O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from closetpoetjester
I can SEE you're still working on that poetic bloom of yours. In my opinion this one makes little sense in the second line. I understand you have your own style with these, but I recommend mastering the form before you try and put your own slant on it. A true understanding of the form allows us scope when we want to deviate into our own realm without sounding like a babbling pre-schooler. Not a bad effort but your word bloom needs a sweeter scent for a fiver from me. I appreciate quality writes, not quantities of money, however I WILL take your buck twenty five for the most creative and honest review I can give.
One tip, if you take a style and do it justice with your own slant, you'll become a household name around here...but high promotion of shallow verse has you becoming known for buying a ranking and very little else. I would think you would want to be known for the gift of your words, not the gift in your pockets. Kaching! I STILL wish you the very best of luck. I also see you give very little back by way of thanks, for constructive critique.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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I can SEE you're still working on that poetic bloom of yours. In my opinion this one makes little sense in the second line. I understand you have your own style with these, but I recommend mastering the form before you try and put your own slant on it. A true understanding of the form allows us scope when we want to deviate into our own realm without sounding like a babbling pre-schooler. Not a bad effort but your word bloom needs a sweeter scent for a fiver from me. I appreciate quality writes, not quantities of money, however I WILL take your buck twenty five for the most creative and honest review I can give.
One tip, if you take a style and do it justice with your own slant, you'll become a household name around here...but high promotion of shallow verse has you becoming known for buying a ranking and very little else. I would think you would want to be known for the gift of your words, not the gift in your pockets. Kaching! I STILL wish you the very best of luck. I also see you give very little back by way of thanks, for constructive critique.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
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Hooray...glad I could prize a response out of you.
Seems I've started a trend.
LMAO
Infact THANKS for your truckload of THANKS'
Comment from robina1978
It is utmost original and is a lovely poem about autumn. Dot on syllable count and your foot note made it even more clear. Is it Autumn were you are?
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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It is utmost original and is a lovely poem about autumn. Dot on syllable count and your foot note made it even more clear. Is it Autumn were you are?
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR APPRECIABLE REVIEW.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
This excellent American haiku, It fits the 5-7-5 syllable exactly. There is an implied relationship between the lines.
I enjoyed reading this poem
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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This excellent American haiku, It fits the 5-7-5 syllable exactly. There is an implied relationship between the lines.
I enjoyed reading this poem
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR SUGGESTIVE REVIEW.
Comment from c_lucas
Autumn bring forth the fruit of the warmer months. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Autumn bring forth the fruit of the warmer months. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR FAIR REVIEW.
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You're welcome.
Comment from 9999pool
Limitless the boundaries of autumn. The browning and the falling of leaves signaled that autumn is here. The wonders of the colors and bloom - a poet's paradise and muse. A harvest reaper indeed.
Well penned and thought of. Good write with a message.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Limitless the boundaries of autumn. The browning and the falling of leaves signaled that autumn is here. The wonders of the colors and bloom - a poet's paradise and muse. A harvest reaper indeed.
Well penned and thought of. Good write with a message.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
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Have a great week writing. Thanks for the reply. Ritchie.
Comment from Galactia
o harvest reaper!
stay short after heat and rain?
poets, flowers bloom!
LOL I really liked this one especially as it's Autumn here in Australia and love the 3rd line, as my poems of late reflect autumn, giving me inspiration to write.
Great jobm perfect 5'7'5 syllable count
Regards
Tia
have a wonderful easter:)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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o harvest reaper!
stay short after heat and rain?
poets, flowers bloom!
LOL I really liked this one especially as it's Autumn here in Australia and love the 3rd line, as my poems of late reflect autumn, giving me inspiration to write.
Great jobm perfect 5'7'5 syllable count
Regards
Tia
have a wonderful easter:)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from SueZen
BEAUTIFUL, 'all' captured in few words; pic very
complimentary to content poem. Would like to give more
creative review, but lost for words that would express
my true feelings for poem & Nature.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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BEAUTIFUL, 'all' captured in few words; pic very
complimentary to content poem. Would like to give more
creative review, but lost for words that would express
my true feelings for poem & Nature.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR PRAISEWORTHY REVIEW.
Comment from Bill Schott
Your explanation helps me grasp the importance of such a short work as a haiku-esque five-seven-five. The 'getting attention; making a request; and observing results.'
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Your explanation helps me grasp the importance of such a short work as a haiku-esque five-seven-five. The 'getting attention; making a request; and observing results.'
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice piece of writing about the season of Autumn.
The picture is very beautiful telling the story of autumn without words. The last line of the poem is my favourite. kudos
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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This is a nice piece of writing about the season of Autumn.
The picture is very beautiful telling the story of autumn without words. The last line of the poem is my favourite. kudos
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR APPRECIABLE REVIEW.
Comment from Ekim777
I am bemused by your poem. Are you asking that the reaping be short so as not to destroy God's wild flowers?Blooming is to regenerate and live again. What more complete symbol than in the appearance of flowers because maybe flowers are the most complete of God's creation despite their fragile short lives.You say flowers bloom for the poet so that he can recreate in words. In the beginning was the word.-Ekim777
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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I am bemused by your poem. Are you asking that the reaping be short so as not to destroy God's wild flowers?Blooming is to regenerate and live again. What more complete symbol than in the appearance of flowers because maybe flowers are the most complete of God's creation despite their fragile short lives.You say flowers bloom for the poet so that he can recreate in words. In the beginning was the word.-Ekim777
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR CREDITABLE REVIEW.
