O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from skatermom - Robbi
Haikus are probably my least favorite poetry form. I know small statements can be profound, but most here forget that is the mission behind the writing of one, and usually lack substance. Yours does not fall into that mold.
Rob~
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Haikus are probably my least favorite poetry form. I know small statements can be profound, but most here forget that is the mission behind the writing of one, and usually lack substance. Yours does not fall into that mold.
Rob~
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from mayflowerbg
Here comes again The Master of Haiku, saying so much with a few words and some punctuation in a form short, expressive and wise. Congratulations!
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Here comes again The Master of Haiku, saying so much with a few words and some punctuation in a form short, expressive and wise. Congratulations!
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Beatlegirl61
Very 'appealing' and well written...You are really talentd at writing the shorter forms and I truly enjoyed reading this brilliant piece...Nice work here!! Very inspirational an quite creative!!
Take care, be well and peace to you!! Carol ::)))
'beatle' qutoe today: "Well the rain exploded with a mighty crash...as we fell into the sun..." (McCartney)
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Very 'appealing' and well written...You are really talentd at writing the shorter forms and I truly enjoyed reading this brilliant piece...Nice work here!! Very inspirational an quite creative!!
Take care, be well and peace to you!! Carol ::)))
'beatle' qutoe today: "Well the rain exploded with a mighty crash...as we fell into the sun..." (McCartney)
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Senyai
AllCreator Writer, this is a delicious haiku, 5,7,5. It says to me that you are encouraging fall to hurry by after the summer heat and rains...to progress through winter quickly and reach the heralded spring. The season of poets, flowers, dreams, and love. No?
Foxey
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AllCreator Writer, this is a delicious haiku, 5,7,5. It says to me that you are encouraging fall to hurry by after the summer heat and rains...to progress through winter quickly and reach the heralded spring. The season of poets, flowers, dreams, and love. No?
Foxey
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Mrs Jones
"o harvest reaper!
stay short after heat and rain?
poets, flowers bloom! "
The verse meets all the requirements of the structure.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
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"o harvest reaper!
stay short after heat and rain?
poets, flowers bloom! "
The verse meets all the requirements of the structure.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from rivki1111
Hello...these short but dense poems can make you think about the subject in a simple but profound way...this was very good and your word choice maximized the effect for the reader...nothing to fix for me, thanks for sharing this nicely pulblished and thoughtfully written poem....cheers rivki
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Hello...these short but dense poems can make you think about the subject in a simple but profound way...this was very good and your word choice maximized the effect for the reader...nothing to fix for me, thanks for sharing this nicely pulblished and thoughtfully written poem....cheers rivki
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from rl dubour
Autumn short and full, the imagery is there as the autumn time and cooler weather approach. The harvesting and preparing for the winters solitude. A special time and a very special write, Ron
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Autumn short and full, the imagery is there as the autumn time and cooler weather approach. The harvesting and preparing for the winters solitude. A special time and a very special write, Ron
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Buckshot99
Very succinct, but you caught the essence. Do you think the harvester does not see the blooms, or nature's handiwork, but just the work of harvesting itself? Is that just left to poets and writers or perhaps the artist and the photographer? Got me thinking. Good job.
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Very succinct, but you caught the essence. Do you think the harvester does not see the blooms, or nature's handiwork, but just the work of harvesting itself? Is that just left to poets and writers or perhaps the artist and the photographer? Got me thinking. Good job.
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Of the six or so haiku of yours I have read today, I like this best. Good satori in the last line comparing flowers and the works of poets being reaped in autumn. And great kigo phrase in the first line of "harvest repear". . Excellent work and use of textbook 5/7/5 syllabic count. Nice use of the question mark to divide the haiku into the phrase with concrete imagery and the satori.
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Of the six or so haiku of yours I have read today, I like this best. Good satori in the last line comparing flowers and the works of poets being reaped in autumn. And great kigo phrase in the first line of "harvest repear". . Excellent work and use of textbook 5/7/5 syllabic count. Nice use of the question mark to divide the haiku into the phrase with concrete imagery and the satori.
Comment Written 22-May-2006
Comment from National Scholar
o harvest reaper!
stay short after heat and rain?
flowers, poets bloom!
The time for going is to be ceased, as the poet thinks and beckons the harvest season Autumn. Why to stay short when all bloom and mind and heart are fully productive. Excellent Haiku.
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o harvest reaper!
stay short after heat and rain?
flowers, poets bloom!
The time for going is to be ceased, as the poet thinks and beckons the harvest season Autumn. Why to stay short when all bloom and mind and heart are fully productive. Excellent Haiku.
Comment Written 16-May-2006
