Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

This is really cute and sweet. Initially, it sounded like a man planning his truck driving route. This is good and I enjoyed reading this well thought out and well written work. Well done!

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020

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Comment from Mia Twysted

Excellent

Cute little piece. I was able to picture this little guy playing with this toys and daydreaming about the lie he will one day have. To be a child again with that imagination.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. Yes, to be a child again!!

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Imagination within imagination. Very nice idea for a short, flash fiction. It really surprised me, and I think what you have is an original idea. It is light hearted too, and leaves the reader with a blast of memory from their childhood.

Good entry.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

This is a very sweet Flash Fiction, which shows the sense of humour of the narrator as he navigates easily and readily between the world of the adult and that of the child. Well done!

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020

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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend

Great entry for the 70 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest. Good word count. You managed to tell a complete story in just 50 words.... that's not easy.

I like the story about the kid's imaginative moving out. It's cute.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

This is a sweet one. I love stories from the perspective of children. Their imagination and happiness are diverting and delightful. You capture it well. You certainly had me going. I was expecting a corona virus-UPS man sort of story. You told it well, and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
You should do well.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed. I try to stay away from corona writing, too much of that around as it is.

Comment from write hand blue

Excellent

Great little story, we believe that a man is going about his work as a delivery man, when the words "John! Bedtime!" comes crashing through our reality. The result is a charming tale about a little boy who could have been me or anyone for that matter. The surprise makes the story. Good luck with that. ~Mel~

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020

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Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a sweet and fun-filled write about this child's imagination of being a delivery driver and kids take their dreams very seriously it seems, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That's cute! I can imagine a little boy these days during the pandemic, recognizing the key role that truck drivers play in ensuring people get what they need. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020

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Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork and
very good story.
-A very good opening
paragraph that gets
our attention.
-We anticipate something
about this important road trip
and delivery.
-I love the ending!
-A very good entry; good luck!

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020

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