A Silent Cry
Viewing comments for Prologue "A Silent Cry"Development of Alzheimer's Disease.
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Comment from Christy Mahon
First of all, I make no claim to having any facility for critique. All I can offer are my honest impressions and ideas.
"A Silent Cry" is a moving tribute to both Carlo and to you as well. The collection steadfastly conveys the overarching sadness and hollow horror of the whole torturous experience that Alzheimer's creates. You've tread a fine line by not lapsing into pathos which must've often been a threat, and instead preserved a telling dignity where it was always ever so gradually being lost. I suppose that is the art of what you've accomplished.
Although your command of English reduces my fumbling Nederlands to pretty much non-existent, I did notice a few points where I think your non-native English facility shows just slightly. If you care at all about those few really tiny instances, let me know and I'll point them out.
Lastly, I'm a bit confused which of course is my natural state. The first page of "A Silent Cry" indicates a compilation of thirty poems, but I was only able to find twelve included. Where did I go wrong?
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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First of all, I make no claim to having any facility for critique. All I can offer are my honest impressions and ideas.
"A Silent Cry" is a moving tribute to both Carlo and to you as well. The collection steadfastly conveys the overarching sadness and hollow horror of the whole torturous experience that Alzheimer's creates. You've tread a fine line by not lapsing into pathos which must've often been a threat, and instead preserved a telling dignity where it was always ever so gradually being lost. I suppose that is the art of what you've accomplished.
Although your command of English reduces my fumbling Nederlands to pretty much non-existent, I did notice a few points where I think your non-native English facility shows just slightly. If you care at all about those few really tiny instances, let me know and I'll point them out.
Lastly, I'm a bit confused which of course is my natural state. The first page of "A Silent Cry" indicates a compilation of thirty poems, but I was only able to find twelve included. Where did I go wrong?
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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I absolutely welcome your reviewing the Silent Cry poems. Any comment you have about my possible errors in English are also very welcomed!
You have seen twelve poems now, because I only posted twelve until today. Every day or two days I post one more, until the series are complete.
Thanks again, I feel most grateful.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
This is a wonderful concept for a poetry book!!! I am looking forward to reading the journey you took with your husband. I'm sure it will bring forth a lot of emotions.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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This is a wonderful concept for a poetry book!!! I am looking forward to reading the journey you took with your husband. I'm sure it will bring forth a lot of emotions.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Margaret, such a kind reaction to my introduction of A Silent Cry. Thank you very much! Just now, I posted my already eight's poem/chapter of this book. They are all there in my portfolio! And still more to follow.
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I see them now. I?ve been away on vacation and have a lot of catching up to do
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Well, you saw them all and made GREAT reviews. I am happy.
Comment from CHANYA MASHENGU
What a touching story. It drew alot of emotions in me. Emotions of love,sadness and peace.
I appreciate your healing Journey and it's right you chose this forum.
It helps you come to terms with what happens everyday and what happens to your emotions.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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What a touching story. It drew alot of emotions in me. Emotions of love,sadness and peace.
I appreciate your healing Journey and it's right you chose this forum.
It helps you come to terms with what happens everyday and what happens to your emotions.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Chanya, thank you so much for your review.
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My beautiful friend. Yes some day I believe one day I will travel to Australia and meet you
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Hi! If you go to Australia to meet me, you will be a long distance away! Mallorca (where I live) is an island in the Mediterranean sea; and belongs to Spain. I hope to meet you one day. It all seems so difficult now, with the Corona-virus, traveling is practically impossible.
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Hallow my friend. You will not see my work for a while. I have not upgraded membership.
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Thanks for telling me, Chanya. I hope you come back in time. Thans for being a friend.
Comment from amada
I like your words, it is not fiction, it is all frightening real. Honesty...Many time we try to cover our diseases and difficulties; we all search for that perfect piece of pie. Your writing, your words are penetration, no mask in here.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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I like your words, it is not fiction, it is all frightening real. Honesty...Many time we try to cover our diseases and difficulties; we all search for that perfect piece of pie. Your writing, your words are penetration, no mask in here.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Amada, thank you very much for your review.
Comment from Cindy Decker
Marjon, I am Dior it took so long for me to answer. Alzheimer's is a terrible disease, I know because my mom had it when she was 80. She died at 86. She fought to live, then her heart gave out. I know some of what you went through. So sorry for your loss.
