Comment from oliver818

Excellent

Nice poem, I enjoyed Reading it. Your personification of hope is very nice.

I have one suggestion which is that you take another look at the lines " That I have burned eternal,
I've always been around."

I think these two lines say the same thing. The first one is beautiful and the second seems very strange and normal in contrast. Obviously this is just my opinion, but if I were you I would try and make the second line something more beautiful, maybe an example Of a character from history who she helped or something like that.

Thanks for sharing this and have a great day

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 Comment Written 28-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020

Thank you for your suggestion. I decided to take your advice and changed the second line, check it out and tell me what you think. I really appreciate your reading my poem and helping me to improve it. :)

Comment from Mia Twysted

Exceptional

That is beautiful junst like the picture that you have to accompany it with.

I could feel my spirit lift and I left your piece with a smile on my face..

I wish you the best of luck.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020

Thank you so much for this wonderful 6 star review, I'm so honored. :)