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Comment from patcelaw
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There are times in all our lives that we will be plagued with scary nightmares. Yet, we have to keep going and do the very best we can. Thanks for sharing this work.
Patricia

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020

Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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I like the version of your poetic story. Iza, when I was reading your story, I was wondering how the virus was there? One, two, three, is that not another nightmare what will never end unless we get it stopped?

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
    The virus is spreading like fire and we don't know why...
Comment from DeboraDyess
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Oh, Iza! I know this feeling! lol.

he stirred me right >> He steered me right >> Like a steering wheel on a car, with God steering you.

Your dad will like you to be closer to home. >> Your dad would like you to be closer to home.

Okay, now that the nit-picky junk is out of the way ... WOW! I love this! You name all the reasons we need to be afraid and then ou blow it out of the water! PERFECT!

I have a rock on my writing desk that reads, "Goliath must fall." My granddaughter (6-years-old) asked me why it was there. I reminded her of the story of David and Goliath, how David had to be a little aware of his odds, but still stepped out on faith. We need to remember that our own personal 'Goliaths' are smaller than God. She nodded, not totally understanding and skipped off.
Your post made me think of that. There are so many things to fear, But God is bigger. :)
Excellent post!
Deb

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2020

Comment from richie b
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Iza,
Your chapter dealing with fate, life and death
is relatable to your readers. As they read your honest
feelings on death, they are relating to their own
experiences.
I enjoyed reading your chapter. Thank you for
sharing.
Peace and Joy,
Richie

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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(typos: he stirred me s/b steered; life goes one, you will go to s/b life goes ON; you will go TOO) This is a powerhouse--you nailed the "imposter" phenomenon and the experience of being crippled by fear in general. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

Comment from Mastery
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Hello, my friend. Well written story here from beginning to end. (So you have made death a female, eh? Interesting.

Suggestions and tips:
"so far he stirred me right" (I think you meant "he "steered" me right)

And: " Life goes one," (I think you mean "life goes ON"

Good for you, Iza. I liked this. : ) Bob

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

Comment from lyenochka
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Thanks for sharing this deep spiritual reflection as you work through your grieving your loss. Your dad is smiling. I like the poetic nature of your post!

"he stirred me right," (steered)
"Life goes one" (on not "one")
" Your dad will like" (would not "will")

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

Comment from royowen
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Fear is a terrible thing, I admire my wife, she has an affliction called agoraphobia, which is the fear of going out, so she prospered during the lockdown, beautifully written dear Iza, I could Give you a million cliches, but I won't, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : so far He's (stirred) me right, steered?

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

Comment from estory
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It's like the anxieties and sad times are piling up on you in this piece, one, two, three; one thing after another. You are afraid of losing your job, losing your home, becoming homeless, death takes away people you love, people who have always been there to support you in bad times, and you have to deal with it. Reminds me of 2015 when the company I worked for went bankrupt and I had to scramble around looking for a new job for the first time in 34 years, try to save my pension, and deal with my mom dying and moving to another state all at the same time. The worst 18 months of my life. But you get through it and with God's help you move on and better times come back. estory

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

Comment from Bobby Cunningham
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This is a very clever and creative story that we thoroughly enjoyed reading. The last big paragraph needs a little editing. The line " Life goes one, you will go to..." Is this supposed to say Life goes on, you will go too...? Have a wonderful day.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020