Unbalanced
Unhappy marriage.3 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
There are so many angles to this question. You will draw the reader in to reflect upon whether they identify with this situation or not and what their story might be. You could look at the grieving needing to be done. You also might look at the red flags ignored, right from thre beginning. You could look at your own growth and possible changing. People change, some deceive, some just grow out of love. This is quite a topic created in just three lines.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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There are so many angles to this question. You will draw the reader in to reflect upon whether they identify with this situation or not and what their story might be. You could look at the grieving needing to be done. You also might look at the red flags ignored, right from thre beginning. You could look at your own growth and possible changing. People change, some deceive, some just grow out of love. This is quite a topic created in just three lines.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your insightful review.
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent,sad 5-7-5 poem
for the senryu contest.
Sadly, many have the same emotional experience
when things do go wrong.
Excellent picture to match.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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You've written an excellent,sad 5-7-5 poem
for the senryu contest.
Sadly, many have the same emotional experience
when things do go wrong.
Excellent picture to match.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review.
Comment from RodG
There is a lot of untapped emotion conveyed in the last line of this senyru. One wants to hear the Speaker's whole story, especially after looking at the happy smiles on the faces of BOTH the bride and groom. Marriage when it is right can be so good! But when it fails, there is no greater sorrow. Rod
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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There is a lot of untapped emotion conveyed in the last line of this senyru. One wants to hear the Speaker's whole story, especially after looking at the happy smiles on the faces of BOTH the bride and groom. Marriage when it is right can be so good! But when it fails, there is no greater sorrow. Rod
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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You are so right. Thank you for your wonderful review.