Prayers,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Marjon, I am Dior it took so long for me to answer. Alzheimer's is a terrible disease, I know because my mom had it when she was 80. She died at 86. She fought to live, then her heart gave out. I know some of what you went through. So sorry for your loss.
Prayers,
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Cindy, thank you for your heartfelt review. Very much appreciated.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Silent Cry
by Marjon van Bruggen
Hello, Marjon,
Alzheimer disease is so horrible. I wonder if your husband knew what was going on. He was lucky to have you until the end. Well done, a beautiful poem and a wonderful book.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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A Silent Cry
by Marjon van Bruggen
Hello, Marjon,
Alzheimer disease is so horrible. I wonder if your husband knew what was going on. He was lucky to have you until the end. Well done, a beautiful poem and a wonderful book.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thanks Gypsy! You reviewed the introduction (6 stars, wow!). I posted that one yesterday. Today I posted the first of the poems.
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Thanks Gypsy! You reviewed the introduction (6 stars, wow!). I posted that one yesterday. Today I posted the first of the poems.
Comment from Justin Chopin
This is a great introduction for your pieces Marjon. I'm sorry for your loss but I am glad that you had this great idea to be able to vent all of your emotions about your situation with regarding your husband and his Alzheimer's disease. Can't wait to read these pieces. Great job with explaining your concepts for this project.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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This is a great introduction for your pieces Marjon. I'm sorry for your loss but I am glad that you had this great idea to be able to vent all of your emotions about your situation with regarding your husband and his Alzheimer's disease. Can't wait to read these pieces. Great job with explaining your concepts for this project.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Justin, thanks so much for this great review. 12 of the poems for this book were already posted. I will refer to them in the series A Silent Cry, but I will not repeat them, as that is against the rules of FS, If you are interested, you can find: BLUE-HUED (16-2), LOCKING-UNLOCKING (17-2), ONLY A SMALL DEATH (19-2), BROKEN SUNRAYS (23-2), FROM A NEAR DISTANCE (3-4), ANGER, POSTPONED (13-4), ALONE (21-4), DIAMOND DUST (27-4), SCENT OF HERBS (30-4), CORNERED (13-5), FLUID THOUGHTS (26-5) and ICARUS (31-5) all in my portfolio. As you can see, I indicated the date of posting. Take a look, please, to get an idea. I don't remember your name with the reviewers, so I think you didn't see them yet.
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You're welcome.
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Smiles!
Comment from estory
I really look forward to your book; it has some relevance to me because my mother died of Alzheimer's five years ago. It is a terrible disease in that it takes away your relationship with someone you love. I remember also the fear in my mother's eyes sometimes, the feeling that she did not know what was happening to her. The last time I saw her, she was lucid for maybe one day out of six. She had stopped eating and my sister was keeping her alive by protein drinks. She weighed about 80 pounds. When she stopped drinking in November, she died the Sunday before Thanksgiving. That was the hardest thing I had to go through in my life. estory
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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I really look forward to your book; it has some relevance to me because my mother died of Alzheimer's five years ago. It is a terrible disease in that it takes away your relationship with someone you love. I remember also the fear in my mother's eyes sometimes, the feeling that she did not know what was happening to her. The last time I saw her, she was lucid for maybe one day out of six. She had stopped eating and my sister was keeping her alive by protein drinks. She weighed about 80 pounds. When she stopped drinking in November, she died the Sunday before Thanksgiving. That was the hardest thing I had to go through in my life. estory
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for this review. 12 poems belonging to the series A Silent Cry have been posted in FS before. I will refer to them, but I am not allowed to repeat them. There are though, many new ones. They will appear here in a chronological order. I think one every two days. I hope you will like them.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written introduction to your proposed plan to open up the caretaker's point of view to take care of someone with Alzheimer's. It us not an easy task but you made it to tell us about the experience.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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A very well-written introduction to your proposed plan to open up the caretaker's point of view to take care of someone with Alzheimer's. It us not an easy task but you made it to tell us about the experience.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Sandra, for the review of the introduction. Every two days I will post one in chronological order. The ones already posted earlier in FS I will refer to without repetition.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I expect the poetry helped you to express yourself during a difficult time in your life and I admire you for your dedication to your husband during this time, your book will no doubt help others suffering like this, both parties suffer in these circumstances, a fine awareness write Marjon, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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I expect the poetry helped you to express yourself during a difficult time in your life and I admire you for your dedication to your husband during this time, your book will no doubt help others suffering like this, both parties suffer in these circumstances, a fine awareness write Marjon, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Dolly. I appreciate your encouraging review.
