in the end get what they were looking for.
Good poem!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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A duodecatain, sounds complicated. But reading it, it flows nicely. The theme is nice too. The winterscene, also in the picture, is well-defined and the two birds, desperately looking for food, in the end get what they were looking for.
Good poem!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Thank you. I appreciate the great review.
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Welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is amazing, Yvonne. The art is awesome and so perfect for your well-thought out words and for this complex style. Each line carries the them and is filled with great imagery. I could see the farmer at work, the crow in its search for food for the babies, and the overall image of a cold winter day yest work has to be done by all--people and animals. There is good use of alliteration and your rhymes are well-chosen--some unique like interred/spurred. Your closing couplet sums up well the idea that fate will win out no matter what. I enjoyed reading this. It is a fine example of this style.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Your poem is amazing, Yvonne. The art is awesome and so perfect for your well-thought out words and for this complex style. Each line carries the them and is filled with great imagery. I could see the farmer at work, the crow in its search for food for the babies, and the overall image of a cold winter day yest work has to be done by all--people and animals. There is good use of alliteration and your rhymes are well-chosen--some unique like interred/spurred. Your closing couplet sums up well the idea that fate will win out no matter what. I enjoyed reading this. It is a fine example of this style.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. It means a lot to me that you liked it so much.
Comment from gramalot8
I think you have done an awesome job with a very difficult style of poetry. I love your picture that goes do well with your thoughts. Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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I think you have done an awesome job with a very difficult style of poetry. I love your picture that goes do well with your thoughts. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your lovely comments.
Comment from Mia Twysted
This piece has a nice flow to it however, at the end of each stanza the flow seemed disconnect. It didn't match the rhythm that you had going. But it told a story.
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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This piece has a nice flow to it however, at the end of each stanza the flow seemed disconnect. It didn't match the rhythm that you had going. But it told a story.
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Did you read the author notes with the poem instructions? Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork
and presentation.
-Thanks for the notes.
-A well written poem
that flows well with
meter, rhyme, and imagery:
"The countryside is bleak and bare."
-You show how the crows are
impacted by the snow, and search
"for any berry, seed, or pea."
-But, alas, there was success,
and a meal for those baby birds!
-Well done.
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation.
-Thanks for the notes.
-A well written poem
that flows well with
meter, rhyme, and imagery:
"The countryside is bleak and bare."
-You show how the crows are
impacted by the snow, and search
"for any berry, seed, or pea."
-But, alas, there was success,
and a meal for those baby birds!
-Well done.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review! I always appreciate you.
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You are very welcome, and thank you for the reply. It means a lot. I appreciate your writing, as well. You make it seem effortless.
