The Waste of Hatred
A shameful secret (852 words)9 total reviews
Comment from Roberta Lawrinsky
Very funny. Very opposite-like. Consistent throughout. Also profound.
Don't worry--I won't tell your secret. Thank you for revealing your secret--it takes a lot of guts to trust another with your secret.
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Very funny. Very opposite-like. Consistent throughout. Also profound.
Don't worry--I won't tell your secret. Thank you for revealing your secret--it takes a lot of guts to trust another with your secret.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is one of my favorite tongue-in-cheek humourous lines: "but I'd have to kill you afterwards" I also like your use of your juxtapositional mood making. From the sublime to the ridiculous, one of the basis for balance. Maybe some of the pigeon poo got on the speaker:
http://www.a-rainbow-of-spirituality.org/pigeon.html
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This is one of my favorite tongue-in-cheek humourous lines: "but I'd have to kill you afterwards" I also like your use of your juxtapositional mood making. From the sublime to the ridiculous, one of the basis for balance. Maybe some of the pigeon poo got on the speaker:
http://www.a-rainbow-of-spirituality.org/pigeon.html
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
Comment from write hand blue
Hah! Hah! I like it, making out with the pope. That'll give a few bible nuts a red face or two. They will be outraged, you are after all a woman not the normal sex for the clergy. They can say their hail mary's pull their robes back down and say, 'May the Lord forgive me!' (actual). I just found this so funny. I can't find anything to write, better than this so I'll just stand on the side lines. ~Mel~
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Hah! Hah! I like it, making out with the pope. That'll give a few bible nuts a red face or two. They will be outraged, you are after all a woman not the normal sex for the clergy. They can say their hail mary's pull their robes back down and say, 'May the Lord forgive me!' (actual). I just found this so funny. I can't find anything to write, better than this so I'll just stand on the side lines. ~Mel~
Comment Written 27-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your bravery in reviewing this piece of sacrilege. I'm pleased it entertained you. I had fun writing it, to entertain myself primarily, not to cause offence - but of course it will to some, maybe many. i didn't realise just how religious many Americans are until I joined FanStory. We are much more secular here in New Zealand (but we seem to be a more moral nation).
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Yup! a bible in one hand and a gun in the other. The political and religious preaching on TV and in films get to me. Though it's not as obvious as it once was. I've always admired New Zealand.
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I sure like living here. Our cops hardly ever carry guns and the only televangelists I've seen are American ones.
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I live on the beautiful island of Jersey. (Chanel Islands, UK) Our police still don't carry guns either.
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Nice place to be. Small populations are more law abiding and cohesive, like in NZ.
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that was a thing. If I understand it correctly, the narrator is satan? And he fell in love with the pope? I do like the parable nature of the piece - so often those who claim to be following the Lord, often spread more hate than non-believers. That's a strong message that I take away from all this. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Well, that was a thing. If I understand it correctly, the narrator is satan? And he fell in love with the pope? I do like the parable nature of the piece - so often those who claim to be following the Lord, often spread more hate than non-believers. That's a strong message that I take away from all this. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Thank you for being brave enough to review this strange story. I am a woman of faith, but was using creative license to write this and explore a dark scenario of undermining what we are taught, and calling out so-called Christians. It is usual to blame Satan for hateful things but in this story i've introduced the idea of jesus (love) having a sister (hate); the opposite, so I called her Susej. Then I made an excuse for her being so different by commenting that perhaps she was adopted. The story is terribly sacrilegeous, having sex with the Pope, but i have long thought that a lot of the church's abuse problems stem from insistence on celibacy.
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You're a super talented writer and I get that you have a deeper message. (I did read about the sister part but glossed over it.) Ironically, there was a Pope Joan who was pregnant, or so I have heard. I wish they would allow marriage for clergy like the Orthodox. Sigh.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is indeed a secret that would have been better kept especially for the Pope's peace of mind. Still, you have described your 'job description' and the deviation from it very well, if in a somewhat wordy fashion.
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This is indeed a secret that would have been better kept especially for the Pope's peace of mind. Still, you have described your 'job description' and the deviation from it very well, if in a somewhat wordy fashion.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
Comment from pome lover
well, I'll tell you, this is the most original story I've read in a long time. I haven't read any others in this contest, but you should win, hands down.
Of course, It's also really weird. :) I wonder if you'll get feedback from any Catholics? God's daughter in "charge" of HATE. How in the world did you think of that?. Your character sounds authentic, for sure. Oh, but the Pope? Strange attraction.
Will have to read more of your stuff when I find out your identity.
pome lover
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well, I'll tell you, this is the most original story I've read in a long time. I haven't read any others in this contest, but you should win, hands down.
Of course, It's also really weird. :) I wonder if you'll get feedback from any Catholics? God's daughter in "charge" of HATE. How in the world did you think of that?. Your character sounds authentic, for sure. Oh, but the Pope? Strange attraction.
Will have to read more of your stuff when I find out your identity.
pome lover
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
Comment from Seth Hill
Now this is good writing! It kept me engaged for every next word. And the sideline comments about your FanStory membership - amusing! I would give you 6 stars, but I keep that rating for only Thomas Mann and John Barth. Sorry.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Now this is good writing! It kept me engaged for every next word. And the sideline comments about your FanStory membership - amusing! I would give you 6 stars, but I keep that rating for only Thomas Mann and John Barth. Sorry.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I'm pleased to gain a 5 from you. Perhaps I might tweak a 6 off you in future as neither Thomas Mann or John Barth are on FanStory. Obviously they are deserving writers (Mann is a little bit dead just now - a very deserving 1929 Nobel Prize winner for Literature) and Barth is 90 or so.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wickedly witty--a tour de force of sacrilege--right up my alley! I've written several pieces with blasphemous religious themes-- you may well get blasted for this by the Christian contingent (99% of fanstorians, it seems). Let's just hope the judges are broadminded. Fingers crossed. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Wickedly witty--a tour de force of sacrilege--right up my alley! I've written several pieces with blasphemous religious themes-- you may well get blasted for this by the Christian contingent (99% of fanstorians, it seems). Let's just hope the judges are broadminded. Fingers crossed. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Yep, it's bound to offend many in our midst I didn't realise just how religious Americans are until I was on FanStory. Judges on this site are not really known for being broad minded; I like to show that I am. I've written enough faith-based poems, it's time for the dark side to have an outing.
You're the only one brave enough to review this yet. As you like sacrilege, perhaps you will also find this other poem I wrote a while ago amusing: It's called "Jesus had a Cat" and can be found at https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=942600
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wickedly witty--a tour de force of sacrilege--right up my alley! I've written several pieces with blasphemous religious themes-- you may well get blasted for this by the Christian contingent (99% of fanstorians, it seems). Let's just hope the judges are broadminded. Fingers crossed. Cheers. LIZ
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Wickedly witty--a tour de force of sacrilege--right up my alley! I've written several pieces with blasphemous religious themes-- you may well get blasted for this by the Christian contingent (99% of fanstorians, it seems). Let's just hope the judges are broadminded. Fingers crossed. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
