Night Life
Live for the now40 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Wow! This is pretty hot, Lancellot. Where did you find that picture. It burns, just like the lovers on the bed. Thank God for memories. That's all I can say.
You have the correct syllable count for the Tanka contest, and I wish you Good Luck.
Each line describes the feelings of the moment, for love doesn't last. It's selfish, and over when it's over. Till next time. Gotta heal. Replenish the body. But perhaps it's like Neil Young sang about in "A Man Needs A Maid" from his "Harvest" album... "To give a love, you gotta live a love. To live a love, you gotta be "part of."
People shouldn't make the mistake of letting love get away. In order to be loved, you have to give love.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Wow! This is pretty hot, Lancellot. Where did you find that picture. It burns, just like the lovers on the bed. Thank God for memories. That's all I can say.
You have the correct syllable count for the Tanka contest, and I wish you Good Luck.
Each line describes the feelings of the moment, for love doesn't last. It's selfish, and over when it's over. Till next time. Gotta heal. Replenish the body. But perhaps it's like Neil Young sang about in "A Man Needs A Maid" from his "Harvest" album... "To give a love, you gotta live a love. To live a love, you gotta be "part of."
People shouldn't make the mistake of letting love get away. In order to be loved, you have to give love.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Ben B.
I was worried for a moment when you gave a sexual content waning, but it's really not that graphic. I must admit the atmosphere is alluring and yet it's not that revolting.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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I was worried for a moment when you gave a sexual content waning, but it's really not that graphic. I must admit the atmosphere is alluring and yet it's not that revolting.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Dick Waters
What were you doing that it came to mind? Excellent and the picture couldn't be any better. Isn't life great?
The red color text was a great choice too.
I have no suggestions, and I can see why this has high marks.
Dick
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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What were you doing that it came to mind? Excellent and the picture couldn't be any better. Isn't life great?
The red color text was a great choice too.
I have no suggestions, and I can see why this has high marks.
Dick
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. Yes, it is.
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So cool it burns!
Comment from LisaMay
"Writhing between joy and pain" is a great phrase to describe what Life is, so "living life to the fullest" would certainly encompass these feelings. Being "swept away in love" can cause pain at times in everyday life, as well as in extreme sexual acts, so your words are accurately and poetically put.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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"Writhing between joy and pain" is a great phrase to describe what Life is, so "living life to the fullest" would certainly encompass these feelings. Being "swept away in love" can cause pain at times in everyday life, as well as in extreme sexual acts, so your words are accurately and poetically put.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from jenintorre
Wow. Very erotic words and well chosen artwork to match.It sure brings back distant memories. I wish you lots of luck in the Tanka competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Wow. Very erotic words and well chosen artwork to match.It sure brings back distant memories. I wish you lots of luck in the Tanka competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from karenina
Passion in the photo, passion in the words...
Tanka gone "R" rated!
Original and honest...a poet's gotta write what a poet's gotta write!
I certainly wasn't expecting a graphic version of this form--but it's done tastefully and I appreciate that.
Karenina
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Passion in the photo, passion in the words...
Tanka gone "R" rated!
Original and honest...a poet's gotta write what a poet's gotta write!
I certainly wasn't expecting a graphic version of this form--but it's done tastefully and I appreciate that.
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent tanka for the contest
with a very good pivotal third line
and excellent imagery.
The words match the picture very well.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
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You've written an excellent tanka for the contest
with a very good pivotal third line
and excellent imagery.
The words match the picture very well.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, that poem is so hot it burns my hand! (lol) Very sensuous writing visuals hit the root, a wonderful artistic presentation and photo. I haven't written a Tanka in years and am hardly a judge, but it seems yours follows the rules.
Good luck in the contest.
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Oh, that poem is so hot it burns my hand! (lol) Very sensuous writing visuals hit the root, a wonderful artistic presentation and photo. I haven't written a Tanka in years and am hardly a judge, but it seems yours follows the rules.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
Comment from sherrygreywolf
A beautifully written entry for the Tanka Poetry Contest. The words of your entry paint a vivid picture of a passionate relationship. The artwork you chose is a perfect compliment to your poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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A beautifully written entry for the Tanka Poetry Contest. The words of your entry paint a vivid picture of a passionate relationship. The artwork you chose is a perfect compliment to your poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck on the contest!
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck on the contest!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
