Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Pam, I love your poem my sweet friend...

displaying the beauty of the songbirds...singing
as they eat their fill of delicious berries from
the trees...very nicely written sweet girl...
and what a beautiful picture...God Bless...love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020

Thanks for the review, Linda. I am glad you enjoyed the poem, songbirds, and the picture. All the best to you, too!

reply by l.raven on 12-Aug-2020

all the best to you as well..and you are so very welcome...always...love to ya...xxoo

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020

Thanks, Linda:)

reply by l.raven on 12-Aug-2020

smiling big...xxoo

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

I decided to read this book in order, having already reviewed a number of them. It's so interesting to see how each creative input sparks the next! Yours is an excellent addition, with superb phrasing phonics (those cousin sounds of P and B are delicious read aloud!) and a lovely presentation too. Good word economy. Great job!
Warmly,
rd

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, rd. That is a good idea to read them in order. I think this is a great project. I am glad you liked my addition with the sounds and presentation, as well. Have a great day.

reply by rama devi on 19-Jul-2020

Yes...it was nice to read them in order and then ADD one! :) Have a super day!

reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020

I will check it out:)

reply by rama devi on 19-Jul-2020

:-))) Thanks!

Comment from Margaret Bednar

Excellent

A nice 5-7-5 poem that encapsulates all that is wonderful about spring and the upcoming summer season! Well penned and the art image is truly stunning.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, Margaret. I appreciate your comments about the poem, spring, and the image, too. Have a good weekend.

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The colors and birds in this artwork gave me a feeling of peace is coming.
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last puts
the poem all together. The poem flows and connect well.
Have a great weekend!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, Maria. I appreciate your comments about the colors and birds in the artwork, as well as your comments about the poem flowing and connecting well. You have a good weekend, too.

Comment from Cindy Decker

Excellent

Pam,
You've said so much in your beautiful Haiku poem:
First, there is the image of an array beautiful songbirds that are gathering for Spring's ripe berries,
then the last line gives your poem a wholesome summation of your poem.
Lovely work.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, Cindy. I appreciate your comments about the haiku, the image of the songbirds gathering, and the last line, as well.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

What a nice, cheerful poem to distract me from the news of the day. Thank goodness our song birds aren't all coming down with the virus. Now that would really be depressing. Lovely presentation! Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, Lou. I am glad you liked my cheerful poem. That would be depressing:) I am glad you liked the presentation, too. Stay tuned for more cloud skating Sun.:)

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Pam, I loved it , and I think you've written a wonderful continuation to the renga poem. I loved it and its wonderful imagery. II've just contributed but have to write a few review before I can promote it. Warm regards. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, Ulla. I am glad you liked the poem and thought it a good entry with good imagery. I just saw yours and reviewed it. It's great that this project is taking off. Everyone seems to be enjoying it and doing a good job.

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

What a beautiful rendition of this original contest. Your haiku is absolutely gorgeous, and I love your artistic presentation and artwork.

Good luck in the contest, this should do very well.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, Muse. I am glad you liked the haiku, presentation, and artwork. It isn't a contest. Just an addition to Gypsy's book. It's a great idea; hope you participate.

Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Pam,

You selected a great illustration to complement your verse. I am aware of your syllable count for this post and how the meaning would change slightly with an edit, but I would rewrite your second line to:

gather spring's ripe berries (and then add a single at the end of this line)

Mark

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, Mark. I appreciate your comments and the suggestion, but Gypsy has specific guidelines for the entries. I hope you participate. It rotates between 5/7/5, then a 7/7 by someone else. It is going well so far.

Comment from The Death

Excellent

Hi Pam,

Lovely imagery in this poem! Excellent word economy. The first two lines are grammatically interconnected. Nice use of seasonal reference as well. The third line is an fine interpretation of the images. It's indeed a harvest for those songbirds. Nice presentation as well. I enjoyed reading it.

Regards,
Anupam

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020

Thanks for the review, Anupam. I appreciate all of your comments about the haiku, seasonal reference, and concluding line, as well as the presentation.