A Silent Cry
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Waiting Room"Development of Alzheimer's Disease.
16 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Are you unable to post the second poem here? I'd keep them all together here. This poem is a wonderful beginning showing the nervousness and heightened senses - the surrealist feeling of it all!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Are you unable to post the second poem here? I'd keep them all together here. This poem is a wonderful beginning showing the nervousness and heightened senses - the surrealist feeling of it all!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, Margaret, but FanStory does not allow repetitions, so I can't post them a second time. I thought of changing the titles, but that would be cheating, wouldn't it?
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Non. If you make one tweak it?s different and it belongs with these.
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Have to think about it...
Comment from richie b
Marjon,
Much imagery and suspense penned in your poem.
You have set the scene well for your next related poem.
Well done, looking forward to reading more.
Many Blessings,
Richie
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Marjon,
Much imagery and suspense penned in your poem.
You have set the scene well for your next related poem.
Well done, looking forward to reading more.
Many Blessings,
Richie
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much Richie, for your review.
Comment from CHANYA MASHENGU
The work description was very vivid to me and very real too. Talented skills.
Yes that leaves us in suspense waiting to see what happens next.
Well done
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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The work description was very vivid to me and very real too. Talented skills.
Yes that leaves us in suspense waiting to see what happens next.
Well done
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Chanya! For your review.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Waiting rooms are my pet peeve. I avoid them at all costs. I've learned how to doctor myself over the years and am so much happier. I try my best to stay out of the money making machines!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Waiting rooms are my pet peeve. I avoid them at all costs. I've learned how to doctor myself over the years and am so much happier. I try my best to stay out of the money making machines!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Thanks for the review, Rebecca.
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You're welcome.
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Smile.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the last time of your then normal life before your whole life changes into a different routine that will become a burden on your shoulders.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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A very well-written poem about the last time of your then normal life before your whole life changes into a different routine that will become a burden on your shoulders.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Sandra. Yes, in a way a burden. Very hard, but done with love and God's help.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have been in those rooms with my husband when he was receiving treatment for his cancer and the atmosphere was solemn and we both couldn't wait to leave. It was all in vain too. A poignant write Marjon, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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I have been in those rooms with my husband when he was receiving treatment for his cancer and the atmosphere was solemn and we both couldn't wait to leave. It was all in vain too. A poignant write Marjon, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Love you, Dolly. Thanks for a kind review.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Thanks for sharing your experiences. That feeling of not knowing what to expect when a loved one is in critical condition is quite unimaginable. Sometimes it is clear to us that the worst could happen, but faith keeps us believing and expecting some miracles to turns things around.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for sharing your experiences. That feeling of not knowing what to expect when a loved one is in critical condition is quite unimaginable. Sometimes it is clear to us that the worst could happen, but faith keeps us believing and expecting some miracles to turns things around.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for this kind review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Marjon, this poem sounds like it was written the day you got the final verdict. Some how they are the very worst, because all hope is taken away.
I think it matters not if the diagnosis is Cancer, Dementia, or Alzheimer's, ALL
seem to mean the patient's demise at some future time, undetermined.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Dear Marjon, this poem sounds like it was written the day you got the final verdict. Some how they are the very worst, because all hope is taken away.
I think it matters not if the diagnosis is Cancer, Dementia, or Alzheimer's, ALL
seem to mean the patient's demise at some future time, undetermined.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Suzanna, thank you very much for the review. That day it was confirmed that it was Alzheimer's. That it was "progressive" and that the symptoms would become more and more evident. They warned me that he could become unexpectedly aggressive, and that he then needed to be hospitalized. You should have seen the panic in his eyes when they said that. Sometimes he understood (then) very well what happened to him. After all, he was a neurologist!
Comment from Cindy Decker
Marjon:
I love that you put suspense in a short poem. I eagerly
waited for the end, and it has a nice, somber touch. It sounds a little like a science fiction piece of writing. Your writing is beautifully detailed. Good luck in all you're writing ventures. You write so well.
Blessings,
Your friend,
Cindy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Marjon:
I love that you put suspense in a short poem. I eagerly
waited for the end, and it has a nice, somber touch. It sounds a little like a science fiction piece of writing. Your writing is beautifully detailed. Good luck in all you're writing ventures. You write so well.
Blessings,
Your friend,
Cindy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for this review, Cindy.
Comment from gramalot8
Very intriguing and peeked my interest. I want to know more. Why are they at the hospital? Why all the doors? Who is it that they are waiting for? Is it for a good reason or for a bad one? Who will come out of door 14? I guess I'll have to find the previous parts to this story and then anxiously wait for more.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Very intriguing and peeked my interest. I want to know more. Why are they at the hospital? Why all the doors? Who is it that they are waiting for? Is it for a good reason or for a bad one? Who will come out of door 14? I guess I'll have to find the previous parts to this story and then anxiously wait for more.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Maybe When you read the introduction of A Silent
Maybe, if you read the Introduction of A Silent Cry first, you will understand all the poems that are still to come. But I can tell you now already that they are no science fiction, not even fiction, but the sad reality of me, who during 3 years have been the caretaker of my husband, a patient with Alzheimer's disease. My struggles to do this are described in 30 poems. Waiting Room is the first one in this series. Thanks very much for your review.
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So sorry to read about your husband. Hopefully the writing will help . God bless!
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Thank you. The writing did help. It was very therapeutic. He died now two years ago. I am finally ready to show the poems to the world.
