Night Life
Live for the now40 total reviews
Comment from Vanna1
What is the pain? Makes me think someone is cheating. The image speaks for itself. I do like your words they have a good flow, a good entry for the contest. Happy writing!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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What is the pain? Makes me think someone is cheating. The image speaks for itself. I do like your words they have a good flow, a good entry for the contest. Happy writing!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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What is the pain? Sometimes, there is pain. depending on what you're doing, how hard you're holding back, the release, the angles, and so on. But, there is pleasure too.
Thank you.
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Oh I see, not necessarily literal. I can relate to some of that but, no all. Ha.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Helllo
lancellot how do you know that your tanka cannot win the contest. I like the how you are saying it's vital to romantic bliss yes, is 'Living life to the fullest'
Gert
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Helllo
lancellot how do you know that your tanka cannot win the contest. I like the how you are saying it's vital to romantic bliss yes, is 'Living life to the fullest'
Gert
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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FS history, when it comes to 'certain' content and themes.
Thank you.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent Tanka form, and best of luck in the contest. It captures a moment in time, where passion rules. "Living life to the fullest" describes the moment. There's no thinking about the past or future. The focus is intently on the passion of the moment. The red and black are perfect to show passion's fire and its intensity. judi
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Excellent Tanka form, and best of luck in the contest. It captures a moment in time, where passion rules. "Living life to the fullest" describes the moment. There's no thinking about the past or future. The focus is intently on the passion of the moment. The red and black are perfect to show passion's fire and its intensity. judi
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Judi. Yes, sometimes it makes you forget your own name.
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You're welcome. That's really taking it to some level if you forget your own name! judi
Comment from Ignatius Albright
A very well written Tanka, I love it!
"Writhing between joy and pain"
A beautiful and accurate depiction of a rendezvous between two passionate lovers!
Keep safe and keep writing,
Ignatius A
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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A very well written Tanka, I love it!
"Writhing between joy and pain"
A beautiful and accurate depiction of a rendezvous between two passionate lovers!
Keep safe and keep writing,
Ignatius A
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a passionfilled tanka about the giving and taking of love and the joy and pain it brings.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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This is a passionfilled tanka about the giving and taking of love and the joy and pain it brings.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
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You're welcome
Comment from l.raven
HI Lance, don't underestimate the power of love...
this has a great chance to win my sweet friend...
my favorite poems...are the love poems...romance eternal...sigh...
this tells of a moment in time... never to be forgotten...
a memory cherished...butterflies eternal...
when in love...these words cloth you into a mindless cocoon...praying night will never see day...
I love your poem sweet guy...picture speaks for itself...
very well written you...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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HI Lance, don't underestimate the power of love...
this has a great chance to win my sweet friend...
my favorite poems...are the love poems...romance eternal...sigh...
this tells of a moment in time... never to be forgotten...
a memory cherished...butterflies eternal...
when in love...these words cloth you into a mindless cocoon...praying night will never see day...
I love your poem sweet guy...picture speaks for itself...
very well written you...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much.
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you are so very welcome...xxoo
Comment from mermaids
Your tanka form creates feelings and emotions. Love is full of joy and pain. Your last line is perfect for the poem, love is definitely living life to the fullest. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Your tanka form creates feelings and emotions. Love is full of joy and pain. Your last line is perfect for the poem, love is definitely living life to the fullest. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Hmmm, my question becomes was this lust or unconditional love. Oh well, I guess it's none of my business. I enjoyed reading your contest entry and wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Hmmm, my question becomes was this lust or unconditional love. Oh well, I guess it's none of my business. I enjoyed reading your contest entry and wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much. I've thought about those two. I think they both have pros and cons and dangers.
Comment from royowen
This is an unusual post this type of Japanese tanka, although the original were after a night of passion, courtiers would write these to each other as a measure of appreciation, well done, good pivot line, good luck, blessings, Roy
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This is an unusual post this type of Japanese tanka, although the original were after a night of passion, courtiers would write these to each other as a measure of appreciation, well done, good pivot line, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much. Good point.
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good job
Comment from Wabigoon
Lancellot-
I am not sure I know what a "tanka" is. Obviously five lines. I just read another love poem a bit ahead of yours on the list that was not "hot" at all. I rather like your approach better but it needs...something that more than suggests that passion -- some weird word think or other.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Lancellot-
I am not sure I know what a "tanka" is. Obviously five lines. I just read another love poem a bit ahead of yours on the list that was not "hot" at all. I rather like your approach better but it needs...something that more than suggests that passion -- some weird word think or other.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much. You may be correct. I will try to think of something.
